Come 'n share (Nature's glory)

English [Shakespearean] Sonnet

Author's Note

Digging through the archives again, hope you don't mind … LOL!

Constructive critique is always welcome. : )

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'come 'n share (Nature's glory)
Richard,
What a winsome tale! The sweetness of nature has leant itself just right to the Shakespearean style you've crafted. From breezes playing in walnut boughs to sparrows watching squirrels meanderings. Then a delightful touch from the entrance of distant train whistle. Last line"
Upon bare knees I kneel in grateful prayer,
inviting all my friends to come 'n share. "
To kneel in prayer knowing that simple things are best!
Loved this one.
Kathy

[Richard🖌]

Ah, Dear Kathy 🍂

"A Most Happy Autumn to Thee!"
You always highlight lines that are the core essence of my work … one never has to wonder if you've actually read and understood each thematic nuance shared upon its hope-filled page.
Finally, your profession of love for me humble poetic expressions wraps a gratified heart in your oh-so gentle nature.

Thank you ever-so warmly, M'Lovely Lady-Poet ⁓ Richard 🌾

[Katrina Mckeown]

Beautifully breathtaking piece … lovely imagery. Very harmonious and a pleasure to read.
Katrina

[Richard🖌]

Well, Lady Katrina 🌾

The beauty of your own words leave me a bit breathless and pleasured, too.

Thank you ever-so warmly, Kristina ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Lisasview]

Here I am dear Richard..absorbing your beautiful words..and learning..well, I hope what a true Sonnet is all about.
L

[Richard🖌]

Hello, Lisa Dear 🌸

It's so nice of you to read this one, finding such favor in beauty and the quest for deeper poetic understanding.

Thank You for blessing Me! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

Hi Richard,
With your guidance I am moving along...enjoying this new Sonnet adventure.
Just reread your beautiful words and loved every word...
L

[Dave Brown]

Just happened across this and found it an enjoyable bit of spadework, especially with the beautiful image and me being a lover of birds.
I have tried a few of these but I find them mind numbing and never quite coming up to what I would hope
This is very nicely done and a pleasure to read

[Richard🖌]

Good morning, Dave 🌤️

It's a distinct pleasure to receive your positive comments of and connection with this invitation to come 'n share Nature's beauty.
The bird and tree are emblematic of a huge, very old, black walnut just outside my home office window, where birds of many species greet the day with almost endless song … I know you'd love it.
As to the form: I've taught the Sonnet to many on here that had the same sentiments as yours, who've read my many versions and expressed an inspired desire to write their own. If you'd like, I'd be most honored to lend a hand in helping you compose yours, too, I know be as proud of as they were of theirs. The Sonnet is the Rolls Royce of poetry for a reason, but few possess the patience or potential to learn it well. it does seem you're attracted to this form. : )
Let me know if you'd like to compose one of your own.

Thank you, Dave, for reading this friendly little Sonnet, for your inspiring praise, and expressed enjoyment! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Dave Brown]

That reminds me of a huge Banyan (?) tree downtown Maui that overflows with zillions of birds and their beautiful sounds
Thank for the offer
If I try again I'll take you up on it
Have a good day

[Richard🖌]

Blessed be!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

What can one say about a Shakespearean sonnet writ with such attention to every word and inflection, like a melody of birds, simply awe inspiring!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you most humbly and gratefully, John.
It is a distinct pleasure to share with an artist of your note; and, to receive such gracious praise for this little piece makes an olde bard's effort feel so very worthwhile.

Sincerely! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Einstein Noodle]

beautiful as always Richard ..such a pleasant treat to read and experience ..especially like the strong positive connections your poem makes in V3 L4 ... love it!! i read RMC's review and your discussion about the "discrepancies" ..i am reminded of something i read about sonnets that advised that they are after all to be a natural conversational poem and squeaking a bit of amiss as long as that meter cadence is not disrupted as we speak the poem ... it is allowed ;) now you remember this when the Volcano and I send our little ditty your way ..ok?? ;))))))))))
E.

