Your Sweet Rain (sultry)

Diminished Decaverse Form … may be too long for some.

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/// // ‘`  Your Sweet Rain  `’// ////

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Unquenched, my thirst cries out for your sweet rain,

for there's no other's who shall sate this thirst.

Ope wide thy gate that I may drink again ...

I crave from thee warm sips thou hath coerced.

With thy sweet rain fill me until I burst ~

Moon, down in all your glory, shine o'er us ...

pearl-glinted waves a'flow merge two as one

these souls to e'er be bound with golden truss;

soft, tender ties by loving hands were spun,

and nevermore they're e'er to be undone.

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Strike, Eros, love's air in torrid flash;

stir dark clouds, a most ferocious storm,

send your winds in taunted, howling clash ...

then, command all elements conform,

that we'll breathe your sultry atmosphere;

moist, as dewdrops sweet upon the tongue,

like a taste from joyous saline tear,

or the silken flow lovemaking's sprung.

Sing the songs of rain 'til they're all sung.

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O' how I've dreamt and yearned your taste

I lack tempest words to tell it.

Never's been known such a sad waste

and there's nothing can dispel it,

but to receive my fill of you ...

to sate this ever-thirsting pit,

all from a spell I must pursue

by every ploy within my wit.

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Come, show me your oasis ~

un-parch my thirst ~ at your well.

Fill all my empty spaces,

and release this arid spell.

Let me partake thy graces,

where I ever long to dwell

and I feel my ardour swell.

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To quell a man's dire need,

a wondrous thing to do;

for, always he'll concede

his loyalty to you.

With pitcher filled to brim

give all you have to him.

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No better way known

do I have to say,

"If your man has flown,

bring him back to stay,

and ever atone

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with your dear ways

that he will know

for all his days

you love him so!"

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Lover's task;

You, I ask,

"Fill my flask!”

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Champagne

refrain ...

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"Rain!”

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Richard W. Jenkins

©2015

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Author's Note

Artwork, courtesy of Google -- Sensual Images.

"Diminished Hexaverse/Decaverse Form"

In this form of five stanzas minimum,
the first stanza consists of five lines of five syllables each;
Stanza number two has four lines of four syllables;
Stanza number three is three lines at three syllables each;
Stanza number four contains two lines at two syllables each;
And the fifth line is a single, one-syllable word.

The form may contain more than five stanzas,
but five is the minimum required.
Starting from any number of syllables
and its equal number of line counts per stanza,
one need only diminish the count by one at a time
in order to arrive at the cumulative monosyllable.

Rhyming is a must, but the rhyme scheme is the author's choice.
Mine here, of course, begins with ten-lines and ten-syllables,
which makes it a Diminished Decaverse.

Have fun, and enjoy this wonderfully creative form.
Try it out … it's great practice and loads of fun!

Critical reviews are always welcome. : )

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

There is nothing more sensual and satisfying than a man who enjoys his woman’s rain. And I can always tell if they truly enjoy it or do it to simple appease what I may need. In this poem, it’s the eager touch and glide upon the skin. It’s the carnivorous looked filled with molten lava.

I honestly enjoyed this poem from the first like til the last. It is delicious and delicate at the same time. Its flow is gentle and smooth like a lover taking their time because they are receiving pleasure while giving it. I love the use of the word rain and salty like a tear is a nice way to explain that specific taste and each woman is unique in flavor, just a side note lol

This is eloquent and steamy at the same time. There is time consuming and proper care at picking and choosing the words to enhance the visuals. Well done. It has the intense and intended affect of making the blood pump and the pressure rise.

Ps you have given me an idea of using spell and elements in a spicy poem. I rather call them spicy because there is too much negativity associated with erotic

[Richard🖌]

Oh, how I so delightfully agree, Lady PB 💦🐝

Nothing's more sensually inspiring to her lover than a woman's sweet warm rain … for, it assures that the passion of her arousal is genuine; and, what's more exciting to the quickening of sexual fervor?
"there is too much negativity associated with erotic"
PB, you've hit on my reason for dubbing this piece (sultry), rather than sexy, voluptuous, erotic, or seductive … even though, they all would fit-in sooo nicely, don't you think?
Due to its metaphorical ambiguity, there is no "Adult" warning, as it is left to the endless imagination what form and innuendo "rain" might transcendentally take … and, I so very much enjoy your enthralling interpretation.
"Ps you have given me an idea of using spell and elements in a spicy poem." How exciting it is to my earnest efforts may have inspired You, the eloquently accomplished poetess.

