A Peaceful Hush (her morning)

Mollietta

A Peaceful Hush

Through sheer lace curtains
 sunlight greets her eyes,
 to early dove song’s
 cooing calls to rise.

A stretch, or two,
 the shutters then thrown wide ...
 life’s splend'rous wonders
 on display outside.

Lies morning dew’s brocade
 spread 'cross the lawn ...
 caught in each drop
 glints sunbeams'
 spark'ling dawn.

Rise steamy mists,
 in ghostly arabesques ...
 stand floral colours,
 tall and statuesque.

Wends warmly through …
 a gentle breeze’s brush,
 while all around takes on
  … a peaceful hush.


Richard W. Jenkins
 ©2015

"1st Place Winner"

in

The Blue Rose Challenge

Author's Note

"Mollietta"
An original form created by Mollie Reckitt, from Ely, Cambridgeshire, United Kingdom, in 2013.
Rules:
No limit to number of verses, with a five verse minimum, each verse has twenty-syllables in any configuration, rhyming is author's choice.

Picture, compliments of Wikimedia Commons.

Constructive critique is always welcome! : )

Reviews

[Jacob Clifford]

You know, it surprises me just how big an impact font can make on a reader. Normally, the words themselves would have to set the tone, etc etc. With every poem of yours I've read, the font (and accompaniment art) sets the stage and casts a gentle, romantic light on things. Then you, instead of using the font as a crutch, seem to use the already-set ambiance as a stepping-off point. You use your words to carry the reader through the poem like a leaf caught in a gentle summer's breeze.

Having said all that, the font doesn't take away from the words themselves, which can stand completely on their own.

One thing I like about your poems is that they aren't the typical perfectly-structured-flawlessly-rhymed love poems. Rather, they speak in romantic terms and simply set the tone for a romantic setting. There is enough mystique to make the minds of the readers work and think of their own happy places.

[Richard🖌]

Goodness-ME, Jacob! 🤔

Beautifully spake, dear poet.
How I ever missed your in-depth, insightful, and highly appreciated review I'll never know, but it's very fortunate for me I finally found it, as your assessments of my humble efforts offer much inspiration, gratification, and enjoyment to an olde bard's hopeful ear to write for and fulfill his readers expectations.

Thank you ever-so sincerely, Jacob, sorry for the late return.
Yours truly ⁓ Richard 🍃

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, Richard, this is so romantic...breezy, easy rhyme that just floats into the readers aura, like the sunshine slipping through the shades...

j.

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Jacob!
To receive a "wow" from your amazing pen, My Fine Friend, is payment beyond expectation, but the poetic graciousness of your words both energize and inspire my rusty olde pen to again spring into action … exactly the encouragement needed.
Thank you so very much, Jacob, for selecting this gentle and unusual piece to read, enjoy, and review! ⁓ Richard

[Cryingkate]

Richard, Of coarse your poem was Beautiful as always but the best part for me was learning the new beautiful word. " Wends" I'm afraid it stole the show :-) Yet actually the one words empresses your whole poem. Almost as though you wrote the poem to express the word.

[Richard🖌]

How wonderful your presence truly is, sweet Connie!
The encouragement in your lovely words for this poem both inspire and gratify my humble efforts to write, share, and please, and for them I joyfully thank you, M'Lady.
You've certainly selected an apt word to build the essence of this poem around, M'Dear, and I love how you've done it … yes, I, too, appreciate that splendid word.
Warmest, most gracious hugs to you, Connie! ⁓ Richard

[Chris]

I wouldn't dream of critiquing a soft spring interlude of an angel...

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Chris,
Your words serve to assure that I've shared something worthy of note.
Many blessings to you, My Friend! ⁓ Richard

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

I listened to the song on YouTube - the one I watched was from the 60's and was an experience in itself! What a beautiful and peaceful song and what a voice!
On to your lovely and equally peaceful poem! I feel the celebration of the day in this. The time to take in the glorious and intricate simplicity of the awakening of day. You convey a feeling of "all is right with the world" and it was like a breath of fresh air. Your skill with words and form is amazing...

