In these quiet places (softly sensual)

Free Verse (lines of poetry written in a poetic voice, with no particular structure, no rhymes, that flows, with line-breaks in smooth and comfortable places)

In these quiet places …

Come, let me pull you gently into our quietness,

where wonder has etched the loveliness of

your softly alluring "take me" eyes

permanently into my hopeful,

azure blues,

where the dawns rise silently ~ gently

to mist our early skies with gold

before surrendering...

on unto the day.

Let us entwine our ever-willing, hungry fingers

in quiet, reverent solitude...

to stroll through boundless amber fields,

where wild stalks of wheat in training

learn to weather life's gloriously

gentled breath of creation,

waving as one together

at all awe-struck

passers-by.

Let me know you in your quiet stillness,

as I have known you like soft waves

fondling the excited shore, while

You are siren, I am sailor...

where the all of us is

~ Eternity.

Let me love you in your calm moments,

that I may know it is me your loins

open in aching hunger for, and

it is for me your eyes close

when your sighs breathe

and flow softly down

o'er me from your

lusty throat.

Then, in the solitude of this time, Our time...

embraced in these hushed surroundings,

let our souls meld into matrimony,

with no clergy or witnesses,

....and....

in these quiet places, let me be

the sole reason your arms,

your moist lips, and

your world

exists.

Richard W. Jenkins

©2016

1st PLACE

Blue Rose Café's

Free Verse Romance Contest

Author's Note

Photograph, from Wikimedia Commons.

This may be a bit too long for some — it is my shamelessly-exuberant pen I blame it on … LOL!

Constructive critique is always welcome. : )

Reviews

[DIVYA]

Dear Richard,
The first thing that caught my eye was the tapered verses that seem to enhance the punch in each verse. The poem spoke to me of a lover very quietly confident of the depths of his feelings and very sure of his noble intentions in love. A quiet, golden hush descends on my soul as the poem reaches it's peak with just the right amount of gentle yet very palpable sensuality, culminating in the ultimate dream of true matrimony, that of the souls. In an initial glance, the poem may look structurally long but it does not feel long once I start reading it, in fact, I would willingly sell my soul to stroll in those amber fields forever. The greatness of love lies not in its wild, red hot and wanton moments but in the sheer joy and peace felt in such moments of amazing stillness and solitude shared by two souls as one. Thank you for letting me feel and appreciate the true essence of Love...❤

[Richard🖌]

Goodness-ME, Divya!

That this poem is displayed in such a distinct form would be expected to immediately catch your eye, and that its length did not discourage you is a gift to me, indeed, for I would not have received the monumental blessing of your marvelously endearing review.

Your voice speaks to me in such an unmistakable manner, that there is no doubting how accurately and deeply your interpretation of this poem's essence truly is, Divya … not something I am accustomed to, as few do/can/have the capacity to — I do not know. I had thought it must have been my ability to clearly and concisely share my intent, my thoughts, emotions, feeling, my heart and core with others; yet, your embracing words to me have dispelled all that. One cannot convey accurate truths unless they first have it in them to perceive, feel, and relate to them in the exact manner in which You have — there must be a silver thread spanned between us, upon which … ahhh, I could travel this endlessly, but suffice it to say you have gratified me beyond words. I love it that we've touched and connected*

Thank you seems so moot, but I genuinely, sincerely do, Dear Poetess … warmest hugs to you, Divya! ⁓ Richard

[mou]

create a poetic silent moonlight everywhere.i like it.very smooth

[Richard🖌]

Thank you most gratefully, Mou!
I very much appreciate your comments and praise of this romantically sensual poem, and that you "like it" inspires me keep writing.

Blessings for your day, and thanks again! ⁓ Richard

[Terry O'Leary]

An interesting structure... seems to bring each verse to a point!
Well done...
Terry

[Richard🖌]

Thanks, Terry,
Your review is notably witty, and I appreciate your always welcome praise! ⁓ Richard

[SleeplessVolcano]

I think the physical structure of this poem lends itself to being longer than usual - the shape you created with each verse begs the reader to read on. Subtle sensuality also do not respond well to restraint....expressing those poetic impulses is imperative, and you have captured these quiet and peaceful moments of love in a symphonic poem!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, SL,
Your review is lovely, encouraging, gratifying and succinctly interpretive … those aspects of relatability and understanding that allows a hopeful bard to know he's connected with the reader; this is praise and gratification higher than any applause.

