In these quiet places (softly sensual)

In these quiet places (softly sensual)

A Poem by Richard🖌
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Free Verse (lines of poetry written in a poetic voice, with no particular structure, no rhymes, that flows, with line-breaks in smooth and comfortable places)

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In these quiet places …


Come, let me pull you gently into our quietness,

where wonder has etched the loveliness of

your softly alluring "take me" eyes

permanently into my hopeful,

azure blues,

where the dawns rise silently ~ gently

to mist our early skies with gold

before surrendering...

on unto the day.


Let us entwine our ever-willing, hungry fingers

in quiet, reverent solitude...

to stroll through boundless amber fields,

where wild stalks of wheat in training

learn to weather life's gloriously

gentled breath of creation,

waving as one together

at all awe-struck

passers-by.


Let me know you in your quiet stillness,

as I have known you like soft waves

fondling the excited shore, while

You are siren, I am sailor...

where the all of us is

~ Eternity.


Let me love you in your calm moments,

that I may know it is me your loins

open in aching hunger for, and

it is for me your eyes close

when your sighs breathe

and flow softly down

o'er me from your

lusty throat.


Then, in the solitude of this time, Our time...

embraced in these hushed surroundings,

let our souls meld into matrimony,

with no clergy or witnesses,

....and....

in these quiet places, let me be

the sole reason your arms,

your moist lips, and

your world

exists.



Richard W. Jenkins

©2016





1st PLACE

Blue Rose Café's

Free Verse Romance Contest

© 2018 Richard🖌


Author's Note

Richard🖌
Photograph, from Wikimedia Commons.

This may be a bit too long for some — it is my shamelessly-exuberant pen I blame it on … LOL!

Constructive critique is always welcome. : )

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Great writing richard, words taking one on a journey to celebrate the potential and value of the human person-for me the key line is "let me know you in your quiet stillness" I think its psalm 46 where we find "be still and know..." the stilness and quiet are what we can share and enrich for anotherperson

Posted 7 Years Ago


Richard,

This free verse read to me of a story, yearning for an everlasting love. Your words paint a picture to me, of a dream like setting, full of soft, gentle imagery throughout.
The smooth line breaks, only make it a pleasure to read, through my novice set of eyes.
While I agree, the length may be too long for some; to each their own, in that aspect.
Our pens will sometimes take us on these long, wondrous journeys that only prove to be so rewarding in the end. The proof is right here, My Friend, In these quiet places.

Thanks for sharing ~ Paul

Posted 7 Years Ago


both are lovely (from 2016 and 2017). i feel the first is ... "more soft"! but the second has more "rhythm" (or may be is just the way i reed them!)
I think they are beautiful!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your lovely review, Angelina! ; )
Your praise, expressed appreciation, enjoymen.. read more
angelina neves

7 Years Ago

it was a pleasure! and i'm glad to have made you write another "poem" just to answer to the "pieces".. read more
let me
be the reason
your arms, moist lips,
and world
exists.....

let our souls meld into matrimony,
with no clergy or witnesses,

Sweet like the soft whisper of winds soothing the skin....

I liked the way you have described the union in a sacred manner....

I came to check the tutor of yumna Heheh....enjoyed reading your creation.



Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ardra

7 Years Ago

I liked the way each poem title has small note of what it is....easier for the reader to choose what.. read more
Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

If, while on my Profile page, you click on "Writing" above my name, it will take you to my Portfolio.. read more
Ardra

7 Years Ago

Yes....it would be lot better to tag them... I will try to do for my new poems ...
a truly remarkable piece, im new and i love your work so much talent

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Thanks a bunch, Tracey! : )
Who doesn't enjoy such praise and appreciation expressed for thei.. read more
Being the reason that someone is is such a romantic yet destructive concet. This love reminds of a dream. Old school with a new feel
Thanks for sharing!
J


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Footnote:
Jenny, I've reposted the original of this poem, if you might be interested in compa.. read more
Jenny

7 Years Ago

Anytime! It's my pleasure sunshine!

There are certains things in the edited version t.. read more
Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Jenny,
Your trip back for a second taste made my day smile with joy.
.. read more
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Beautifully penned.

Only thing I'd add is quotes around "take me eyes" (or some other delineation) had to re-read a few times to understand the meaning (thought it was a grammatical error, at first).

Otherwise, lovely heart-felt and smooth write.

I enjoyed it.

Much love,

LR

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Dear LR … sighhh!
Your words of praise and expressed appreciation, deeply warm m.. read more
"let me
be the reason
your arms, moist lips,
and world
exists."
This is sensual indeed! I like the emotions here, if the need, the longing one feels when desires creep in.. And then you can feel no one except for the one you would love to be with.. It truly is an amazing piece!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

You know so much, Yumna, feel so very deeply, understand vastly in so many dimensions … how fortun.. read more
Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Dear Yumna,
Below this edited style you reviewed, I've reposted the original of this poem, if.. read more
THIS left a smile within. A meltingly gentle and full of care work.

Well said sir.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Chris, kindly and gratefully! : )
The personality of this one is owed to Vanessa's.. read more

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