Blessed from above ⁓ (sensual dream)

Fives 'n Eights (see rules below)

   Blessed from above ~
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   'Twas on that Spring night ~
    two hearts soared in-flight …
    on soft wings, sprouted then 'n there;
    such bliss they both knew
    so rarely by few,
    two warm souls were reborn, I swear.

    Her angel face glowed,
    sweet love was bestowed,
    two hearts wed as one evermore.
    Her heart was as pure,
    as his heart was sure
    what fate breathed life into him for.

    Their yearnings entwined
    while stars came aligned,
    a course charted two hearts would take.
    Desires blended one
    as warm as the sun,
    each knowing they'd never forsake.

    There was nothing spared,
    their ecstasy flared
    a spark to ignite coldest blood.
    Ne'er before had came
    such wild, fiery flame
    to bloom full her pulsing rosebud.

    Each heart, soul, and mind
    with fervor combined,
    frames mated in climax-arched rush.
    Warm, pearl rivers flowed ~
    lovemaking bestowed
    with passion that made the gods blush.

    With moon shining bright
    some soft Springtime night,
    I'll soar high with You once again;
    to Bolero, dance
    in your sultry trance,
    tasting your lips' endless champagne.

    The mockingbird's trill,
    dove's soft cooing thrill,
    in ways only lovers can hear.
    This much is assured,
    no lovelier's heard
    by woman's or man's mortal ear;

    yet, time moves along,
    oft waning life's song
    that sang in sweet voices of love.
    Sure, we'll cry sad tears,
    but smile with sweet cheers ...
    for when we were blessed from above ~

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           Richard W. Jenkins
               © 9 Apr 2016



   Fives 'n Eights (or) Doubledown Style 3   
    Original form created by
    Richard W. Jenkins
    © 4 May 1987

    Any number of 6-line verses about anything:
    Aligned left or centered.

    Syllable counts per verse:
    5/5/8/5/5/8 in iambic meter.

    Rhyme scheme:
    xxxxa
    xxxxa
    xxxxxxxb
    xxxxc
    xxxxc
    xxxxxxxb

    xxxxd
    xxxxd
    xxxxxxxe
    xxxxf
    xxxxf
    xxxxxxxe

    Etc…

Author's Note

I would love you to try this form (it is an easy, enjoyable form to learn and make flow), and if you do, please, let me know, so I can read and review it for you.
Thank you so very much for reading this sweet sensual dream poem … here’s hoping you’ve enjoyed it!

Painting: Oil on canvas, from Wikimedia Commons.

Constructive critique is always welcomed! : )

Reviews

[JayceeC]

Oh I like this new form, and I might be able to reproduce it since it has no particular meter, we will see what I come up with.
Great imagery all through this and I'm not sure I can pick out one line or stanza that I particularly like more than others. Passion to make the gods blush, and tangos from Bolero, added to doves coo (I'm thinking mourning doves) adds up to a successful poem with an intriguing new form to play with.
never disappointed when I visit, you my friend.

[Richard🖌]

Beautiful review for this little number, Jan … thanks a million!
That you like my form is especially gratifying and pleasing to a hopeful bard's ernest efforts.
With your brilliant skills composing in one of my forms, it excites me more than just a little … please, let me know if and when you do.
You do know how to make me violently blush, and HOW!
Thank you so much, Jan, for praising and appreciating me … it means far more than mere words.
Hugs! ⁓ Richard

[Aidan Oberholtzer]

This is incredible.. wow man

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Aidan!
To your praise and expressed exclamation of astonished admiration …
I most humbly and gratefully bow! ⁓ Richard

[Elmarie]

Scrumptiously sensual poem. Where the passions of lovers combine. Beautiful work Richard. I thank you for your teaching approach and will gladly try this form and let you know how I fare.

Blessings

El

[Richard🖌]

Hi, El! : )
How wonderful of you to stop by to enjoy a read … you've bless my face and heart with a smile!
I love the word, "scrumptiously" … it's playful, delicious, even sensuous and highly expressive; it's a great poetic word that conveys so much.
I enjoyed your grasp of this cozy little piece of sensually descriptive romance, and your compliment means far more than my words can say.
To imagine you will give my form a go is gratifying and inspiring, indeed! Please, let me know when/if you do.

Many gracious and appreciative hugs of thanks, Dear El … happy blessings to you! ⁓ Richard

[Elmarie]

Hi Richard I tried this form and sent you a reading request. It was fun. You can find the poem here. http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Elmare/1791341/

Thank you

Blessings

El

[Richard🖌]

Oh-BOY! : D
How exciting, El!

[SJ Mullins]

I really don't know much about giving reviews, but I know when I read a beautiful and passionate piece, which I found this one to be. Remember in my reply to you on one of my poems you commented and how I said when I read other people's poetry I think to myself, "Man, I wish I could write like that?" This is only the first piece I have read that you have written, but I love it, and it is exactly how it makes me feel. I especially loved the line, "passion to make the gods blush." Not a line I would have ever thought of. You write beautifully, and I cannot wait to read more and perhaps even learn a thing or two. I know very little about writing poetry and the correct forms, etc., I just write, many times straight from the heart, and other times, to entertain. Again, a very nice splash of very passionate ink. :)

[Richard🖌]

Welcome to my pages, Suzanna … I am so excited you're here! : )

You're teasing me, right?
Why, M'Dear, this is one of the most endearing and encouraging reviews I've received … in fact, I'm copying and keeping it in my personal folder to read anytime.
That you've found such favor in this warm little piece and love anything about it is more deeply gratifying than my simple words can convey.
Now, you've really got me bashful from all the praise, as your poems are every bit as resounding as mine ever could be … we just have different styles. I love and enjoy yours very much, indeed.
I like that line, too … go figure! ; )
I am sure we will teach one another a lot, and I can barely wait!

