"Hello!" (suggestive)

Free Verse

      I remember best …

      

your breath 

kissing my skin

      

on autumn nights,

      

when your soft voice

      

quilted my dreams

      

with sighs.

      

It wasn’t so long ago …

      

when we dreamed together.

      

Even our eyes were twins,

      

mirroring wildflowers

      

in the meadows,

      

our laughter …

      

holding hands with the stars.

      

Countless trips to The Bistro

      

satisfied our stomachs …

      

chili con queso with chips

      

and margaritas,

      

the food of those who have

      

too little time to eat,

      

too little time to be distracted

      

from the religion 

      of 

making-love.

      

Praying  …

      

for just one more moment,

      

one more chance to know

      

the texture of your tongue,

      

the mystery of your

    

“I want you” eyes.

   

Even now …

    

I worship your mouth,

    

giving thanks to the gods,

    

for gifting me you,

    

for making me more

    

than I would have been

    

if your soft, sweet lips

    

had never whispered,

   "

Hello!"

         

Richard W. Jenkins

                     ©2015

Author's Note

Constructive critique is always welcome! : )

Reviews

[Lisasview]

Oh my goodness Richard ...
I have read all the Free Verse poems you sent me and now I am going back over them and leaving reviews...
They are all wonderful, but for some reason this one speaks to me. It has given me chills each time I have read it.
I believe everyone wants to have those beautiful moments...but in my experience with people I find that few ever reach that feeling in their lifetime... Sad but true. Perhaps some experience a bit of this love "feeling" when they are first experiencing love but probably not again. To find this quality of a life partner where deep love stays with you...forever, is fantastic. To actually step out of oneself and be open enough to let go is not easy. Oh gosh, sorry I am getting too philosophical...
Just want to say I loved it,
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

"Hello!" Lisa 😏

I am quite thrilled that you actually consider my Free Verse pieces, assigned to read as examples, inspiringly favorable enough to return with positive reviews.
Perhaps, this particular piece stands out for you from the others because of its metaphorical imagery, smoothly flowing syntax, timely line breaks, all expressed in simple language and an appealing presentation.
Creatively emotive thought and the relatable theme might play a pert in it for you, too.

I think you've philosophically and worldly wisely expounded upon its appeal far better than I could have poetically. ; )

Thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard 🥂

[Lisasview]

So of course i had to reread this one again ~ and I have the same feeling for it..
Hugs,
read moreSo of course i had to reread this one again ~ and I have the same feeling for it..
Hugs,
L

[marcus]

The divinity of love! I thought it was great, really enjoyed it!

[Richard🖌]

Many grateful thanks, Marcus! ⁓ Richard

[andrew mitchell]

How one can evolve from a simple greeting "hello" and yet intimidating too from fear of rejection. A lovely flowing write!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Andrew!
I am so very pleased you found favor in this warm little piece! ⁓ Richard : )

[....................]

so much would never happen without that first 'hello'...you create such a vivid picture of being in love, Richard...one could easily place themselves at a table in that bistro to see you both gazing into each other's eyes...a gorgeous write, my friend

[Richard🖌]

If anyone would grasp the essence of this rather simmering little work, I knew it would be you,Thomas … thank you, My Friend! ⁓ Richard : )

(I hope you're happy, wherever you are)

[Willard Wells]

Very beautiful words of love. I also give thanks each night to God for bringing my love into my life. You expressed the feelings so perfectly. Thank you for sharing.

[Richard🖌]

Willard,
Thank you, My Friend!
You always bring a nice touch of enjoyment to me for writing and sharing … glad we related through this warm little piece! ⁓ Richard : )

[Sultrysoul]

This is beautiful. I would graciously love to say hello. But then again you must know my eyes have already spoken what my lips have yet to say. Wonderful words of alluring come hithers. I thoroughly enjoyed this.

[Richard🖌]

I can imagine no warmer or pleasing review than that which your lips have delivered upon me from your sweet pen.
Big thank you hugs … ummm! ⁓ Richard ; )

[Sultrysoul]

Your graciousness is always well appreciated

[Korin]

This was mesmerizing! I tend to read aloud and as i did every word seemed to flow gently on top of the other. I'm glad i read this.

[Richard🖌]

I am so very pleased you did, too, Korin!
Thank you for enjoying,for your inspiring praise, and shared feelings of this warming little piece! ⁓ Richard : )

[Kelly Scheppers]

A most beautiful reply to my poem, "Say Hello", even if I am indulging myself!

The verse about the bistro was it for me...
"too little time to eat,
too little time to be distracted
from the religion
of making-love."

I must have this in my library for further swooning, and melting. Incredible, Richard!

[Richard🖌]

Kelly,
I thank you for your beautiful words of praise and for selecting those few lines to enjoy the best, and, certainly, You are welcome to copy, keep, and enjoy anything of mine you so desire … you do so sweetly honor me.
Hugs 'n warmest blessings! ⁓ Richard

Indulgence is fine … especially, when it fits so nicely.
(excerpted from your very sweetly-alluring poem, "Say hello")

"I am anxious for the taste of your mouth,
for the fluid movement of our tongues together.

Say hello."

[terry smith]

Nothing to critique here, I loved this!! feelings from the heart in any form make the best poetry, for me at least.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you most gratefully, Terry!
How inspiring your words are, and so very gratifying to my earnest efforts to write and share with those who I hope will enjoy it.
Blessings to you, My Fine Poet Friend! ⁓ Richard