The River, the Clouds, and Us.... (longing)

The River, the Clouds, and Us.... (longing)

A Poem by Richard🖌
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Author's Note

Richard🖌
Picture: compliments of Wikimedia Commons.

Something set me into a wispy, dreamlike, drifting-off mood.

Please, feel free to offer critique, or anything you feel will help improve this piece! : )

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I love the cloudy images -- that stanza in particular is striking. The feeling of falling in love with a moody person, and the speaker is the calm anchor ...

one minor thing, I am sure it is just a typo or pesky auto-correct, but its journey does not require an apostrophe, unless there is something in that sentence I am missing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

That you've again blessed one of my pieces, KL … how very happy this makes me feel!
Then, t.. read more



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I love this wispy, dreamlike, drifting off poem. First the sunshine and 'imagining stories the river could tell.' Then the darkening skies ,'angry, petulant' (wonderful way to describe the rain filled structures) and relating it to the lady; and likening the poet to the river. Then, inevitably, coming back to reality after the reverie. A perfect poem. Really enjoyed it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Dear Astri! : )
Your interpretation is spot-on (not many get it), you praise, expr.. read more
I saw the rising tide as I sat along the river. I watched pretty much as you did. Feeling the need of love and finding it awash with the current flowing quickly past. Surely the waters will ebb and love will return as I watch the rushing waters waiting to be energized again.
You have such a distinct way of portraying nature and its' relationship to love.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Howdy, Dave! : )
How wonderful to receive your inspiring and appreciative words in review for.. read more
Dave

7 Years Ago

It is very easy to compliment the works you submit to us to read.
Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

You make it a joy to share, Dave … thank you! : )
You are a storyteller craftsman. This piece took me slow heartfelt journey. I'm intrigued and will be back soon to partake of more your talent.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Hi there, Michael! : )
It is an honor and pleasure to receive your welcome words of review in.. read more
'where summer sun will heat me,
and I’ll rise up into your arms
until you tire of me again,
letting me fall back to earth....
the way you always do. '

How many people have tried to say those words, tried to admit the emotions they wrap around, I wonder..

We little human beings are but ants in a world of love, hate and... something indefinable . Of course to each his or her own choice! Consequently, love's differences, passion's moods are surely reflections of our surroudings. You become the the gentle flow, your lover its curving course.

You take so much care with your work, Richard: display just so, punctuation dotted and dashed.. and then, there are the words set to your own music. Think this is a poem to return to, as much as a lesson as ...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emmajoy

7 Years Ago

For me reviews are a thank you for the pleasure of reading someone's WORK. And, if only a few word.. read more
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emmajoy

7 Years Ago

Think I'll wear this avatar for a while, it suits my sunshine mood. It was created by a superb illu.. read more
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I think "drifting-off mood" fits very well. I don't know why you chose this format, it was interesting to read yet also a tiny bit difficult to stay with the flow I found once but here & there lost a little.. Other than that, the images of nature and your choice of words for this one as good as in the other pieces I read by you. You'd definitely alternate between the different poetry styles, it's refreshing to read and you're talented at expressing yourself differently yet nicely.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

V

7 Years Ago

I can see that... It's interesting now lol but honestly way too challenging to read. Ever thought ab.. read more
Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Ha-hah!
I guess I'm just too complicated in my written thoughts, feelings, and emotions to ex.. read more
V

7 Years Ago

Thank you and you're welcome.
Beautiful thought and execution.
this piece puts us in a thought....
Claps are inevitable for this

Posted 8 Years Ago


Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Dear Poetess! : )
Iam ever-so grateful for your effulgently lovely review to this .. read more
wander girl

7 Years Ago

You're such an inspiration for young poets like me. Keep writing and I am obliged by your words. Hug.. read more
This is lovely, Richard.
Beautiful. It flows with a gentle melancholy all its own...a wistful longing.
I love this stanza:
I watched the gray clouds building,
bullying the white ones into submission,
their thunderous voices rising....
until it was clear who the victor would be.

Just beautiful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Dear Pam!
I am so happy you came across this unusually metaphorical little number,.. read more
This was really nice. The note you wrote about a dreamlike, drifting-off mood is something I can relate to. Love the poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Well, thank you, Ma'am!
It is my joy to please you and my reward to receive your inspiring wo.. read more
this is pretty darn good, enjoyed this write

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Hi, Kelcee! : )
Thank you, Dear Lady-Poet, for visiting my pages and for finding favor in an.. read more
Jade

8 Years Ago

thanx, have you a good day
Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

You, too, Kelcee! : )
Well,probably not one I should have read today when already feeling down..cause once again your writing is speaking to me. So many things I can relate to...but rather not mention on a public forum. But that emotional pull..is exhausting and painful. perfectly expressed in this piece.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Aw, don't give-up, Susan!
We both know life can often a way of evening out, if we can be pati.. read more

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Added on June 29, 2016
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