Warmest hugs 'n happy smiles to you … thanks a million, Suzanna! ⁓ Richard

[SJ Mullins]

"I am sure we will teach one another a lot, and I can barely wait!" I feel the same. All My Best, Suzanna

[The Critic]

You obviously have skill, but this poem isn't quite my style.

[Richard🖌]

Hi there, Ern!
Welcome to my pages! ; )
I sincerely appreciate your visit, and most gratefully thank you for selecting this piece to read and comment on.
Thank you, too, for the nice compliment on my skill … I'll definitely take all the encouragement I can get. : )
Yep! I can certainly understand how this one might not suit your taste, as it is quite unique in presentation and form, or is it in the manner of wording, rhythm, rhyme scheme, ambience, topic, etc; and, I wonder, "could 'style' even mean its entirety?"

Perhaps, you might find something else among my posts that is more befitting your "style" … I truly hope so, Ern.
Many blessings to you! ⁓ Richard

[Richard🖌]

OOPS!
I screwed-up my first comment, as I took your name to be Em, but in closer look see that it's Ern, so you probably would not appreciate the grateful hugs I gave you for reading this one for me … LOL!

[The Critic]

It's the flow that really don't like. When it comes to poetry, I've always hated the numbers 5 and 10 for some reason. Lines with 5 or 10 syllables just sound awkward to me, which is one reason why I don't enjoy reading Shakespear's works (or more specifically, iambic pentameter in general). I love lines with 4, 8, or 16 syllables for some reason (I guess I just love multiples of four). I especially enjoy iambic tetrameter.

[Richard🖌]

Thanks for the feedback, Ern!
I guess many of us have our little poetic druthers over others … LOL!

Happy days! ⁓ Richard

[mattavelli]

Hello, Richard. :)

This poem's a treat,
its lines flowing sweet,
like the legs of a dancing girl
who's skirt bounces high,
exposing more thigh
with each spin, as you make her twirl.

Sent dizzy with rhyme,
in Fives 'n Eights time,
she could have smacked into a wall,
but you held her straight;
you're such a fine date,
I think I'd switch teams if you'd call.

[Richard🖌]

Delightful, Matt! : )
Good to see ya, M'Friend!

Super rendition of my form.read moreDelightful, Matt! : )
Good to see ya, M'Friend!

Super rendition of my form.
L1 is a syllable short … LOL: Consider, "This poem 'is' a treat,"

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Thanks for the fun smile,
it's been a long while …
let's not stay away for so long.
Your brand of writing
is quite exciting;
it reads like a naughty boy's song.

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Ha-hahhh! We're truly a hilarious mess, eh, Matt? ⁓ Richard

[mattavelli]

Sheeesh, po-em... Haha
Ya, I've been irregular here. How've you been? Keeping dry?

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Matt,
I can't even count anymore … LOL!
It's been a but soggy on the home front, but I've kept high 'n dry!
Thanks for asking.
"Po=em" … ha-hahhh!

[Lyn Anderson]

Nicely laid out and beautifully presented. I might suggest putting the mature tag on, but for whatever reason, form poetry that is of a mature nature in this place doesn't seem to be tagged.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, KL! : )
Many thanks for the message about that rogue apostrophe in L2, "heart's" … the typo monster overtook my keyboard … LOL!
Your praise and expressed words of appreciation are most wonderful to receive in pay for an humble bard's efforts … I bow most gratefully!
So not to give the impression I've ignored your admonition, I try to always be mindful and tag anything that contains vivid sexual content, raw erotica, or just plain nastiness … and, it might even be violence or destructive ranting, radical, or harmful advice, etc; that deserves a big red strip across the top.

Warmest smiles 'n many blessings to you, My Thoughtful Friend! ⁓ Richard

[Lyn Anderson]

I guess they are easier on you than me. I have to take anything that even has a mild suggestion or double entendre or face the MatureRatings police. I did put up the new one on the Five and Eights form -- it's mild enough it shouldn't require the pink bar.:)

[Gee]

Oh what a belter of a poem, one to be held up as the standard to be aimed for. You're good Richard, very good

[Richard🖌]

Well, Gee!
What humble bard could help but be dizzy from such bliss-filled accolades … you're rather "good" yourself, M'Dear … big, warm thank you hugs!⁓ Richard

[TricksyCoy]

I loved the rhymes you used here, (i.e. again... champagne) they show a sharp mind! The meter fit the poem exceedingly well, I thought, as it pulses with the two lovers. Really, very excellent!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you sincerely, Michael,
I am pleased you selected this long, but lovely piece of warmly affectionate poetry of sensual imagery to read and enjoy.
I particularly favor your metaphoric take "as it pulses with the two lovers" … quite poetic suggestive in itself. : )

Many blessing to you! ⁓ Richard

[Richard🖌]

Er, "poetically suggestive" I meant to say, and thank, too, for liking the rhymes and meter. ✨

[Tate Morgan]

excellent adherence top a rhyme scheme and metered well. Well done

[Richard🖌]

Thanks, Tate, for the technical commentary and nice compliment!

[Tate Morgan]

You are welcome I see poetry from a technical vantage.it is mathmatics and rhyme Set to a beat by meter > The question of any good piece is does it sing Yours does. Well done

[Fredyman100]

It's a sophisticated piece well constructed, I like it

[Richard🖌]

Thanks, Fredyman, for selecting another of my poems to reaq, for the comment, compliment, and for liking it.
Many blessings! ⁓ Richard

[Fredyman100]

U welcome, no u earned it