A Peaceful Hush (her morning)

Mollietta

A Peaceful Hush

Through sheer lace curtains
 sunlight greets her eyes,
 to early dove song’s
 cooing calls to rise.

A stretch, or two,
 the shutters then thrown wide ...
 life’s splend'rous wonders
 on display outside.

Lies morning dew’s brocade
 spread 'cross the lawn ...
 caught in each drop
 glints sunbeams'
 spark'ling dawn.

Rise steamy mists,
 in ghostly arabesques ...
 stand floral colours,
 tall and statuesque.

Wends warmly through …
 a gentle breeze’s brush,
 while all around takes on
  … a peaceful hush.


Richard W. Jenkins
 ©2015

"1st Place Winner"

in

The Blue Rose Challenge

Author's Note

"Mollietta"
An original form created by Mollie Reckitt, from Ely, Cambridgeshire, United Kingdom, in 2013.
Rules:
No limit to number of verses, with a five verse minimum, each verse has twenty-syllables in any configuration, rhyming is author's choice.

Picture, compliments of Wikimedia Commons.

Constructive critique is always welcome! : )

Reviews

[Jacob Clifford]

You know, it surprises me just how big an impact font can make on a reader. Normally, the words themselves would have to set the tone, etc etc. With every poem of yours I've read, the font (and accompaniment art) sets the stage and casts a gentle, romantic light on things. Then you, instead of using the font as a crutch, seem to use the already-set ambiance as a stepping-off point. You use your words to carry the reader through the poem like a leaf caught in a gentle summer's breeze.

Having said all that, the font doesn't take away from the words themselves, which can stand completely on their own.

One thing I like about your poems is that they aren't the typical perfectly-structured-flawlessly-rhymed love poems. Rather, they speak in romantic terms and simply set the tone for a romantic setting. There is enough mystique to make the minds of the readers work and think of their own happy places.

[Richard🖌]

Goodness-ME, Jacob! 🤔

Beautifully spake, dear poet.
How I ever missed your in-depth, insightful, and highly appreciated review I'll never know, but it's very fortunate for me I finally found it, as your assessments of my humble efforts offer much inspiration, gratification, and enjoyment to an olde bard's hopeful ear to write for and fulfill his readers expectations.

Thank you ever-so sincerely, Jacob, sorry for the late return.
Yours truly ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This form and your imagery here is mesmerizing, Richard. And what a lovely ending, definitely a peaceful hush on my side while I finished reading this.
Your writes always make me want to try something new, as I will be soon trying this form ;)
A well deserved 1st place. 🌸🍂💞

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Yumna Dear! 😳

I cannot believe I missed one of your always beautifully laid, encouraging, and appreciative reviews … this one is simply wonderful -- a warm and gently voiced poem in itself.
Sorry it's been sooo long you've waited, but I love your every word all the more.

With hugs 'n warmest blessings, M'Lovely Lady-Poet ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Susan 🦋]

Ohhhh this is how I feel when I'm in my garden in the early morning!That peaceful hush when everything is baptized in the morning dew!..lovely!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you warmly and gratefully, Susan.
Yes, isn't it such a glorious place to be. : )
What do think of this form?

Hugs! ⁓ Richard

[Richard🖌]

Astute, but not exactly: Read the rules beneath the poem, M'Dear, and share your garnered thoughts.

[Richard🖌]

The "form" is listed under the title, as they are in all my poems, and the rules are in the Author's Note for all to see, and I assumed you would have.
Actually, "pretty"wasn't what I was after, but it'll do … LOL!

Thanks, Susan. : )

[Richard🖌]

Well, you know a good bit, and that's a good thing, eh? : )

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I really have no words for this!
-Breathtaking
-Magical
-Beautifully syntaxed
I like the "arabesque".
Mesmerising morning!
Of course, this is one of a kind and award winning.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so warmly and gratefully, Dear Tazeen, for the loveliness and appreciatively warm touch of your words.

I am blushing blodly* ⁓ Richard ; )

[Tazeen Ahmed]

You're welcome greatly!:)

[GreenShoes]

Have you noticed that you sometimes spell words the British way? Colours instead of colors, grey instead of gray, and I've seen you rhyme "again" with "pain," meaning you're pronouncing "again" the British way. Is there a reason? Just curious. :)

[Richard🖌]

Of course, I'm a poet, and have license to utilize whatever dialect I choose.
Alternate language usage is common and accepted practice, and I use it wherever, whenever it's convenient for my needs.
Karen, is this your review for this lovely poem?

[GreenShoes]

No, not a review, just an observation. This is, without question, a lovely poem. It shows us a beautiful, peaceful morning that the reader can visualize, and I especially liked the part, "Rise steamy mists,
in ghostly arabesques" but, and I might sound crazy here, it felt like life through the eyes of a pampered princess, all is good 'for her.' She stretches, then throws open the shutters, sounds like a Disney fairy princess. Not all poems will appeal to all people; I recognize that this is a well-crafted, peaceful, beautiful poem, but other people will enjoy and appreciate it a lot more.

