The River, the Clouds, and Us.... (longing)

The River, the Clouds, and Us.... (longing)

A Poem by Richard🖌
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© 2023 Richard🖌


Author's Note

Richard🖌
Picture: compliments of Wikimedia Commons.

Something set me into a wispy, dreamlike, drifting-off mood.

Please, feel free to offer critique, or anything you feel will help improve this piece! : )

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I love the cloudy images -- that stanza in particular is striking. The feeling of falling in love with a moody person, and the speaker is the calm anchor ...

one minor thing, I am sure it is just a typo or pesky auto-correct, but its journey does not require an apostrophe, unless there is something in that sentence I am missing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

That you've again blessed one of my pieces, KL … how very happy this makes me feel!
Then, t.. read more



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Very smooth and almost like a trance. You ha a way of lulling me into a fantasy world of your words. Calm, but yet fast paced like a river. It hummed with spirit and life as well. A very fine poem indeed

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

3 Years Ago

It's so lovely, Sarah ✨

The adjectives you've used in describing the sensations of .. read more
Wow You definitely set my standards high for future poems I read of yours! So imaginative and relatable. The first lines are my favorite! Have a wonderful Thanksgiving! -Kay

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

Hi, Kay 👋

What a wonderfully lovely and thoughtful review you've gifted this rathe.. read more
This has a classical, almost mystical feel to it as nature and the river become the metaphor for life's passage and the rage and calm it often offers. As with your more formal pieces it is word perfect, phrase perfect and so well constructed.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

Thank you, John, my honorable friend. ✊

I suppose there is little (if any) reason w.. read more
The magic of water, the secrets it whispers, and the cycle of life that depends on its path. I love what you did with this and the photo paired with it, so relaxing.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

Ah-YES, Dear Cherrie 🌦

This one is (maybe) overdone with metaphor, or from the com.. read more
Cherrie Palmer

4 Years Ago

One of the best parts of writing is when our small little vision of a thing is given life with each .. read more
Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

So wisely and beautifully related, Dear Poetess. 🌱
I sat in rain for hours,
thinking about how much
you are like those clouds at times,
angry, petulant....
ready to dampen everything
at the slightest provocation;

So well written and such vivid imagery, This is so very good.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

Dear Kym 🌱

It's difficult to tell which of us enjoy the other more, but let it suf.. read more
Just Kim

4 Years Ago

not a problem, I enjoy reading good, well written poetry.
Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

Gosh, Kym,
You sure do fill a poet with joy ⁓ thank You!
Never has the cycle of water been written about so beautifully, and I will never again sit beside a river without remembering this poem and thinking about the stories the river could tell. Many poems are forgettable; this one is not in that category.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

Ahhh-so, Roland 😃

I was wondering if there might come a time when you ran into acr.. read more
then, there's me … I'm like the river,
soaking you in, feeding on you,

You have a wonderful way with metaphors in your writes, This is so very good, I love the above lines.
wonderful write, keep writing always

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Kay-T, ever-so warmly and gratefully🌷

You always seem to pick the most .. read more
Loving anyone, especially over a stretch of time, carries with it challenges that aren't easily predictable at the outset. I really enjoy the way this poem explores the ways that relationships can bring together two different forces, and maybe there will be difficulties, but, also --out of the difference can come a richness of feeling.

The river and cloud analogy is lovely. The river itself can be wild, but here it is the calming, absorbing force that allows the wildness of the sky to let itself go as necessary. Depending on how this is read, I think the cloud force could be something negative (controlling or insensitive) or something enriching (bringing excitement and challenge). I suppose relationships have the power to shift within us day to day. Very little about our life experiences are fixed, so, what feels enthralling today may feel smothering tomorrow.

Your poem offers a sense of the changefulness of both nature and the human mind/heart. The reaching that all things do to find the perfect way to settle. Of course the settling is always temporary. But when that point is reached (even briefly) there's a peace. Still debating in my own mind on how this poem-moment is resolved, but there is a sense of a push-pull between peace and the tumult.

Love the photo you chose to pair with this, Richard. It offers a real sense of the layers of experience and the gray that can sometimes permeate. Really enjoyed this poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

Well, goodness-ME, Dear Eilis 🌾

Every now and again the site decides I don't need .. read more
I love the flow of this poem, so dreamy-like, yet also lovely description of moods, the way the clouds change, the way the sun peeks out; beautiful metaphors to nature; enjoyed your read,
Yours,
Betty

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

Hi, Betty : )

Thank you ever-so warmly for selecting this rather poignantly yearning .. read more
Betty Hermelee

4 Years Ago

I love your writing! Happy 2020!

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Added on June 29, 2016
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