Loving You ⁓ (a simple poem of love)

Quatrains in 8-count.

~ Loving You ~

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Love’s glow to light your spark’ling eyes

with wondrous flowers everywhere,

high rainbows arched ‘cross silver skies,

gold, shiny ribbons for your hair,

and all sweet joy can ever bring,

a love so vast that never dies,

songs for your tender heart to sing,

books of poems composed from sighs.

Then, as the year moves gently ‘long

that all is rightly filled with bliss,

and every call of each bird’s song,

thrills every sense like a warm kiss.

All these (and more) I wish for You ~

that there will never be a doubt

of what takes place in me all through ...

what loving You is all about.

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Richard W. Jenkins

©2016

Author's Note

Your helpful critique and comments are always welcome and appreciated … it's one of the most important ways we can learn and improve our skills! : )

Reviews

[DeerInHeadlights]

what a lovely lovely thought and a way to convey the feelings- the good kind.. you have a rare gift of being able to write out of the good rather than just the pain, which is what most people end up only being capable of. your heart is full. good stuff..

[Richard🖌]

I think you know love vey well, that you are not about love, love is about You … the essence and feeling from your words tell me this; it is not an easy thing to hide from one who recognizes it, same as you do in me.
Thank you ever-so warmly for reading me, and for knowing … hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[R.M.C]

What a beautifully composed poem. Your ability to make the words flow so effortlessly always manages to amaze me and the images and feelings that they conjure up are both powerful and insightful.

[David Scott]

It seems cliche to write love poetry, but it is exactly how love of this type feels. Everything, everywhere seems to inspire thoughts of your lover. Almost as if the world came to life because their beauty was the catalyst to every evolution of bliss... Oh how lovely does the blood pulse with love's addiction.
Wonderful to read such emotional memories.

[softlyfall]

Very romantic. I love the adherence to form, dine very well. The apostrophe in sparkling is unnecessary I think but otherwise syntactically excellent.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, dear lady-poet, for blessing me with your love of this poem's composition, its romantic tilt, and praise … your words are the sought-after compensation of a bard's labors.

Please, allow me to explain the well-placed apostrophe.
In order to set the pace and flow, and to maintain the line's even count of eight, without changing the words, the apostrophe became a necessity.
Let's consider the word "sparkling": sparkling; ˈspärkəliNG. As one can see, pronounced in its normal way, it has three syllables, and that would have put that line one syllable long … thus, "spark'ling", or it could have been written, "spark-ling". Poetry often seems to require a syntax all its own … LOL! Some call it "Poetic-License", and I guess I have to agree.

I love it that you've read and reviewed this simple little 8-count set of quatrains for me, M'Lady, and even more-so that you made it so interesting for us and our viewers.
We need more like you to spice things up … big thank you hugs! ⁓ Richard

[softlyfall]

Oh I see...yes I understand meter. I simply think of sparkling as two syllables, as i speak it. But much better to correct it :)

[Richard🖌]

Yes, this is an often mispronounced word … sooo guilty of it myself … LOL!
Thanks again, Dearest! ⁓ RJ

[Stefano Segnan]

Salute to you! The imagery you employed is quite vivid and it fallows a clear flow which makes it easy to read. The rhythmic form you used is admirable, it adds to musicality and thus the overall image you are trying to picture is impressing itself more markedly and continues to resonate in one's heart. The structure is classic but still exquisite. To put it simply, it's a great poem.

[θεά]

Ah the Romantics! This poem is so effective in bringing out feelings of romanticism and love, and all the other supine emotions that accompany this genre of poetry.

Like always, your meter is excellent, though I feel you've restrained yourself a little here?

Best,
M.

[...Relic...]

A great poem Richard. I enjoyed.

[Richard🖌]

Many thanks, Relic! ⁓ Richard

[Richard🖌]

Glad you liked it, too, My Friend. : )

[...Relic...]

I always do. Your rhythms are spot on and your stories within the poems worth reading.

[TwilightSky2003]

I totally totally totally loved this...! You really are an awesome writer (and i kind of envy you now). The way you express is really beautiful. Please do write more, i'd love to learn more from your poems and your use of words! :-)

[Richard🖌]

One compose poetry for many reasons, dear poetess, but none (to me) are more inspiring or gratifying than to have their efforts loved, not once, but three times in total abundance … my heart flutters!
Then (in addition), to be envied and have my work praised as beautiful — there is no fiber in my being that is not dancing, no ember left un-fanned … oh-MY!

I'd love for you to learn from me, too … I cannot speak how much.
Thank you ever-so warmly and sincerely! ⁓ Richard

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What a lovely heartfelt piece of artistry. Beautiful!

[Richard🖌]

Lynn,
You truly set me all aglow … thank you, dearest! ⁓ Richard

[Great Aunt Astri]

Simple? No, very sincere and comprehensible! You kept to 8 syllables per line and the rhyming words don't jar at all. Well I liked it a lot, sentiment and all.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, dear Astri!
How inspiring it sincerely is to know you like this wee homage to love, feel its essence, and to know you grasp the poetical skill in which it's composed.

Big hug of thanks to you … I feel so blessed! ⁓ Richard