It is an exciting pleasure to share poetry with You, PB! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Poetic Beauty]

I have not worked on that poem as of yet. I have been working a lot and when I have there has been some things on the family side that have left my brain not as creative. I am currently working on two different poems.

[Zoey Ree]

You, my simple bard, are the essence of poetry, of all writing. The Old English was a brilliant idea and brought the imagery and evanescence alive. This brought tears to my eyes and made me realize that some still know and understand the romance of poetry, the nature of how to speak through words, and that chivalry still exists. Thank you, my dear friend, for making my day with this beautiful piece! You are a true Romeo, a Shakespearean at heart.

[Richard🖌]

Goodness, Zoey!
Your delicious review is so warming, I think I may just print it and sleep with it under my pillow, so tonight's dreams will be as beautiful as your words to me … mmm!
I think you and this poem may have adopted each another, who could blame either of you if you have! ; )

It is I who thank you, Lovely Poetess, warmest hugs to you! ⁓ Rascal

[~]

A sultry read indeed!!

Images keep falling on the reader's mind like that sweet rain of pleasure you've so skillfully described. I think using Old English has heightened the poetic attraction to the poem.

A strong invitation to give in to the lover's request fully, without any reservation and quench his passion which is burning bright for both to see and experience.

I must say this diminishing hexavrese (or in your case decaverse) sounds like fun. I will surely give it a try whether an increasing or a diminishing one.

Thank you for showing us delicious poetry and fun ways to play with verses :D

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, M'Sweet Lady Skittles!

How did I ever miss the radiance of this marvelously tender, heart-fetching joy of a review.
I must be totally slipping not to have felt your presence, and MMmmm, how I love the poetica of your words, as they imbue my every fiber with sheer enthrallment.

With a review such as yours, you know I'm going to shine my pen and have it filled to the brim, ready for my very next inspiration — I'd not be a bit surprised if it's about You … thanks so much, Dear One! ♂ Richard

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:) you're welcome and you inspired me to write a hexaverse. :) it turned out to be fun. :)

[Richard🖌]

You're a good sport, and a lovely one*

[Roland Petrov]

You are far from a simple bard! This is another form that's new to me, and your example is amazing. Do you choose the last word first and work from there? You sure know how to keep things interesting.

[Richard🖌]

Ah, My Friend!

You do so bless me with your presence here upon the page of this lovely amazing form, and who better to give it a try but the adventurous Roland!
Begin with the 5-line, 5-syllable minimum version, working it down to 1-line, 1-syllable, and later-on, if you decide to add more lines later, you can with as many as you'd like … I know you'd do a 1st-class job; then, you can be first and inspire Matt to do one, too … LOL!

Thank you, Roland, for reading this one for me, and for your charming, gratifying, and encouraging compliments.
Here's hoping your day is as ncie as you've helped make mine … "KLINK!" ⁓ Richard

[Roland Petrov]

Well, I did indeed attempt the Diminished Hexaverse, "In the Fullness of..." I did not attempt a decaverse and probably never will. This isn't easy, but I'm actually quite pleased with my humble first attempt. Thank you, Rascal Richard, for being the example to emulate.

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, you so honor and humble me, Roland, and you know I like it … ya done good! : )
Next, the English Sonnet, eh?

[Roland Petrov]

I did write a Petrarchan Sonnet for the poetry club I founded on Whidbey Island, but I haven't done an English one. Not sure I have another sonnet in me, but I may in the fullness of time.

[Richard🖌]

Let me know when you're ready … 👍

[Kelly Scheppers]

...am I awake, or am I dreaming? Wow, I do believe I have been swept off my feet at the WC!

Your presentation is top notch, as is the imitation of falling rain and the execution of this form. I am thrilled to be the first to review it!


Kelly
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[Richard🖌]

What a darling you are, Sweet Kelly, to make a bard feel his efforts are so marvelously appreciated and praiseworthy — you've made me blush*

If you think you're thrilled to be first reviewer, you should be in my skin … MMmmm! ; )
Thank you, Hon ~ you're the best … smiles 'n hugs! ~ Richard