I bow most humbly and earnestly with great joy … blessings to you! ⁓ Richard

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Wow! Mesmerizing and enticing piece of love and oneness of two souls.
Richard, your eloquent words took us, the reader, to an amazing sensual excursion!
I, for one, loved this free style, which melts like honey!
Enjoyed reading this!

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Jyoti!
It is wonderfully warming to have you review one of my more sensually romantic pieces … strolling into the more mature genre of my efforts … it broadens my smile and makes me very happy to have you here. : D
It is actually a Free Verse, M'Lady, but when an inspiring, beautiful, and relatable review as yours is expressed with such feeling and lovely aplomb, a poem in itself, who cares … I'm just dancing inside and all over! ; )

Thank you so much for your deep and succinct understanding of these intricate verses, for loving and enjoying it … warmest hugs to you, Dear Jyoti! ⁓ Richard

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are very welcome! :D

[Faith]

The yearning and dare I say desperation here is so real. The need to make someone understand how much you want to be their everything, just for that one single moment. Beautiful.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Faith (sure is a beautiful name),
Form such praise and deep understanding you've expressed of this prolifically romantic and sensual piece, comes a genuine sense of enjoyment, feeling, and rapport with its very essence, and what more could an earnest and hopeful bard hope for in gratuity?

I loved your beautiful review, Faith — it warmed and more than gratified me for sharing this deeply touching piece … hugs 'n smiles to you! ⁓ Richard

[Faith]

Any time sir! And thank you for your kindness. A faithful writer indeed are you!

[Richard🖌]

A warm blush graces my cheeks*

[Valentine]

A very romantic write. I like the free flow as it seems like a sweet melody when read. All types of poetry writing are better when the free flow of words is there. Valentine

[Richard🖌]

I could not agree with you more, Dear Kathie,
Thank you effusively for the warmth and enjoyment you've expressed, and for liking this sensually romantic little piece. : )

Hugs 'n brightest blessings to you, Kathie! ⁓ Richard

[Philip Muls]

Let me know you, let me love you. Nice flow. Very much inviting and welcoming the reader, that is how I experience it.

[Richard🖌]

Philip,
Thank you ever-so gratefully for reading this warmly romantic little piece, and for sharing your insightful thoughts on it, and your nice compliments are inspiring, too.
Brightest blessings to you! ⁓ Richard

[JayceeC]

To be loved and worshiped in the quiet times, is a gift that goes beyond the passion generated. The reassurance of love really comes in the ordinary everyday moments off affirmation. Nice flow, with some surprising images such as your "hungry hands" but well written journey this.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Dear Jan,
How blissfully true your sentiments and feeling are, Jan, as one who knows the essence, maturity, and enthrallment of deep, loving passion ⁓ beyond the reach of words … such an entreating thought to thrill a romantic like me!
Quote: "Let us entwine our ever-willing, hungry fingers
in quiet, reverent solitude..."
Your praise and presence is warm and encouraging gratification, indeed … thank you, Jan! ⁓ Richard

[emmajoy]

'Then, in the solitude of this time, Our time...' t hose are words to nudge memories to the forefront of a humdrum day!

Your first stanza could stand alone as one of the best romantic poems in this site's history! Tis beautiful, tis powerful, has all the attributes a writer can bring to love and desire.

[Richard🖌]

Em,
I believe I have never received a higher compliment, or more encouraging, rewarding, warming, or gratifying words than yours for any one of my poems … and, coming from a poetess of your caliber, I am left quite breathless, to be honest, and I love it far beyond the capacity of my humble words!
I think I shall spend the rest of the week with my feet barely on the ground.
Thank You, Em, for reading, appreciating, and letting me know just how much and in what way you do.
Hugs 'n warmest blessings to You! ⁓ Richard

"Happiest Holidays, too!" : )

[emmajoy]

Laughing, forgive me.. feel i ought to call out some help for you... tis too near Christmas to be hovering over land!

Meant what i said, your poem's a gift to any romantic with a real heart. :). .

[Richard🖌]

Thank you most sincerely, Em.