Bound Hearts ⁓ (gratitude to love)

Fours 'n Eights

     

Author's Note

"FOURS 'N EIGHTS"
an original form
by: Richard W. Jenkins
© 16 Oct 1998

RULES:
Unlimited quatrain verses with the following Counts:
4-4
8
4-4
8

With the following Rhyme Scheme:
a-a
b
a-a
b

c-c
d
c-c
d

etc…
(I'll love it if you try one. If you do, please, let me know, so i can review it for you.)

All honest, constructive critique is welcome! : )

Reviews

[AliciaB]

This poem is absolutely beautiful. First of all, I am deeply impressed by your creation of such an intricate and lovely poetic form - that takes talent, and you definitely have it! I am personally a huge fan of internal rhyme, so this form is especially interesting to me. I really like the lines "for, love I send, our songs to blend / by virtue of fate's fervent choice" - lovely alliteration there. The simile of "your breath's as fine as bouqet'd wine, / soft whispers breathe against my face" is also beautiful. My absolute favorite part, however, is the final two stanzas. The image of tears and the complex, profound reasons for their shedding are uniquely portrayed and touching in their sincerity. My favorite part of all: "each heartbeat shares how much it cares, / bound hearts - as one, together rise." I cannot adequately express how beautiful those lines are to me. Thank you for sharing this. You are truly talented. Excellent, excellent work!

[Richard🖌]

"Goodness-ME, Alice!"

Ya gotta be careful to avoid swelling my head to the size my hat will no longer fit. ; )

Just teasing … I love every sweet, encouraging, and inspiringly warming word and accolade you've caressed and frosted me with. Now, where is that rope, so I can pull myself back down to earth.

What an honor it would be if you tried this form.
Hugs 'n blessings to You, Dear Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not my favorite style...but that notwithstanding i recognize a poet who does form flawlessly...and you seem to consistently do that, and still emit strong feelings from what you write.

well done, Sir.

j.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you Jacob,
You've proven to me so many times how much you appreciate my humble little efforts, regardless whatever form I've shared them in, proving how appreciatively open and flexible your mind and heart are to your fellow-poets' and poetess' earnest labors.

Thank you, also, for your generous praise and enjoyment, My Talented Friend! ⁓ Richard

[James]

Wonderful. What I love most, besides the story and the language you chose, is the perfect rhyme scheme. That's true dedication and meticulous writing.

Very nice.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, James, ever-so gratefully and and sincerely for such gratifying praise and commentary … you humble this earnest effort and please my hopes so kindly.
Many blessing to you, my thoughtful friend! ⁓ Richard

[Crimson_ish]

What a lovely poem! I think what evinces it is the beautiful form of the poetry, which gives it a musical flow of a ballad. An exuberant ballad of love, where nature and love come together to not only awaken cupid and his lovingly piercing bow, but also to serenade the very nature of love bound within hearts. It is overwhelming, delicious, and full of aspirations and need, love with it's separation from pride remains an emotion of not only vulnerability but the very primal nature, that transgresses a man within a being. What is so wonderful about this poem is that it's words and its music not only evokes the simplicity of love but brings forth the center of love that dwells not within our hearts but within our unconscious and soul, it is rustic, it is beautiful. Such an emotionally blissful piece :)

I am so thankful for this poem, definitely in my Top 10 of your works, Richard, you're blessed with tenderness that is lost upon this world :) Perhaps I will try this form, it is so gentle and powerful.

[Richard🖌]

Dear Kajal,
Having received such praise, appreciation, and blissful commentary from your beautiful, bountiful mind and heart, I cannot help but feel a definite weakening at the knees, as I sigh with the warmest, most grateful, pleasure … thank you sincerely, M'Lady!
Your gentle understanding in the essence of my poetry sends sensational waves throughout the senses, much in the way a morning plunge into warm tropical waters might feel.
If it's love, romance, and affection, it's sooo very primally satisfying to be a vulnerable man, and I become very easy.
Another marvelously rendered review to enthrall and sate a bard's passionate desire to please … warmest, most happy hugs to you, Lovely Kajal ⁓ Richard

[Crimson_ish]

Warmest hugs to you to, Richard, as always your appreciation of me outshines my appreciation of your poetry, virtue of a kind man :)

[barleygirl]

The thing about you that's remarkable & admirable is that, despite your penchant for crafting perfectly formed poems with gentle lofty messages, when you review other people's poems, you never hold them to the same exacting standards as you hold yourself. You are always uplifting & encouraging in your reviews, which makes us mere mortals feel a little less inferior to your own personal level of perfection.

