LIFE'S SONG ⁓ (fear neither life nor death)

English Sonnet

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LIFE’S SONG

Beneath grayed cloak the evergreens reach high
to drink from air, their needles weighted full.
Limbs supple, softer than an unborn sigh,
subdued in mist, give way to Nature’s pull.

At night, soft whispers you may nigh hear of … 
o' do not fear and turn to run from such;
for, only ‘tis the kiss of winds above
in chilling flight … upon life’s lips, its touch.

Amidst those mists and shadows lies a shrine
of vine-made arbors … gravestones for the dead.
An angel stands its guard, by Death’s design,
that peaceful comfort wroughts when life has fled.

Should thee soar high, between that angel’s wings,
hold tight with faith; then, hear the song life sings.


Richard W. Jenkins
©2016

1st Place

FanStory International Sonnet Contest

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Author's Note

Picture: compliments of Google Images

Helpful-intended comments and critique are always welcome! : )

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

I like everything about this piece, from the word choice, to its softness, and quiet understanding of the interplay of nature, life, and death -- the earthly and the spiritual -- it is so warm and comforting, something I would hope to achieve within the context of a sonnet.

[Richard🖌]

KL,
I can reasonably expect your poetic potential to one day eclipse the skill it took to compose this piece, and I sincerely believe your aptitude is such that it will.
Yes, the Sonnet is one of the most versatile of all poetic forms, allowing great latitude to those whom master it.
Your take on this piece is genuinely reassuring; for, every nuance of your comments speaks it voice clearly and concisely.

it is so earnestly rewarding to share with those whom best "get it"! ⁓ Richard

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, KL.

[Hyacinth]

This is an eerie piece, filled with a disturbing sense of gentleness that makes it all the more wonderful to read. As always, your writing is filled with passion that can be sensed only through your words.

Another fantastic piece. I commend you, Richard.

[Richard🖌]

My Dear Hyacinth,
I cannot begin to tell you how your words have warmed me and gratified my deepest desire to write for and please my readers.
My heart virtually dances to the praiseful inspiration of your voice's music … thank you hugs all over! ⁓ Richard : )

[Lydia Shutter]

You bring sensuality into nature here "Limbs supple, softer than an unborn sigh"...such a gentle soft line! Kisses from the wind....lovely. Mother Nature revolves with the circle of life. Yes, it is a melodious song for those who listen! Graceful lines. When I finished reading, I wanted to sigh! Lydi**

[Richard🖌]

Oh, Dear Lydi,
How beautifully your intuitive mind and heart sees into the very essence of my words, interpreting the deepest nuances, as few ever do … you make writing and sharing a golden pleasure … sighhh*
Your grasp of this rather airy piece tells us we've connected on a rarely felt level.

My warmest, most grateful hugs to you, Lovely Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard : )

[Marianne Rose]

Beautiful, haunting, filled with soft vision and a depiction of nature as living, breathing and moving. I love the parts also about Angels, moving from the beauty of the trees above to mystical awareness. The poem is deeply moving, emotional and also thought-provoking- an excellent blend of vision, heart and mind.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you sincerely and warmly, Marianne*
When I see your name as reviewer on one of my pieces, a warmness begins to glow through my every fiber, because i know you're going to tell me we've connected in deeply meaningful ways, in ways few can and do, through the magical spell of poetry.
Those aspects of this piece you've highlighted are the very essence, and your comments genuinely reward and inspire me to keep trying.

My most gracious and grateful appreciation and thanks to you, Dear Marianne, you're a sparkling star! ⁓ Richard : )

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and good words shared. I like the ancient feel and thoughts in the poetry. The poem had the feel of deep thoughts and a prayer. Thank you Richard for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Richard🖌]

There is much honesty and sincerity in your words of praise and understanding, John, and so very much appreciation for them is thankfully felt within for them by me, My Friend.
I highly enjoy your expressed feelings and depth of thought derived from this truly unusual piece, as they are just as I had hoped they would be to my readers.

Thanks, John, most gratefully and warmly … many blessings to you! ⁓ Richard

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoy your work and you are welcome.