In Such Dreams ⁓ (sensual)

Eights 'n Sixes

You stood right here before me, Dear …

shone with the brightest glow,

I was aware that everywhere

our world began to slow.

This timeless space became your grace …

it was right then I knew;

life sparkled fine, like ancient wine,

each sip a taste of You.

Lips softly meet, such flavors sweet,

the universe our world …

in every place I saw your face,

my senses all unfurled.

You smelled of spice, like paradise …

when we touched, hot sparks flew;

’twas then we kissed, a gentle mist

of stardust’s golden hue

fell all around … there was no sound,

except your tender sighs.

You took my hand, then bade me stand,

looked deep into my eyes:

A gentle stroke, each word you spoke,

calmed down my every fear …

with much in-store, I wanted more,

down your cheek rolled a tear.

With care I asked, “Has sorrow passed?”

You smiled and touched my face;

“No, my sweet man, love has began,”

took me in warm embrace,

“as passions grow, my rivers flow,

alluring you to me;

aching pure bliss, I crave your kiss …

yearn our sweet ecstasy.”

Your hem lifted, I was gifted

when you laid softly down.

The spell then broke when I awoke,

“Ahhh, in such dreams I’d drown.”

Richard W. Jenkins

©2015

Author's Note

Eights 'n Sixes
Original form created by
Richard W. Jenkins
© 1 Apr 1987

Any number of 4-line verses about anything:
Aligned left or centered.

Syllable count per verse:
8/6/8/6

Rhyme scheme:
xxxaxxxa
xxxxxb
xxxcxxxc
xxxxxb

xxxdxxxd
xxxxxe
xxxfxxxf
xxxxxe

Etc...

Picture/image, from Wikimedia Commons.

I gladly welcome constructive critique! : )

Reviews

[dr ak]

This poem has put spellbound on me. This poem is the epitome of passion,infinite love, intensity and deep emotions. The way you put life in the words makes my soul lively and mesmerized. This is the best poem i have come across in a while. Keep it up. You are one hell of perfect poet, no doubt about it 😊

[Richard🖌]

Hi-ya, Doc! : )
What a pleasure and honor to receive such a banner review for a first read of my poems.
I hope you'll enjoy any others as much as you seem to have this one.

Thank you for the expressed appreciation, enjoyment, and praise … blessings! ⁓ Richard

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Beautifully romantic and surely sensual as promised by the title!
Loved the smooth flow of words like honey!
Enjoyed the heavenly imagery.

[Richard🖌]

So delightfully gentle, the feel of your sweet touch, Jyoti … your enjoyment, warming praise, knowing sentiments and commentary express the gift of a woman's appreciative understanding.
For sharing these, and for selecting this romantically-gratifying poem, you both honor and reward this humble, hopeful bard … thank you, Jyoti! 〜 Richard

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are very welcome!

[Richard🖌]

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[marcus]

And who wouldn't be drowning, in such magical dreams!

[Richard🖌]

Thanks, Marcus, for the appreciated comment! 〜 Richard

[Hiroshi Masters]

Such a soft and calm poem. So unique and Beautifully written!! Love it! Im new here!

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Aroshi, and "WELCOME!" to the site … I hope you'll make this your home and enjoy and learn from all the great writers here.
Thank you so very much for your inspiring and appreciative praise of this little piece! 〜 Richard

[Sheryl]

Lovely Richard, this one seems vaguely familiar...I love this and the twist at the close
really took me by surprise! This write is truly magical and Oh soooo dreamy, you definitely
held me spellbound throughout this entire piece and the close gave me a huge ~G~R~I~N~!!
Fantastic writing my friend...LOve,Sherrill

[Richard🖌]

Sheryl Dearest,
You do know how to slather a hopeful bard with the praise and enjoyment he so yearns and writes for, and how sweet of you to mention that final verse, which coincidentally, makes me "grin" too. ; )

Hugs and warmly-grateful blessings, M'Lovely Lady! 〜 Richard

[Perkele.7885]

Impressed, I was, Impressed, I still am! A very sensuous write that made the man look every part the lover that he is and not the aggressive macho animal he seems always purported to be.

[Richard🖌]

Thanks, Perkele.

[Roland Petrov]

I came looking here because of Mattavelli's poem which credited you for the invention of the style. Very well crafted indeed! One day I shall try my hand at one of these.

[Richard🖌]

Yes, Roland,
Mat (indeed) is a fine poet, with potential to become a true master.
He honored me by trying this original form of mine, and hit it spot-on in every way.
If you were to give it a try, it would reward me so highly, Roland; please, let me know if you do so I can read and review it for you.

Thank you sincerely for reading this one, and for your wonderful compliment!
Blessing to you, my friend! ~ Richard

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your closing verse literally blew me away, though I can see I'm not the only one!

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Kelly Sweet!
How happy I am to see your name as reviewer of this romantically-delightful little sizzler.
You always know how to please with the right words.

You have so deeply honored and pleased me with your lovely presence.
My warmest, most appreciative hug of thanks to you, Our Fine Lady-Poet! ~ Richard

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This is beautiful, Rascal! It flows as sweet as it's story. You're a very gifted writer and a kind soul, dear poet :)

[Richard🖌]

If I had any doubt, Sweet Lynn, about anyone feeling and understanding this romantically sensual little poetic effort, they all were allayed in the warming embrace of your affectionately embracing words.

What a delightful joy you make writing and sharing … hugs 'n blessings to you, Dear Lynn! ~ Richard

[Sammi]

Hi Rascal,
My name is Sammi.
I am new here and got your name from the Top Reviewers list and wanted to attract some reviewers for my poems, but I never want anyone to review me without me reviewing them too.
First of all the picture sets the perfect mood for your poem and the beautiful way you have of speaking your words. I have never seen a poem that is so easy to read and that rhymes so much, but it is not too much. I think it is one of the best poems I have ever read to tell the truth.
It is sensual but not to much so.

I like it a lot Rascal, thank you for the great enjoyment,
Sammi

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Sammi, so very much for joining the site with us and for your excellent first review of my efforts … I hope we will enjoy each others' poetry for a long time to come.
Please, let me welcome you to The Writer's Cafe … there are many great poets here better than I am, so you have a real treat in store, and I am sure you will attract many reviewers and make many new friends in no time at all.
I will befriend you to make it easy to find you, and come read and review for you right away.

Again, welcome to the site and big thanks for the great review! ~ Richard

[Sammi]

Thank you Richard for the welcome.

It is my pleasure,
Sammi xx