[Richard🖌]

Well, I am so pleased you found some suitable favor in this piece, Karen.
Its intent is to entice a feeling of peacefulness from the imagery of God's beautiful creation, rather than the less enjoyable inferences you perceive.

Sorry, I was not able to get that across for you … better luck next time, eh? : )

[GreenShoes]

Once a poet posts his/her poem for all to see, his/her job is done, and the job is now in the hands of the reader to interpret, or misinterpret as he/she sees fit. You did not fail in any way; you don't have to be a reader-pleaser. Just make yourself happy, that's all.

[Richard🖌]

If my goal in sharing my work were to please myself, I'd have no reason to share it with others.
read moreIf my goal in sharing my work were to please myself, I'd have no reason to share it with others.
My aim in sharing is to entertain and please my readers, to receive their feedback, praise, and anything that may help me improve my skills.
My only reward and gratification is their enjoyment and understanding of my poetic efforts; for, it's then I know have been successful as a creative writer of poetry, and having said that, I realize we're not all painted with the same brush in our goals and purposes … each to their own. : )

[GreenShoes]

Part of your message has disappeared, unfortunately. It's interesting to discuss why people share their poetry online.

[Richard🖌]

Yeah, the site does that sometimes … an unfortunate glitch, but it seems enough came through.

[Richard🖌]

I once wrote a blog about why many share writings on poetry sites, and would be glad to share it with you on messaging.

[George Coombs]

a beautifully crafted piece Richard, good to enter into the present moment with the help of the "hush" again a very well chosen image that seems to compliment the piece so very well

[Richard🖌]

Prynhawn da (Good afternoon), George! : )
Morning here, and what a great to begin it, with one of your always welcome, meaningful, and uplifting reviews.
Yes, Fy Chyfaill (My Friend), there is a soft, soothing "hush" of sensation this lovely poem caresses over the reader and author.

Diolch yn fawr (thank you very much), George … my morning is smiling brightly now! Richard

[George Coombs]

Your welcome Richard, its good to be in touch

[Hyacinth]

This is a very compelling piece, and it created a very vivid picture in my mind. I enjoyed it and can honestly offer no critique :)

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Hyacinth! : )

Your presence and beautifully expressed words of praise and enjoyment have certainly spread a warm, appreciative smile across this poet's happy lips … big, grateful hugs to You! ⁓ Richard

[Marianne Rose]

I love reading your poetry and then learning about the structure you used, which I always sense in the background, but does not overtake the beauty or flow of the words. This is a visual delight, and I see everything described, hear and feel nature awakening my senses as if I am in that front yard. I am so swept into that experience, I no longer notice there is a person there also seeing all this through her window, and at some moment I wonder what she is thinking when she looks out- I don't remember what called me back to her. I have several whimsical thoughts- an answering poem- like call and response, you know, of the man standing in his front yard, also experiencing the morning and then catching sight of her. Or of her night, when she closes the shutters after taking in the hush that falls late in the evening, after everyone has fallen asleep. I guess I want to hear more of this place, or her, like you want to know the story behind a beautiful and mesmerizing painting. Thank you so much for that morning, ss I sit here in my morning, waking up.

[Richard🖌]

So, you selected this one to review instead of the clouds 'n river piece, eh? : )

Ahhh, Marianne!
I'm don't know whom enjoys what more, me your presence and accolades, or me your poetry and you mine, but one thing is for certain, we enjoy one another quite nicely, indeed.
The way your mind conjures, expressing feeling and emotion is so intrinsically, wondrously gripping to my senses … it is luring, almost inviting, to be grasped the way you do.
Your touch is as though I am taken-in, the sensation is virtually real, in a warmly vicarious way, as if you've blended and vividly painted your sensations all through my own, if you can read me clear enough to gather it in … your visuals embraqce, mesmerize, and enchant.
It's sooo nice to wake up with you … smiles 'n hugs of warmest thanks, Marianne! ⁓ Richard

[Marianne Rose]

I did a short review of "Clouds. . ." - it was when I was trying desperately not to go on and on . . . Having been here only a couple weeks, I'm trying to figure out how to write, post, read and then review, and work full time, pay attention to my husband, who has been very supportive, but still . . . This whole process can feel completely absorbing and almost like an addiction. I did send you a friend request, would love any reviews - would appreciate your reflections on 2 miracles, 22 years, and This Soul, and any others . . . I seem to find different voices channeling through me. Anyway, if you friend me, then you can share through emails the critiques you talked about. I am open. This is quite a place, isn't it?!

[Raylene]

I wish half my mornings like this beautiful imagery dear just beautiful

[Richard🖌]

Thanks, Raylene!
Your wishes and praise are always welcome … blessings! ⁓ Richard

[Raylene]

Thank you Richard

[toderoopoo]

Beautiful writing, truly inspiring.

[Richard🖌]

Gee, thanks for the kudos!
Welcome to the site! ⁓ Richard