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Claire!
Yes, that is the song, and you deeply please me by finding and appreciating it in such a wonderful way; indeed, you make my heart smile! : )
Then, what more could a humble poet wish for, than that a beautiful poetess would undertake to enjoy his ernest efforts so generously and sincerely … that she grasp the essence of his poetic meanings?
I truly cannot answer this, because you've joyously exceeded my expectations.

How can I possibly thank you enough, Claire … my most grateful hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[L. Michelle Corp]

Ethereal; a moment of daily life is honored here with your inspired words. The dew, the doves, the steam emanating from the lawn--things that pass us by daily but seldom are appreciated for their grace. I am not a poet so I can't offer critique. I especially adore this:
"Rise steamy mists,
in ghostly arabesques ...
stand floral colours,
tall and statuesque."

Thanks for sharing,
LMC

[Richard🖌]

Well,
You may not be a poet, but your words of appreciation, recognition, and praise speak from the depths of a poet's heart.
I am rather partial to those particular lines, too. : )

You are most welcome, LMC, and I thank you most gratefully, as-well! ⁓ Richard

[Gee]

Another wonderfully descriptive and crafted poem.For me,the best time of the day,just me, the pooch,coffee and silence.....heaven

[Richard🖌]

Oh, Gee!
I love the moment and vision your beautiful words portray … a poem in themselves.

Thank you ever-so warmly! ⁓ Richard

[marcus]

a beautiful form and flow, and lovely images. Yet somehow it seemed to lack any deep emotion or feeling to me.

[Richard🖌]

Welcome to my pages, Marcus, and thank you for reading this lovely piece and leaving such inspiring praise.
The title "A Peaceful Hush" and easy spirit in verse content are self-explanatory, but I don't know that any would agree there's a lack of "any" deep emotion or feeling, and there should be ample "feeling" derived by each reader in their own way(s) from the vivid scene of Nature's splendor, itself.
Still, I know that poetry can often be quite subjective to the preferences, capabilities, and emotional, mental, and spiritual depths of the reader.

Thank you for the openly-honest review, My New Friend! 〜 Richard

[marcus]

I'm sorry, but I don't quite feel qualified to give you critique, the best I can do is tell how the poem made me feel. And of course poetry can be very subjective.

[Richard🖌]

What's to be sorry about, Marcus?
You said it honestly, as you felt it, and I, also, stated that poetry is often objective, etc; and I thanked you for your review, as-well.
Your review prompted an effort to try and help you better grasp this work's deeper essence … the author's prerogative.
Thanks again! 〜 Richard

[Richard🖌]

OOPS!
I meant "subjective" in both my comments, as you said, Marcus.

[Roland Petrov]

Lovely, Richard, as always. I can figure out the Mollietta to some extent, but it would be good to know the rules before attempting one.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you most gratefully, Dear Roland, for your very appreciated praise.
Yes, My Friend, I am confident you would eventually have figured-out the rules, but I am remiss for not furnishing them with my post.

I look forward to enjoying your Molietta; please, let me know when it is posted … thanks again, Roland, for selecting this one to read and for your gracious review! 〜 Richard

(rules are now included … sorry 'bout that) =]

[Arline]

Such a lovely piece that expresses the glow of a new day and the ones who will embrace it to the fullest! Great work Richard:)

[Richard🖌]

You've sweetly blessed my evening, Arline, with a nice warm glow from your lovely comments and humbling, but grateful, praise for this earnestly gentle poem.
My warmest thanks to you, Dear Lady-Poet! 〜 Richard

[Arline]

Your truly welcome my friend :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Beautiful piece!
Full of lovely warmth.
Great write!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome! Good day!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you so much, Dear Lady-Poet … a wonderful day to You! 〜 Richard