A SIMPLE THOUGHT ON UNITY (don't ask!) 😳

Free Verse (where does this stuff come from … LOL!)

A SIMPLE THOUGHT ON UNITY

~ to infinite blending ~

There is "emotion”,

there is "education”,

there is a way of "feeling" things.

I am all three,

you are all three,

they are all three,

we are all, all three.

I have seen them in each of us ...

I am “I”,

I am "you”,

I am "they”,

I am "we”.

Then, are we not all, also, each other?

Do we not cry with hurt the same tears as with joy;

although, with opposite feeling?

Feeling is the one quality that beckons within us all,

making us one, whether we are aware of it, or not.

If we should not know it,

it means we have no conscious attachment

within our souls,

not that we are separate in our feelings

or in our beings.

So, judge me not, lest ye judge yourself

at the precise moment ...

as, we are surely one,

... You and I ...

Richard W. Jenkins

©2016

"Only within our sleeping states of mentality are we separate entities,

while in the conscious mind it is known we are like water and air:

Where one ends the other begins, but not divisively;

for, one blends gradually into the other ~

as does night into day!"

Author's Note

Artwork by Adriane Enns … found on Google Images.

For "The Deep Thought" writing contest:
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Deep-thought-writing/52859/

Please, feel free to openly critique and offer constructive suggestions! : )

Reviews

[Seriana]

Richard!!! Thanks for passing this along! I did very much enjoy it! Funny, we dais the same things in different ways. The truth of things is really quite simple though. You've captured the essence of humanity here, if one would pause long enough to reflect.
Nicely done! I loved the presentation overall as well. The footnote and little note at the beginning about infinite blending. I think that's my favorite part.

Write on!

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Seriana 🌾

I thought you might find it interesting that we both metaphorically spoke of the true spiritually transcendental connections between us all.
Simple, yes … yet, a rarely addressed theme, poetically speaking.
It's ever-so pleasurable knowing you've enjoyed my version as much as I enjoyed yours … but, why not, seeing as how we are "one," You 'n I. ⚤
Surprise, surprise! The lines you've highlighted are among my favorites, too.

Thank you, Seriana, for your most gracious review! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

Connections go farther then most of us know. The energy of ones thoughts float through the air and often land on just the right person...who feels and understands.
I really do enjoy free verse poetry as I find it unique ... often full of hidden meanings.
The idea of Unity in your poem rings so true to me ... we are in the end all the same...hopes, desires, pain, etc. If we judge then we are actually projecting ...
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Brilliantly spake, Lady Lisa 🍁

The keen consciousness of intelligence, broad understanding, and connected empathy are definitely your forte.
Conclusively, most of our lives are so materialistically inclined and otherwise involved there is scant possibility of being on the same wavelength with others … thus, the bent of this poem, though, understood in theory, the actuality of living its essence will be lost to many.

Excellent review, Lady-Poet.
Thank you ever-so gratefully! ⁓ Richard 🖌

[Lisasview]

Your response to my review my dearest Richard gave me chills.
I am still experiencing chills...
You always use just the correct words to respond to reviews..
You are of course most welcome... my review flowed easily from me...
Lisa, now home from a rather long train ride ....

[Cherrie Palmer]

It's true we need one another and the better we relate to others the better we see ourselves.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you,Cherrie 🥀

There was no doubt you'd be the one grasp this rather transactionally bonding piece of poetical flavor.

Keep that lovely smile in your soul beaming! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Aura]

This is an interesting thought on Unity. Aren't we connected in more ways than meets the eye? We like to judge other people but at the same time we should also judge ourselves because we are also capable of having emotions, we have an education, and we can feel things. That is what we all have in common. Your free verse poem is interesting. I found that even though you repeat numerous words in your poem, it still reads rhythmic without sounding too repetitive if that makes sense.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Poetess,

You hit the core essence of this piece dead center.
This one is a great illustration for the range and versatility of Free Verse, and how meaning, method, metaphor, and depth can effectively exceed some of this form's requirements* and still be good Free Verse, *but not all of them.

Reading and studying forms teaches the writer to think outside the box while following the "rules;" yet, educating to the level where one knows when and how to effectively go beyond "them", and how far to go.

