Your Sweet Rain (sultry)

Diminished Decaverse Form … may be too long for some.

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`/'·/ /` // /,

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/// // ‘`  Your Sweet Rain  `’// ////

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// ‘`,//

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Unquenched, my thirst cries out for your sweet rain,

for there's no other's who shall sate this thirst.

Ope wide thy gate that I may drink again ...

I crave from thee warm sips thou hath coerced.

With thy sweet rain fill me until I burst ~

Moon, down in all your glory, shine o'er us ...

pearl-glinted waves a'flow merge two as one

these souls to e'er be bound with golden truss;

soft, tender ties by loving hands were spun,

and nevermore they're e'er to be undone.

·//`///,/

Strike, Eros, love's air in torrid flash;

stir dark clouds, a most ferocious storm,

send your winds in taunted, howling clash ...

then, command all elements conform,

that we'll breathe your sultry atmosphere;

moist, as dewdrops sweet upon the tongue,

like a taste from joyous saline tear,

or the silken flow lovemaking's sprung.

Sing the songs of rain 'til they're all sung.

// ‘`,//

O' how I've dreamt and yearned your taste

I lack tempest words to tell it.

Never's been known such a sad waste

and there's nothing can dispel it,

but to receive my fill of you ...

to sate this ever-thirsting pit,

all from a spell I must pursue

by every ploy within my wit.

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Come, show me your oasis ~

un-parch my thirst ~ at your well.

Fill all my empty spaces,

and release this arid spell.

Let me partake thy graces,

where I ever long to dwell

and I feel my ardour swell.

,//'./ ·

To quell a man's dire need,

a wondrous thing to do;

for, always he'll concede

his loyalty to you.

With pitcher filled to brim

give all you have to him.

`/'·//`///,/

No better way known

do I have to say,

"If your man has flown,

bring him back to stay,

and ever atone

// ‘`,//

with your dear ways

that he will know

for all his days

you love him so!"

,//'./ ·

Lover's task;

You, I ask,

"Fill my flask!”

·//`///,/

Champagne

refrain ...

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"Rain!”

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Richard W. Jenkins

©2015

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Author's Note

Artwork, courtesy of Google -- Sensual Images.

"Diminished Hexaverse/Decaverse Form"

In this form of five stanzas minimum,
the first stanza consists of five lines of five syllables each;
Stanza number two has four lines of four syllables;
Stanza number three is three lines at three syllables each;
Stanza number four contains two lines at two syllables each;
And the fifth line is a single, one-syllable word.

The form may contain more than five stanzas,
but five is the minimum required.
Starting from any number of syllables
and its equal number of line counts per stanza,
one need only diminish the count by one at a time
in order to arrive at the cumulative monosyllable.

Rhyming is a must, but the rhyme scheme is the author's choice.
Mine here, of course, begins with ten-lines and ten-syllables,
which makes it a Diminished Decaverse.

Have fun, and enjoy this wonderfully creative form.
Try it out … it's great practice and loads of fun!

Critical reviews are always welcome. : )

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

There is nothing more sensual and satisfying than a man who enjoys his woman’s rain. And I can always tell if they truly enjoy it or do it to simple appease what I may need. In this poem, it’s the eager touch and glide upon the skin. It’s the carnivorous looked filled with molten lava.

I honestly enjoyed this poem from the first like til the last. It is delicious and delicate at the same time. Its flow is gentle and smooth like a lover taking their time because they are receiving pleasure while giving it. I love the use of the word rain and salty like a tear is a nice way to explain that specific taste and each woman is unique in flavor, just a side note lol

This is eloquent and steamy at the same time. There is time consuming and proper care at picking and choosing the words to enhance the visuals. Well done. It has the intense and intended affect of making the blood pump and the pressure rise.

Ps you have given me an idea of using spell and elements in a spicy poem. I rather call them spicy because there is too much negativity associated with erotic

[Richard🖌]

Oh, how I so delightfully agree, Lady PB 💦🐝

Nothing's more sensually inspiring to her lover than a woman's sweet warm rain … for, it assures that the passion of her arousal is genuine; and, what's more exciting to the quickening of sexual fervor?
"there is too much negativity associated with erotic"
PB, you've hit on my reason for dubbing this piece (sultry), rather than sexy, voluptuous, erotic, or seductive … even though, they all would fit-in sooo nicely, don't you think?
Due to its metaphorical ambiguity, there is no "Adult" warning, as it is left to the endless imagination what form and innuendo "rain" might transcendentally take … and, I so very much enjoy your enthralling interpretation.
"Ps you have given me an idea of using spell and elements in a spicy poem." How exciting it is to my earnest efforts may have inspired You, the eloquently accomplished poetess.

It is an exciting pleasure to share poetry with You, PB! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Poetic Beauty]

I have not worked on that poem as of yet. I have been working a lot and when I have there has been some things on the family side that have left my brain not as creative. I am currently working on two different poems.

[ETERNITY]

"Loads of fun"...? Darling, you ARE Eros here. Your words flow too easily and without effort. From the HEART perfect verses are formed. (I think I need a break. Yummy!)... Fulfilling with abandon...just how perfect wonder is and should be. I love the final joyous declaration... Champagne refrain ...Rain!

