Written with air ... (dolor)

Written with air ... (dolor)

A Poem by Richard🖌
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Free Verse

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Written with air …

There may come a time
when thoughts dissipate,
like frost that lingered
as lace on green blades;
and, like early dew,
you are no longer here,
inside my mind, my soul ...
my heart unthawed
by life's sun 
bowing  out,

in abjured encore.


Where have our moments gone,
those that called us out to dance,
to warmly embrace it all,
to revel in laughter's afterglow,
shining with tears of forgiveness;
and, what of all the gold we shared,
our hours spent
in ethereal lovemaking?


I knew you - oh so well ...
the child inside,
the woman of you, too,
and all that life called us to be,
together ~
in the spark of eternal
forevermore.


Our days and nights,
spent wrapped in splendor,
thrust together,
entwined like vines
with insatiable fingers ...
swimming your pools
of endless depth,
those verdant portals
into your soul.


It is as though ...
a mystical wand passed over us,
and like the sigh
of a baby's first breath ...
here, in soft feathered touch,

... shhh!


Gone now,

forevermore ...
as if we, You and I,
were merely ~
Written with air.


Richard W. Jenkins
©2016


Not my best work, I know, but I needed to say something that felt real,
exactly as it crossed my heart ... I know you understand.
I didn't even stop to check for spelling ...

so very much unlike me ... LOL!
Any help is welcomed.

© 2016 Richard🖌


Author's Note

Richard🖌
Illustration: Wikimedia Commons

Yeah, I know, it needs something … any help will be appreciated. : )

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The vivid imagery in this one was so alluring... made me want to keep reading...and the ending was the best part. "As if we, You and I, were merely, Written with air" That line struck me. You are so talented at guiding the reader to feel every word spoken in your poetry. Another masterpiece!
Marina

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Marina Dear, most humbly and gratefully.💫

Soon enough, M'Lady, gracious.. read more



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Oh this one is fabulous... Tender~heart warming words..Deep love...
Lisa

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

1 Year Ago

More like deep sorrow and distress, Lisa 😔

I appreciate any time spent on this one.. read more
Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Good morning,
Interesting what one takes from any given poem....
Lisa
The vivid imagery in this one was so alluring... made me want to keep reading...and the ending was the best part. "As if we, You and I, were merely, Written with air" That line struck me. You are so talented at guiding the reader to feel every word spoken in your poetry. Another masterpiece!
Marina

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Marina Dear, most humbly and gratefully.💫

Soon enough, M'Lady, gracious.. read more
True to life ... and life is what we make of it. Deflated dreams are when reality sets in and the heart sinks to lowest depths and cries.We ask is it possible to forget those times that have made indelible marks on mind body and soul.


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Kitty,
Your words are so real, so knowing, so very deeply touching.
I realize your que.. read more
kitty

6 Years Ago

Thanks for understanding the rhetorical nature of my my review. I am sure other readers will unders.. read more
It is a wonderful expression of thought in motion. It is graceful and thought provoking.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Aw,
Gee, thanks, Cherrie.
Am new here.....and this was the first piece I saw on my feed and I enjoyed it.am looking to more

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Welcome to the site, and thanks for reading my poem.
Glad you enjoyed it, too.
Brush-u.. read more
Wonderfully expressed! Personally loved 'As if we, you and I, were merely written with air'. Amazing

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Hello, Anaya! : )
How delightfully lovely your words touch and praise an olde bard's hopeful .. read more
This is so beautifully descriptive and vivid! You're very articulate and eloquent. Detailed, but not verbose. You were able to describe things without sounding obscene. Instead, you were able to describe it as passionate and firey love affair. :)

Well done, Richard! :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Hi, Mari,
Welcome to the Café. : )
Your lovely and meaningful review of this rather p.. read more
"as if we, You and I,
were merely ~
Written with air."

I think this is my favourite of yours, Richard, after that French Kyrielle! The words you chose to portray the emotions really touch the heart (at least mine lol) and it does feel relatable too...
Beautiful read! (:

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Hi, Lady Yumna! : )
How wonderful to see you today, and to receive such an appreciative glow .. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Years Ago

You're welcome, Richard! A pleasure always reading your pieces (:
ok, it's still early morning.. and I've been hesitant to review this piece, been "ignoring it" for days...ok here it goes.Free verse and technique I'm sure, is spot on. general theme...you're killing me! :-p Overall feeling?...ouch ouch and more ouch! Forgotten love?.oh the pain! sweet loving memories and a question in regards to what and who is remembered.Hard to believe such things can be written in the air...and just blown away. Why and was 'it" ever real to begin with. Why must it be this way. idk.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Susan,
Though, I certainly appreciate and enjoy it that you've selected this piece to read an.. read more
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I think the way you structure it makes it more charming and lively. The picture depicts feelings written in air(I guess),the title also suggests something which doesn't have much impact. I think the overall idea is love.
I admire the vocab and I need to say, I'm drawing a lot of inspiration!
Wonderful! "shining with tears of forgiveness;"

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Tazeen,
Your thoughtful, in-depth, and insightful review truly has blessed my humb.. read more

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