THE BIRD IN ME (poignant)

Unmetered Quatrains in a simple rhyme scheme.

"A Heavenly Contest Winner"

Author's Note

Sort'a in a sad mood this morning — not one of my best efforts, but just needed to get it out … hope no one will mind; at least, it is a little creative and therapeutic.

This piece is embellished with Letter Lace (see my Blog on this,technique).

Constructively critical reviews are always welcome and appreciated. : )

Reviews

[KTizzle]

Who is the hunter saying, "sure?" to? Is it himself so as to come across as sarcastic? Is it a conscious thing you're getting at? Maybe he's answering the "voice in his crown."

I think this is sooo sad, but the rhythm is really good. The happy tone created by the rhythm mixed with the sad theme of the poem created an irony I enjoyed. It reminds me of the self criticizing part of ourselves. The bird represents for me the talent that springs from our being and then the hunter is the critical part of ourselves that can shoot down our inner potential. I'm not into simple poetry all that much, but I like the simplicity of this.

Thanks for sharing! Have a great day! Congratulations on winning the contest.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, dear poetess! : )
I am so very happy to find you've been here, leaving some of your delightful essence, and I thank you warmly and sincerely for selecting one of my little compositions to read and review, and especially for your insightful and pertinent questions, that show real interest. Then, the deeply abiding content of your understanding comments have shown great insights in understanding my not always easy to poetry … LOL!
Certainly, your words of expressed appreciation, enjoyment, and accolades, both inspire and encourage my creative juices.
To clarify: The entirely of this piece expresses the internal dialogue of its author … much of its content emphasized with metaphor.
I hope you will find the time to enjoy more of my humble efforts, as I have truly enjoyed sharing your input and take on this one. : )

Thank you again, M'Lady, for finding favor in this piece, even though it is so simple, and I thank you with smiles for you thoughtful "Congratulations!" … grateful hugs to you, and the happiest of holidays! Richard

[jeannemarie coulter]

i truly enjoyed this word tapestry...very well penned and presented...thank you

[Richard🖌]

Ah, Jeannemarie!
How lovely of you to stop in for a read and to leave some sweet words of virtual poetry that I might feel blessed and appreciated by my humble efforts.
Warmest hug of thanks to you, Dear Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard

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The duality of the mind comes to light perfectly in this gem, Richard. The hunter in us sometimes wins over those happy birds, silencing their singing. Fortunately there are other birds to take flight when the hunter has left the field, leaving them to spread their wings in melodious song. We all have ups and downs... hopefully less the former and more the latter... well-penned, sir! - Thomas

[Richard🖌]

Thomas,
It is a pleasure to share my humble efforts with you, and to receive your always insightful and pertinently enjoyable words in review (often as meaningful as my poem), and the highlight of my gratuity, thereof, is when I realize you truly grasp the core essence of my intent.

Most grateful blessings to you, My Friend! ⁓ Richard

[Annie Gryphon]

The bird fell on the grass
noticed he was not dead
lost only one feather
or maybe two instead.

So he tried out his wings
and started to fly
over the fields
way up to the sky.

look how he smiles
that sweet little bird
his voice sounds nicer
as no one ever heard!

[Richard🖌]

Ohhh, my-GOODNESS, Annie Sweet! : )
How beautifully thoughtful of you to so tenderly mend my broken wings and set me a'soar again.
Your poem misted my eyes and spoke to my heart ever-so softly … you are, indeed, a special lady, and I love how you treat me, spoil me, make me look for you on my poems, with a hopeful smile.
Sighhh! I must catch my breath and slow this dancing heart, taken and set into motion by such caring tenderness.
Thank you, Dear Annie — you're the best ever … warmest hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[Kelly Scheppers]

...you just broke my heart...

[Richard🖌]

Awww, c'mere 'n have a soothing hug.
I've the perfect fixings to repair a broken heart — thank you, Dearest, for sharing this one with me … it means a lot, Kelly ⁓ Richard