I wonder, "Why?" (life's bliss)

I wonder, "Why?" (life's bliss)

A Poem by Richard🖌
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Blank Verse

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                        As morning wakes, I stir to sounds of life.

                        It's not the normal kind of life I hear,    

                        but of an ilk that stirs the heart and soul;

                        a loveliness that cannot be denied.


                        How is it that I fall in-love with sound

                        when songs of birds' sing melodies to me,

                        as crickets saw their hymnal mating rites,

                        and laughing children fill me full of joy?


                        Oft, times I've sat and questioned how I fit,

                        of what my purpose here on Earth may be;

                        and, then I look around and wonder why,

                        with all the beauty ~ I would even care?


                                               Richard W. Jenkins

                                                                     ©2015

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© 2023 Richard🖌


Author's Note

Richard🖌
BLANK VERSE
Lines must not rhyme.
There is no limit to number of lines.
Each line is composed in iambic pentameter*.
(*10-syllables pronounced in natural soft/HARD cadence/meter/tempo or flow)
When reading a properly composed Blank Verse poem, one will notice that a line flows so smoothly and seamlessly into the next it is not noticed there is no rhyme, yet it seems there was … this is the heart of Blank Verse and the challenge, both produced by word choices, their arrangements, and the iambic meter, of course.

Constructive critique is always welcome. : )

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'I wonder "Why" (life's bliss)
Richard,
From the title to the morning beauty image this is a poem seen with the heart. Creative words flow and sing within this poem. Birdsong, breezes carried on on morning dew. Inspiration all over the place! I needed to read this.
Thank you for being you.
Kathy

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

1 Year Ago

Ahhh, Kathy, m'lovely poetess faire 🥀

How I've missed the sweet pleasure of your d.. read more



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'I wonder "Why" (life's bliss)
Richard,
From the title to the morning beauty image this is a poem seen with the heart. Creative words flow and sing within this poem. Birdsong, breezes carried on on morning dew. Inspiration all over the place! I needed to read this.
Thank you for being you.
Kathy

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

1 Year Ago

Ahhh, Kathy, m'lovely poetess faire 🥀

How I've missed the sweet pleasure of your d.. read more
A lovely poem and enjoyable read. I just have two minor critiques. I've never heard anyone use the word ilk before, aside from that, the poem is all familiar words, which makes for a fluid read. The other thing is, I would say the comma should go after Oft times, not Oft.
It was interesting learning about Blank Verse, I've never tried one.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the gratifying compliment, Karen.
For virtually everything, there is an apt wor.. read more
I liked the words and thoughts. You led the reader to true and perfect ending. The gift of nature. Paradise for the wise. Thank you Richard for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Thank you ever-so gratefully, John,
Your words in review touch my poet's heart and inspire my.. read more
Coyote Poetry

7 Years Ago

You are welcome my friend Richard.
with all the work needed to fulfill the iambs .. i guess it doubly hard for you (who prefers the rhyme) to keep yourself from it ;)
thanks for my new found form ..definitely putting it in the incubator .. the scene you paint occurs outside my window each morning as i look past my computer screen .. it seems a long time since i questioned my purpose ..my youth's energy all spent on it and the adventures it produced .. but your closing lines is such a gentle reminder to stop and look and listen to our world each moment ..well said sir! very inspiring for me
E.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Thank you ever-so gratefully, Dear Gene! : )
Actually, if you'll take a trip down my list of .. read more
Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

now i am on the hook to do it ;) thank you sir and blessings on you as well
Very nice piece of blank verse, with traditional imagery if not a traditional message. It almost seems opposed to the PC stance until the reader realizes that there is no need too wonder about something that is so much part of who you are.
My only caution here is that the "when" in line two of the second stanza seems like you are speaking of the bird sing as a certification, not as part of the whole. It three me if a bit on first reading do that I had to recite the stanza again.
A nice piece of blank verse that is well metered, but I would expect no less from you.
Thank you for sharing this thoughtful piece.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Jan, for beginning with a nice compliment … you've bade me warmly smile!

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There's so much to miss in this world. The beauty of simple sounds is often overlooked. Joyous is the sound of a dogs smacking in snuggled contentment, coffee percolating, the soft birds chirping outside, the breeze in the pine trees, water in a brook. I could go on...lovely poem Richard

Posted 8 Years Ago


Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Again, Jenn,
Your words dance in harmony with my own thoughts and feelings, as though you liv.. read more
a beautiful rhythm and flow, and a beautiful message, I liked it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

9 Years Ago

Such an economical review, Marcus, but much appreciated, nonetheless! 〜 Richard
Both genre and content is so fine, don't think i'll ever attempt blank verse again or - miss the sound of the dawn chorus colouring the horizon. You've been peeping at my world, heard it, felt it.. and so should we all. Don't you think? Your lesson is willingly learned, your words much appreciated.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

9 Years Ago

Yes, Dear Em, I do think! : )
Of all, I am not in the least surprised it would be You who get.. read more
This is a fabulous piece, and has a magnificent flow and a dreamy air. The subject, of course, is wonderful, the beauty of nature, and the way you bring this out delicately with your wondering of how you can be so captivated by the simple things, like the song of a bird or the sound of a cricket, is most excellent. These are bewitching things, and your readers easily relate.

This was greatly enjoyed. This write clearly showcases the powerful ability of meter to hypnotize the reader.

Very best regards,

Rick

I generally don't like to publicly post suggestions I make to other writers about their pieces. I like to do this privately. However, Richard asked me to post my letter and his response. So despite my feelings about such things, I will bend to his suggestion. So, for better or worse, below appears my note to him and his e-mail reply.

------------- My note to Richard ----------------

Dear Richard,

I greatly enjoyed reading your poem. Technically, I think the poem is about as perfect as I've read on WC. However, I did wanted to comment that the ending seemed rather abrupt to me, and at odds with the rest of the poem. The first part of the poem has me convinced that you care very deeply for the beauty of nature and "life's bliss". Ending the poem with wondering why do you care if you fit in or not seems in conflict with this theme. I would think you'd want to fit in very well and to harmonize with nature. So I suggest some different ending. For example, you might end with

"and, then I stop and breathe in life--oh my--
embrace creation, and sit back and sigh!"

Or something to that effect. I do not wish to put words into your mouth, as you have done such a marvelous job with this piece.

This was greatly enjoyed.

My best regards,

Rick

------------ His reply to my note ---------------

Thank you, Rick.
Please, post this into your original review, that others may, also, benefit and learn by your comments and suggestions, and I will respond there, as-well.

------------- One final comment --------------

Yes, Richard, I realize my two ending lines rhyme. So a good reason, perhaps, for you to change my wording if you want to strictly avoid a rhyme. But I'm sorry. I'm a rhyming poet, and it almost comes through that way without me even being aware of it. -- My best wishes!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rick Puetter

9 Years Ago

Hi Richard, I think I understood it that way when I read your piece. Your response and motivation .. read more
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Richard🖌

9 Years Ago

Thank you, again, Rick … may you be blessed! 〜 Richard
This lovely poem has inspired me to do my homework, but I fear I am challenged by iambic meter. Thanks for introducing me to blank verse, and for this beautiful example. The last four lines are my new substitute for all the world's sacred texts!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This comment has been deleted by the poster.
Richard🖌

9 Years Ago

Yes, that is the idea, Roland Dear, to inspire you to dig-in and take care of your lessons, acceptin.. read more

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