Softly ~ in my dreams... (loneliness)

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Softly ~ in my dreams...

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Days turn to pain I cannot show,
nights into ever-endless streams.
Reaching to find I'm lonely; though,
I’ll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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My days, now empty without you,
to nights, no peace will come, it seems;
your touch I ache the long night through,
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Who'll grasp the beauty of my mind;
then, thrill my body to extremes,
or take my hand when I am blind?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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When scared, no one to hold me tight.
Oh, I shall know what life redeems ...
when all else dims, you'll be my light.
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Richard W. Jenkins
©2015

1st Place Winner

FanStory International

Kyrielle Contest

                                 Kyrielle                               

The Kyrielle is a French form written in Quatrain verses.
Each Quatrain contains a repeated final line or phrase as a refrain.
There is no limit to the number of verses, but three is the required minimum.
Normal rhyme structure is a/a/b/B, c/c/b/B, d/d/b/B, etc; with B being the refrain line.
Alternate structure is a/b/a/B, c/b/c/B, d/b/d/B, etc; with B being the refrain or repeated line.
Mine is in iambic meter, composed of eight syllables (4 feet) per line, but line length is author's choice.

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Author's Note

Painting: "Lonely" in oils, by Sergei Chepik
If you would like to try this beautifully expressive form and need help, just let me know.
It can be used for any emotion, mood, or topic.

Constructive (well meant) comments and criticism are always welcome! : )

Reviews

[June bug]

Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.

WOW!! I love this part, this is a wonderful write. I like your image you used as well
very nicely written

[Richard🖌]

Hi, JB 🐞

With such an effulgent review as yours, why would I want another? And, that you love anything about my humble poetry, think it's wonderful, and nicely written certainly sets the page warmly aglow.

Thank you you ever-so gratefully for gifting a smile! ⁓ Richard🖌

[MsJewel]

I enjoy writing in forms, but sometimes the words turn out forced. Your words flow beautifully in this soft and lovely kyrielle. A joy to read :) Julie

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, Julie 🥀

It is ever a joyful blessing to receive your ever-warming personal touches, with embracing words of pleasure and praise in honoring my truly passionate poetic efforts.

With my warmest hug of happiest thanks! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Cherrie]

Richard, "Lonely" is a masterpiece.
What a beautifully expressed Kyrielle. Your poem the high gloss of expression showcasing the loss of a soulmate. The words and the painting created for each other.

[Richard🖌]

Bless you, Lady Cherrie 🍒

I am so very grateful you choose to read my humble poetic efforts, M'Dear, and that you always perceive something special and praiseworthy makes every effort made to write and please a wonderfully inspiring reward.

Thank you, My Very lovely, kindhearted Poetess! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Ankita Dwivedi]

The repetition of that line at the end of each para amazingly strikes harder as one moves forward through your poem . Love sometimes feel distant , but it is love and love alone capable of decreasing all distances .
What a delight it is to read you , your words and lose oneself in the magic you spill with your wand .
yours dearly , Ankita

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Ankita Dear, ever-so warmly and gratefully 🌸

Your expressed feelings, bright praise, and keen understanding combine to gratify a bard's most fervent hopes of being enjoyed and highly regarded by those special in his heart and mind.

A hundred hugs 'n smiles to thee, Lovely Poetess! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Audrey M.]

Have you ever read the words of another and wish you'd thought to write it? These are one of those rare times for me. Been there as you describe but could never write my feelings as eloquently as you. Charmed by your poetry my friend. Truly I am

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Dear Lady-Poet😌

You have genuinely blessed and humbled a hopeful bard, in such a way there could be no greater compliment than you've bestowed upon him.
And, on top of ultimate praise, you layer-on eloquent and charmed.
Truly, you are charmed, and I truly am totally spellbound.

Thank you ever-so warmly and sincerely … big hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Haley]

Oh man, I am really in my feelings today. I rarely have actual tears form when reading something, but this is really sad and beautiful and well done. Thank you!

[Richard🖌]

G'day, Dear Haley 😏

The beautiful sincerity of your words touch my gently caring heart; for, to know something I've written brought tears to your eyes means more to me than my meager words can adequately convey.


You are so very welcome; I thank you equally, Haley … hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[danielle.]

This is so sad! I find it amazing how words put together well can make any emotion into something beautiful, even the ugliest of them.

[Richard🖌]

Yes, Lady Elle 🌾

I think your shared knowing, insightful thoughts, and palpable feelings are very true … in fact, I've heard it said by others, too, that poetry can find beauty, even in the saddest of moments. I am truly thrilled you've found that certain kind of beauty in this sad and lonely piece.

I would love to see your name below your first Kyrielle … with warmest hugs 'n thankful smiles! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Just Kim]

This is such a wonderful beautiful write Richard.

[Richard🖌]

Yes, Kim Dear 🌾

I've heard it said there is a certain beauty in sadness … hugs 'n blessings of grateful thanks! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Rye]

A very lovely write indeed, I like this piece a lot. flows wonderful

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so warmly, Ryanna,
For reading this rather deep piece and for your praise in result.
I hope you made note to the details of a Kyrielle.

Bless you on this day of romance and love! ⁓ Richard : )

[George Coombs]

I love new things and I had never heard of a 'Kyrelle before so great to discover this. This form seems well suited to your theme here Richard and the 'refrain line' for me is a powerful means of getting the feeling across. Sgain a well chosen image that blends so well with the writing

[Richard🖌]

Thank you most gratefully, George! : )
Yes, the Kyrielle is both a beautiful and challenging form, one you may well enjoy applying your considerably creative skills to.
It seems you grasp the essence of it moment quite nicely, too.

Another excellent review from your knowing pen is inspiring and rewarding, indeed! ⁓ Richard : )

[George Coombs]

Your welcome richard