[Richard🖌]

Gene,
"Prayer" is actually a one-syllable word, but I let it go to keep from being contentious, I went along with the conversation according to Ross's inference … in other words, I graciously agreed for the sake of empathetic congeniality in the moment, if that makes sense. Or, you an call me lazy for not being more emphatically persistent … LOL!
The iambs in a Sonnet will always depend on "normal/natural" pronunciation, and "never" on forcing the stresses to fit one's needs to make an unstressed syllable stressed for the purpose of force fitting it into iambic conformity. There are some things in poetry a sincerely true artist must be respectful of.
I'll make sure your concerted Sonnet is spot-on in every way … otherwise, we'd be wasting our time, eh(?), and we'd not want that, would we? Grin*
Gene, your choice in line highlight proves "great minds think alike", as that, also, is one of my most favored.

Thank you, my very fine friend, for the read and ever interesting comments … bless you, always! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Einstein Noodle]

looking forward to ever learning my friend ... going to start the "thinking" process for one i will try by me self ... good on ya Richard .. peace love and joy! :)

[Richard🖌]

When is the cowrite Sonnet making its debut?

[Einstein Noodle]

sent a letter ..we're working on it! :)

[Richard🖌]

Thanks for the 411. : D

[R.M.C]

Richard, I've just thought I'd mention something I noticed: I think that your second to last line is 11 syllables (and I assume that the word squirr'ls' is one syllable due to the lack of the second i, which would make the 8th line 10 syllables).

[Richard🖌]

Alas, Ross,
I know about that rogue syllable, and would change it to the elision pray'r, but the poem is in unalterable .jpg format, and to fix it would require a completely new repost … sorry!
Pretend that word is "pray'r" and enjoy it all the more … yeah, I know, I should be sure everything is perfect before posting. :/
Sincere thanks, though, for watching over me by sharing your caring, sharp eye, My Friend! ⁓ Richard

[R.M.C]

Ah, I understand. Shame it is not easily fixed, but never mind; it is an amazing poem and this problem won't detract from that, especially since it is not an error on your part.

[R.M.C]

A very harmonious and scene provoking piece Richard. Though all your poems flow well, I must say that this is one of the best.
"Upon bare knees I kneel in grateful prayer"; though small, the use of portraying the scene as the person bare kneed, physically in contact with the ground, really cements the connection between humans and nature (and though it may not have been your purpose, it makes us think of the beauty of nature - which is helped greatly by your mentions to certain aspects - and what we're doing to it, how we're destroying the beauty around us that we often gaze upon).
Your last line really is inviting the world to pay more attention to this beauty that is the world, beseeching us to recognize the threat upon it - from us. Lastly, building up to these two important lines, you set the scene exceptionally well: "such glory is the melody that sings, amidst your limbs before their leaves all fall" is one of the exquisite pieces - the noises of wind through the limbs is a wondrous thing.
Though I've interpreted a lot from the poem (possibly some meanings you may not even have thought of when writing it), the simpler meaning of the beauty of oncoming Autumn is in itself beautiful. A wonderful piece.

[Richard🖌]

Hello, Ross!
How happy I am you found this happy little poem of positivity in the joy of Nature and sharing.
The "flow" you mention is due to the iambic cadence required by the English Sonnet, which makes it one of the most challenging to master and most beautiful of poetic forms to read, especially aloud.
Yes, sadly, you are quite correct in your comments of how we're abusing and destroying our own environment, but lifestyle dictates that it will not end until we are forced to create alternate means of surviving, if, indeed, we do.
Meanwhile, we should come together and enjoy as much that is left, as we can, while we still can.
I enjoyed the ways you've broken apart and vividly elucidated each to your own vision.
Thank you most graciously and gratefully for your interpretation and praise … always, you are appreciated and welcome to my pages, my keen, insightful Friend! ⁓ Richard

[R.M.C]

I, too, am happy that I came across this piece. It was my pleasure to read your poem and extract possible meanings behind the words. Like always, you're welcome.

[Gee]

A perfect poem to Herald Autumns arrival.Glad you unearthed and posted this wee gem Richard

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Gee! : )
It is a pleasure to welcome you to my pages, and to thank you most gratefully for your gracious praise of this English Sonnet in invitation to seasonal glory … bless you with many thanks! 〜 Richard

[Gee]

My pleasure