[Lisasview]

Oh my goodness, here I am back to finding more of your words to ponder.
By going to the very end of your posts I have been finding so many that I did not read...
AND, this is my most favourite so far...
especially these words.. O' how I've dreamt and yearned your taste
I lack tempest words to tell it.
Love the perfect title...
L

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"Your Sweet Rain"
Richard,
Description of human need for a very special someone; we are somehow not sufficient to only ourselves.The thing I found so true in these verses was the commitment to the true dedication to heart of their loved one. It was beautiful. Very mature with a self discipline to remember to not forget nor take for granted this precious commitment. Lovely. The verse form really works well for your message.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Kathy,
Your sentiments and insights of my poetry always express a deeper grasp and relatability than mosts' … I am sure this is why a warm glow envelopes me whenever I see your name under one of my pieces.
Often, you perceive aspects of intent and meanings that go back to a work's original premise I may have forgotten when first composing it … I think this is uncanny that anyone could.

In-any-event, I am proud to share the wee glimpses into my core you so easily and naturally see … hugs 'n blessings to Thee! ⁓ Richard

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Richard,
It is blessing to express at all, to voice, to rejoice in our own beings the unique colors we each possess. Isn't it wonderful how different we all are and how we all see things differently. Thank you very much for being so kind and for affirming. Money and all the things humanity chases is not the jewel that kindness, affirming and upholding others is!
Kathy

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Woah! I loved the way your words danced and trailed down the page! Really breathtaking this piece was ;)
I still haven't decided on my favourite stanza here but I loved it on the whole :)

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so warmly and gratefully, Yumna! : )
The praise and expressed enjoyment in your words truly are the gratuity an olde bard writes and shares for, in earnest hope of receiving.
It is the rhythm and cadence of the form that creates an easy flow and dancing effect.
I, too, find it challenging to chose one part over the other, as the whole is required to make it work.
We can take on this form, if you'd like … just say the word. : )

Thanks again, Dear Lady-Poet 🌺 for your lovely touch! ⁓ Richard

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ahh yes I was thinking about it.. But idk it seems difficult 😑
You're welcome, Richard! Your words always leave a lasting impression on me 😊

[Richard🖌]

"How much, Yumna," you bade me consider,"is really worthwhile accomplishing that does not challenge us before we are genuinely and fully rewarded and satisfied?"
Just a thought I'll share with you: I think one's true skills are measured by the successful degree and quality of their challenges and accomplishments, eh? 🤔

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True, true... But for that one has to be confident...

[Richard🖌]

Confidence in one's ability is built by challenges accepted and conquered, just as you've done so excellently in every step we've taken together; and, as you know, each one has been accomplished at your behest and earnest effort. ; )

[Richard🖌]

I swore long ago I'd never teach anyone I had to drag while screaming and kicking … LOL!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Aww no I'm not screaming or kicking 😂 I'm a meek student lol 😉
I'll def work on this one 😊

[Richard🖌]

Meek?
Hah, that'll be the day!
You make me smile! 😃

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad of that 😉😊

[Richard🖌]

Me, too! 🙃

[MsJewel]

Your words are soft and sensual, taking me to a place of beauty. I love romantic poetry and this is so tastefully done with a classic feel. Your word choices are lovely. Stunning poetry.

:) Julie

[Richard🖌]

Oh, Julie,
what a lovely review you've left for this little piece, and how very much I appreciate your words in acknowledgement, relating, and of appreciation, enjoyment, and praise — you've made an olde bard blush … thank you warmly! ⁓ Richard

[MsJewel]

My pleasure Richard. Your poem is lovely. Thanks so much for the friend request. I look forward to sharing more poetry.

[Richard🖌]

Yes, Julie … me, too.

[Rochelle Delaine]

Rascal I am a new fan of yours. "With thine sweet rain fill me until I burst".

[Richard🖌]

"GULP!"
Er, I am always grateful for fans, present and new … thank you, Rochelle! ⁓ Richard : )

[wordman]

i love sensual writes in good taste,and this one was great, and a pleasure to read.loved the image as well

[Richard🖌]

Hot-doggies!
Another review from one of my favorite onsite poets, and you really know how to make a bard feel good about writing and sharing his wares.
You and I both see eye-to-eye on the sensual verses, and it's nice to find someone to agree with.
Thank you for the encouraging praise, My Friend, and for loving anything about this complex and original piece! ⁓ Richard

[wordman]

my pleasure rascal,

[Sheryl]

Beautifully and tastefully sensual Hexaverse and I like the occasional use of // between verses,
I love the line about Eros and the tempest strong enough to deliver your words,
written in only the way your passionate heart could write this...LOve,Sheryl

[Richard🖌]

Aw, Sheryl!
You are a doll to grace my page and treat me to your sweet praise and appreciation … you make my pen warm and ready to do it again … MMmmm!
Thank you, M'Lady … cozy hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[Sheryl]

This piece was definitely my treat...Big Hugg's me

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Interesting form and demanding but you pull it off with eloquence and style with a Shakespearean tint.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, John!
Thanks for reading this unique, interesting, and challenging poem, filled with sensuality, romance, and a wow-factor like few others.
Thanks for the comments and compliment … blessings on your day! ⁓ Richard