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Margie!
To receive such accolades from one as accomplished as yourself is inspiration, praise, and appreciation beyond that which my humble labors might have expected … a most lovely and endeaqring surprise.
Thank you, Dear Poetess, from my heart … warmest hugs 'n brightest blessings! ⁓ Richard

[SleeplessVolcano]

ahhhhhh...4's and 8's....if you want to double the impact, choose a song to go with this that also operate on a similar structure.....I think our enjoyment of art - and poetry is art - is when the same message is repeated in different genre, nearly like the marketing message of a company, going via TV, print and social media....:) Sorry, I was a corporate animal, so that language still have to be exorcised....:P

I think a crucial message from your poem is the positive reality of bound hearts - modern society has over-valued so-called "relationship freedom", and often use the word "bound" in a negative context, pointing towards a situation where lovers may be stuck.

You have redeemed "bound".....for love is never free, when it is a free agent, it becomes emancipated in the bound love of a similarly sold out soul....:)

Now go redeem a few more words.....I am looking forward to reading them :)

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, My Friend, for selecting this little effort to read and review … I am honored.
I agree with your comments on today's brand of love and the connotations of what being wed/bound seem to have taken-on.
It is certainly reassuring that one of my poems has "redeemed" such an important aspect of loving relationships, too … thank goodness for that!
Though, I sincerely appreciate your effort to help this piece increase twofold in impact, I find music distracting when trying to enjoy and grasp the full essence of a poem; so, I'll leave that to other's preferences.

Thank you again, most humbly and gratefully! ⁓ Richard

[Angelheart1]

Dear Poet, the words you have so lavishly placed upon the page have touched the heart of this reader deeply. You have the capability of allowing the readers to FEEL your words which are filled with a very deep yearning and love for someone not within your grasp and it is heartbreaking. Although it has sad implications it is a beautifully composed piece of Romantic poetry.

It is my pleasure to read your poetry sir. Angel

[Richard🖌]

Thank your, Dear Angel⁓*
Your words are the glowing treasures every passionate poet composes in hopes of receiving.
You make my heart dance and my spirit sing with deepest gratitude and brightest joy.
Thank you and bless you with all the happiness and warmth you've bestowed upon me … hugs of most sincere and grateful appreciation! ⁓ Richard

[Angelheart1]

It is my sincere pleasure to read your words Sir. Angel

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Sir, this is a very marvellous and exquisite piece of poetry. It would make a nice, melodious song too. The form is excellent.
Love runs throughout your poem. Deep, profound emotions compounded with vivid imagery have made this piece an impeccable one.
The best and the profoundest feelings and ecstasy are aroused in somebody when he is with his lover. His mind wholly engulfed by true and powerful thoughts give rise to works of this excellent breed. Lovely. Keep writing.

[Richard🖌]

Vatsal,
I cannot thank you enough for sharing your thoughts on poetry and this little romantic piece, for your expressed enjoyment, appreciation, and encouraging praise.
You sure know how to make an olde bard feel grateful for his reviewers … big smiles to you, My Friend! ⁓ Richard

[Jacob Clifford]

Beautiful words. This poem truly feels like it was ripped from the lungs of a 15th century poet. It is elegant and very focused, not to mention wordlessly romantic.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you immensely, Clifford!
Your words of enjoyment, praise, and how you perceive the personality of this piece is simply inspiring to an olde bard's senses, My Friend … many wondrous days to you! ⁓ Richard

[Shabeeh Haider]

A very fine poem.
Some years back I had written a few poems following the above rules.
I am posting one of them today. You can have a look at it. It has the title: 'OUR BEGINNING"

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Shabeeth,
Your gracious praise is greatly appreciated,My New Friend, as is the happy news that my form has been adopted by another fellow-poet … thank you most humbly for that, too.
I shall be by shortly to read and review your effort.
Many grateful blessings to you! ⁓ Richard

[Richard🖌]

OOPS!
"Shabeeh" … mia culpa!