there.... (first time)

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there....

                it still can

                be seen in a heart

                two initials

                carved carefully

                into the bark

                fourteen years

                two months

                nine days ago

                come midnight

                her young slender

                fingers guided him

                there....

                into

                his first glimpse

                of heaven.

                Richard W. Jenkins

                                  ©2016

                                 1st Place Winner

                                       

                             First Experience

                                     Contest

Author's Note

Photo by Shutterstock

Any well-meant, constructive help will be gratefully welcomed! : )

Reviews

[heavenscentgirl1]

Reading your words had me right "there" as I read this sweetly sensual little piece of heaven.

I loved everything about it, the descriptive words you've chosen, the easy to read layout and that gorgeous picture makes this an exquisite piece of artistry. Well done Richard!

Blessings, 🙏
~ mj

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Mary Jo,
Your lovely words of appreciation, enjoyment, and understanding tenderness in nostalgic embrace, truly gratify my humble efforts in composing and sharing this sweet little piece from my fertile imagination, hopefully, many will relate to and imagine from their own first experience.

Hugs 'n warmest blessings! ⁓ Richard : )

[lovelymarina]

Two souls enmeshed... basking in the sensuality of what we like to call Heaven. But this is heaven on earth already. Love is a beautiful thing.
Marina

[Richard🖌]

Ah, Dear Marina 🌾

If there is anyone who understood this wee romantically nostalgic piece of succulently tender sensuality, I knew it surely would be You. ; )

With my warmest hug of thanks! ⁓ Richard🖌

[GreenShoes]

Perfect. Wouldn't change a thing.

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Karen,
From You, this means so much … I'm blushing! ; )

[Carol Cashes]

"fourteen years
two months
nine days ago
come midnight"

Best lines. To know the time passed to such a degree fully explains its importance to the writer. All else is description. I liked this - compact and complete.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Carol : )
One could surely debate which part is what, but I enjoy your take, those lines you've highlighted, and the reason you did.

With warmest hugs! ⁓ Richard

[Najam Us Saher]

I like the way you have mentioned about the years months and days. That is so romantic to remember. It gives happiness when one remembers everything. Very well written.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Najam!
Sorry, but the site sometimes does not notify me of a review, and I have to stumble onto it.
Your compliments, expressed understanding, and enjoyment are truly gratifying.

Bless you, Dear Poet! ⁓ Richard : )

[Najam Us Saher]

Okay, I understand. No need to mention thanks. It is my pleasure reading your poetry.God bless you too. ☺

[horizon]

I really love this photograph doesn't matters how many times I see it...it looks so wonderful to me...I love the grass...always have a dream to go at such a place

[Richard🖌]

Yes, M'Dear!
Young lovers on the cusp of "discovery", wrapped in Nature's glory most certainly enthralls and warms one in so many ways.
Thanks for the second bit of my apple … wink* ⁓ Richard

[MsJewel]

I love romantic poetry and yours are words to sigh by! Absolutely beautiful in a sweet and charming way. Thank you for leaving me with a smile.
Julie

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Julie Dear!
If your smile were any more bright and alluring, I'd be warmed from the inside-out, without need of garb … LOL!
Thank you, Lovely Poetess, for you praise and enjoyment of my humble effort … you've left me with a very bright smile, too! ⁓ Richard ; )

[MsJewel]

My pleasure Richard!

[Richard🖌]

Mine, too, Julie!

[Angelheart1]

Simple > yet effective are your words. Congratulations on the Category win! Angel

[Richard🖌]

Big smile!
Dear Angel,
How sweet of you to select this cute, sensual little number to read and review … I am so very grateful to you for your gratifying compliment, too! ⁓ Richard : )

[Jenny]

BEAUTIFUL! I love a story that can be told so simply and have intircate layers. You have a way with words. And I also appreciate your format. Thank you for sharing! Keep writing! You're amazing! ~J

[Richard🖌]

Lo, Jenny! : )
I really like you take on this sweet little number, You are most welcome for the share!
Your words of praise and expressed appreciation truly swoon me … smiles 'n hugs! ⁓ Richard