Thank you for reading and commenting … all the best! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Saumya]

This is indeed one of the most interesting ' pondering within a Pondering' sorta poem I've read here this far! And yes, I completely agree, though we may be just one being, but we are so much more than that normal one-character thing people see us to be.We play so many roles, we often ourselves don't realize!😊 Emotionally, intellectually, and behaviorly, we are all one and the individual of the same species, which helps us relate and percieve others and binds us so well!


Thankyou for writing and sharing this magnificent piece, Richard😊 idk what inspired you to write this,and I won't ask😀 but I'm glad to have read such a piece which was so logical and ponderable at the same time!😊

Happy writing!

[Richard🖌]

Oh-DEAR, Saumya!
I missed your amazingly wonderful review … I am sooo sorry, M'Dear! 😌 Please, forgive me?
Sometimes, the site does not notify me of a review, and this is the only excuse I have, but I'll make it up to you.
For as much as you believe this is "one of the most interesting poems", I believe your review is equally so, and even more, because you add new meaning and interest I did not consider … I love inspiration, and you are full of it.

You have, indeed, blessed me in a very special way, Saumya … happy hugs to you! ⁓ Ricjard : D

[Saumya]

*SMILE* my pleasure, dear Richard! and you're most welcome :)
(((Hugs back)))

[Coyote Poetry]

I love the twist words my friend.
"So, judge me not, lest ye judge yourself
at the precise moment ...
as, we are surely one,"
I liked the above lines. Thank you Richard for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Richard🖌]

Thank you immensely, Coyote John! ; )
You've highlighted the core essence of this piece, My Friend, but with your keen perceptions, I'm not at all surprised, but I am truly rewarded in a way only You can!

Be blessed, Dear Fellow Poet! ⁓ Richard : )

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked this poem and you are welcome Richard.

[Susan 🦋]

Well certainly something different from you...deep thinking Richard...what can I say?...as we are surely one, perhaps you can tell me? :-)

[Richard🖌]

Anything I know about it, Susan, is contained within the boundaries of this poem, itself.
So, you believe "deep thinking" is something different for me, eh? LOL!

[Susan 🦋]

OH no it's you all right. I said "something different"...as in writing style. mythology of expression: clearing some deep thoughts to ponder/and question...presentation: interesting..black, bold..no fancy cursive..it reflect the "deep thoughts' of this poem...No cute, lovey dovey imagery. Even the pic...leaves a question in the mind..

[Richard🖌]

My version of being lighthearted.
Very observant! : )

[Susan 🦋]

I think I should get a A for that.

[Richard🖌]

Oh, you'll get something, alright!
And, it's "an" A … LOLOL!

[Susan 🦋]

hahaha so right!

[Nisreen]

I love this call
To make this connection with this soul within
Only then do we find this love for others
And true sense of being

A very spirtual piece .... truly beautiful Richard

[Richard🖌]

Such a beautiful review,
it's just as lovely as you,
sends thoughts through
with deep emotions, too.
We're now one, not two*

Thank you, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard : )

[Nisreen]

Thank you Richard

[Hailey Juliet]

I really admire your use of language in this piece. Your words are not wasted, you write with fluidity and eloquence while keeping a deft and pointed simplicity. I think it is those qualities that make this poem work. I think if you had approached this concept with any more "fluff" and with less precision, the point might have been lost and the effect, dampened.

I also really appreciate he concept itself. I personally have not read a poem which tackles this idea in quite the same way. The line, "So, judge me not, lest ye judge yourself" really stood out to me as it really drove home the significance of the preceding lines; very powerful. I really cannot think of any significant critiques to offer you as I think this poem has been well conceived and is truly wonderful to read. It had a calming effect on me, almost as though i could hear someone murmuring the lines with hypnotic conviction. I come away buying into every word you offer. Very nice!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Hailey,
Your thoughtful, insightful, and intelligent review assure me my efforts to write, share, and please have not been wasted, as do your expressed praise and appreciation gratify my hope the simple message comes through clear and concise.
To fully grasp and be captured by the essence of this rather "different" piece (let's say), requires an open mind and keen insight … it seems you have no trouble, whatsoever, following the premise of its message.
How marvelous to write for someone who not only "sees" me, but who knows how to let me know they do … hugs 'n blessings of many thanks, Hailey, for such a delightful and meaningful review! ⁓ Richard