Sweet Paradigm ⁓ (love's pattern)

Quatrains in 8-count w/aabb, ccdd, etc; rhyme-scheme.

   

             Sweet Paradigm ~

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                Dreaming sweet songs, yet to be sung ~

                to taste your breath upon my tongue,

                passions you’ve turned my world into …

                such is the joy of loving You.

                Once incomplete, you’ve made me whole,

                who else but You could sate my soul?

                Love, many times I’d sought in vain,

                ’til You to me Fate would ordain.

                Back then, but loneliness I knew;

                life now (with You) is never blue.

                When I awake you’re in my heart,

                ’tis known we’ll never be apart.

                Each night ~ there lying in repose,

                I softly kiss thy golden rose.

                As sleepy eyes drift me away,

                your warm, moist lips upon mine play.

                That’s then I feel your tender hand,

                resistance I cannot withstand …

                a whisper soft as duckling down,

                imploring, “Come!” a sighing sound.

                Transported then, on wispy wings,

                in harmony our joined heart sings …

                sweep undulating waves of bliss

                with each intoxicating kiss.

                Sensations felt can’t be denied,

                as every space smolders inside …

                such raptures steal our breath away,

                love’s primal urge we must obey.

                O’ feel the thrum of my heartbeat,

                surge smoothly, Darling, deep, replete …

                embrace these wonders of our love,

                conferring thanks to stars above.

                E’er in my heart, a newfound beat

                renews like golden sun-kissed wheat

                in undulating breeze-touched dance …

                sweet paradigm ~ of true romance.

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                         Richard W. Jenkins

                                      ©2015

Author's Note

Constructive critique is always welcome. : )

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Sweet Paradigm'
Richard,
Beautifully rhymed with feel of earthy even natural process within your words. Each stanza builds on the one before. I love this line; 'renew like golden sun-kissed wheat, in undulating breeze-touched dance..., sweet paradigm of true romance.' beautiful ending!
Blessings to you in this time of Autumn,
Kathy

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, Kathy Sweet 🍁

You've embraced such lovely lines, and how tenderly your words of favor so warmly touch an olde bard's hopeful heart, assuring him his humble efforts have once again pleased someone special he'd hoped they would. And, it always amazes me, your ever pleasing knack of finding these little jewels amongst my deepening pile of poems.
I truly wish more would put forth the effort to do this, as You so often do, rather than asking for something new, when they've read only a smidgen of my work … it's as though they believe poems somehow lose their soul with age.
When Autumn leaves begin to fall … that's when I hear your gentle voice ⁓ begin to call.🍂

You're very special, M'Lady, treating me like a king … this is why I adore and think of you so highly, so gratefully, and so fondly.
Warmest smiles 'n hugs, Dear Kathy ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Just arrived home from some hard work which is caring for people that are needing more help. To just find encouraging and kind message such as yours is so super encouraging. Just have to thank you Richard! I hope you are staying busy in ways that you find rewarding.
Blessings as always. Kathy
PS your words surly have continued to be fresh!

[Richard🖌]

Kathy, your voice …
warmly endearing as ever.😏

[Chris Shaw]

In perfect meter and rhyme dear Richard. Beautifully penned, tender, loving and romantic thoughts. After your visits to me earlier this week, the very least I can do is offer my admiration for such a well crafted write. A pleasure to read.

Chris

[Richard🖌]

Hello, Dear Chris 🌾

The resplendently inspiring touch of your sweet voice gratifies a bard's deepest desires to compose and earn the favor of those in the know … such as You, our finely skilled poetess ✍

Thank you ever-so warmly and sincerely for your praise and plaudits, and for selecting this rather lenghty piece to read and review.
Happy hugs to Thee! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[samiha zubair]

Beautifully expressed in prose. Each phrase makes you want to read till the end and one starts questioning is this true love or a merge between reality and fantasy. Kindly if you get time and if you wish review my poetry and give me valuable suggestions

[Richard🖌]

Samiha,
I thank you most gratefully for selecting one of my poems to read and comment on … you have graciously honored me with your praise.
Unless otherwise stated, all of my poetry is derived from creative imagination, utilizing observations and experiences from the well of life, feelings, and emotions to draw from.
You described this piece as "prose": Prose is language in its ordinary form, without metrical structure. Note the description in this poem's introduction.

I shall be most happy to review for you and offer what suggestions I feel will help, if any.
Again, thank you, Samiha, for your visit! ⁓ Richard

[emmajoy]

' Once incomplete, you’ve made me whole, -- who else but You could sate my soul? '

Such gradually building bliss written in fine thoughts wrapped but not trapped, in required meter.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Emma, for reading this one and for your insightfully knowing comments on the poetic technique composed in.
Deep 'n lovely line you picked, too! ⁓ Richard

[Penlady]

Exquisitely conveyed....a love that wraps the heart and soul! Bravo!

[Richard🖌]

Many thanks, Barbara, for your praise of this romantic little number, and for treating me to a wonderfully encouraging review.
Hugs 'n blessings! ⁓ Richard