~ King of it All ~ (to resolve)

Unmetered Quatrains

~  K i n g   o f   i t   A l l  ~

If I could be King

and not hear them say,

"Oh, what a wastrel,

he's wasting away!"

I would be king

in a kingdom so small,

that I could reach out

and touch every wall.

High on the walls …

bright paintings would be hung,

the roof opened to let in the sun,

my clothes all tailored for fun.

I'd laugh, then (if I wanted),

and shout at them all,

"I'm King! I'm King!

of this small wasteful hall!"

Richard W. Jenkins

©2015

Author's Note

A little go at wistful pretending this morning.
Ah, that the world could sometimes be as we would have it, eh … as it was when we were young — hopeful, resolute; yet, always so misunderstood.

Constructive critique is always welcomed and appreciated. : )

Reviews

[Relic]

This does have a nice 'flow' Richard despite not having a strict count. I suppose poetry has often confused me. Should you count syllables? Should you count stresses? Does it flow as good for someone else as it did when you heard it in your head? Questions, questions, questions. Though I've been doing this for many years, I am still a novice. Yet, I'm learning.

Great writing, Richard.

[Richard🖌]

Hey, Tim!
Thanks for the read and interesting commentary on this little dancer.
Of course forms that require a strict count and meter one would be obliged to count syllables, stresses, etc; but, those like this on Unmetered Quatrain form allow for greater freedom for the writer to flex their creative wings, so to say.
What you say is true, My Friend, we never quit being students of this fabulous craft of ours … this is one of the most exciting and intriguing aspects of poetry, plus the literally hundreds of forms that compose the art.

Thank you ever-so gratefully for the very nice compliment, Tim! ⁓ Richard : )

[Emma Kirchhoff]

It came off to me as very optimistic and fun, which was only enhanced by the short stanzas! A very nice read!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Emma,
Your words of expression and praise are just what this little piece needed to be complete.

Happy hugs, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard

[Kelly Scheppers]

I like your attitude, Richard! If only the world could be more like we wanted it to be. This reminds me of the song, "Why Can't Everyday Be Like Christmas", by no other than the "king" himself!

I bow to thee, with much applause!

[Richard🖌]

Dear Kelly,
Your words are the sparks that keep my ink ignited and flowing, my creativity alive and breathing, and the worthwhile gratuity I strive and faithfully hope for when so diligently at labor searching for that "just right" word, phrase, line, and verse that speaks with my best poetic voice.

I blush with modesty at being mentioned in the same breath as Elvis, but I love it, too … smiles 'n hugs to You, dear lady-poet! ⁓ Richard

[ANTO]

i am a KIng. I have a throne with a heated seat cover - I can touch the four walls and I can laugh at my reflection (in the shaving mirror) .Not like the grand kings we envisaged as youngsters though.
Delightful writing Rascal.

[Richard🖌]

I bow, King Anto … LOL!

Boys 'n our toys make of us great kings, and what better than the realm of the road to appease our every command.

Super review, My Friend … thanks a million kronor for selecting this light bit of satirical fantasy to read and comment on! ⁓ Richard

[ANTO]

It is a great title - thats what appealed first and it didnt disappoint. We all made forts and were The Lone Ranger one day then Robin Hood the next. I think the approaching Virtual Reality revolution will make kings (and boys) of us all once more.
Your welcome Richard - it was my pleasure. :)

[Richard🖌]

Always mine, too, Anton, to share with You!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A playful and entertaining piece Richard with the feel of a 'rascal' about it. Not sure about the use of 'wall' at the end of stanza two and the beginning of three?

[Richard🖌]

Hi, John … smiles 'n bright blessings to ye, My Friend!
Hah! One of these days I'll quit posting before I've completely finished editing … LOL!
Thank you so much for spotting that faux pas and letting me know … this is why honest critique from our knowing poet comrades is so vitally important, because it can truly help us improve our craft, and here's hoping my edits have ended with approval from your learned eye.

I like your take on this little bit of fantasy, John … thanks again! ⁓ Richard