This, Our Love ⁓ (through the seasons)

BALLAD, in 8/6/8/6 count, rhyme-scheme: abcb, defe, etc; in iambic meter.

This, Our Love ~
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When Earth, She spoke, 'twas then I knew
I'd ne'er be as before;
for, in Her voice a gentle tone,
"Come lie upon My shore!

Learn from the waves that lap My sand,
caressing deep the beach;
shhh! As you watch, so softly hear
life's primal mating breach ...

as brushing soft, hushed sighing sand,
passion in its motion,
relents, as rivers always do,
flowing to their ocean.

Unto the sky uplift your face,
see there life's wings in flight,
learn then what flying truly means,
come soar with me tonight.

We'll traverse 'cross vast oceans wide,
broach mountains high above,
and bed 'longside bright silver streams,
teach starlings how to love.

Then, when we're spent, the grass will wave,
with flowers dancing, too;
as willing breezes witnessed all
of lovers wedding true."

I listened well, the breath of me
She took into Her soul,
and when exhaled the seed of life,
it made us one and whole.

"O' wean me, Winter, to Spring's breast,
ere Summer's fields grow bold;

please, bless then, dear Earth, 'this, our love ~’
turn it to Autumn gold."

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Richard W. Jenkins
©2015

Author's Note

Photograph, from Wikipedia Commons.

Constructive critique is always welcome! : )

Reviews

[George Coombs]

A beautiful, well chosen image that compliments the poem to perfection. A brilliantly crafted and beautiful celebration of life and the movement of nature and the seasons through existence.I loved the verse beginning "unto the sky..." with its invitation to "learn what life truly means" Great work

[Richard🖌]

Thank you sincerely, Dear George,
It is ever a pleasure to receive such an inspiring and gratifying review from one as accomplished as you are, my friend.
Your praise and grasp of the essence this piece portrays makes writing and sharing a truly blessed event.
The verse you've highlighted (I think) expresses the deeper meaning of this piece; it is, also, one of my favorite … and, I must heartily agree with your assessment of the picture, too.

A fine review, George … I humbly bow! ⁓ Richard : )

[George Coombs]

Your welcome Richard

[Kelly Scheppers]

You make me wish you were a secret ... that only I knew of!

[Richard🖌]

… and, Dear Kelly, the enticing touch from your stirring words makes me wish it, too*
Smiles 'n hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[J. J. Nightingale]

As you watch... Should the "A" be lower case.?????
as brushing soft........ Should the "A"..be upper case..???

Very beautiful... I love the terms used...

"We'll traverse 'cross vast oceans wide,
broach mountains high above,
and bed 'longside bright silver streams,
teach starlings how to love."

May I ask who/whom "WE" is..??
You and Earth, Nature..????

Please forgive...I am an idiot ...
This seems about Nature, then takes on a Human Lover's Theme...

Altogether.... Lovely !!

Jazz

[Richard🖌]

Jasmine,
I thank you ever-so appreciatively for the beautifully composed and encouraging review, and for the gracious praise of this composition in homage to Nature and Human love.
The "A" of which you speak is correctly capitalized, as is indicated by the punctuation in the preceding, the same, and following lines.
Warmest, most grateful thanks to you! ⁓ Richard

[J. J. Nightingale]

as brushing soft, hushed sighing sand,
passion in its motion,............................Should this A be a Capital..because it starts a new verse..??? oh never mind..you are the MASTER........and you are WELCOME KIND SIR..

[Richard🖌]

Yes, Jasmine, It does, indeed, begin a new verse, but the first line (beginning with an "a (as)", is an enjambment (continuation) from the last line in the preceding verse above it.
I really enjoy your involvement in my verses, Jasmine, as it let's me know you are interested and allows the opportunity of clarifying my meanings for you … thanks a bushel! ⁓ RJ

[J. J. Nightingale]

And thank you for the explanation, Kind Sir...

[Richard🖌]

My pleasure … always.

[J. J. Nightingale]

:)............................