b l o s s o m • t i m e (Japanese beauty)

HAIKU … for a change of pace.

Author's Note

Critical reviews are always appreciated.

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Richard,
Now this something Iv'e not tried; (Haiku) To present the picture you have intended is really neat! I love the way you have honored Japanese culture of the season here.
Delicate says so much in the first line and then in the second line I found the phrase "meandering gentle hosts to feel like the breeze carrying the fragrance and the people being blessed by all the beauty also blessed by the fragrance.
thanks so much for the great inspiration in both form and style.
Kathy

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Dear Kathy🌻
Thank you so warmly for reading me.
Nothing graciously pleases anymore deeply and warmly than the wonderful caress of your interpretations, and this humble little poem seems so elegant in the glow of your voice.

As thankful as I am for the beauty dancing in your words, I am even more-so for your thanks … hugs to you! ⁓ Richard : )

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Richard,
Different feelings expressed through a form understandable within a culture and we get to enjoy it as well. I loved it. You are a motivated writer and a model of inspiration to someone like me.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Richard🖌]

You are too sweet. : )

[Neville]

You dont need me to tell you just how good this little fella is now do ya ..................... Oh' what the hell .. tis brill sir Richard & I aint talking fish neither ............... Neville

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Syr Neville, most humbly ⛩️

Your praise and sincerity truly gratify a grateful bard's earnest efforts.

May peace and joy sing to your heart! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[kitty]

The appreciation of these blooms are delightfully conveyed in these skilfully crafted words. Thanks for the picture imprinted in our minds.

[Richard🖌]

Hi again, Kitty! : )
How wonderful to receive two reviews from you on the same day.
I am truly honored and overjoyed … thank you!

You are so very welcome … hugs! ⁓ Richard : )

[kitty]

Having regained my MoJo back I feel more able to visit 'old' WN writers. Have a lovely evening

[Richard🖌]

I, for one, am grateful you have. : )

[kitty]

Again thank you M'lord. Your presence is always graciously accepted! Fare thee well from over the seas.

[Richard🖌]

Brightest, warmest smiles to thee! : )))

[Chris Shaw]

Superb imagery, saw similar myself at the weekend. Breathtaking beauty. Your posted image also a delight.

Thank you dear Richard

Chris

[Richard🖌]

that such a woman
would praise such a man as me
embraces my pen 🌸

Warmly yours! ⁓ Richard

[Chris Shaw]

How very sweet of you to say so Richard. Have a hug from me.

[Richard🖌]

How more warmed can a man possibly feel?

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Love the format, love the pic and love the subject matter - you have three ticks and my admiration - :-)

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Sir.
That an artist of your note loves anything about anything I've composed is high praise, indeed, but to know I've gained your admiration makes my humble efforts all the more worthwhile.

With a deep, grateful bow! ⁓ Richard

[lightsong]

and with this gentle beauty~ I'm drifting with these petals to Japan....

[Richard🖌]

What a wondrous feeling of thoughts and imagery you paint into imaginings, Dear Gh🌼

Warmest thank you hugs! ⁓ Richard

[lightsong]

~~~~~🌸🌸🌸🌸🌸🌸🌸🌸~~~~~

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Baby’s breath soft and tender meandering in loves sweet splendour- beauty in eye of beholder - and such beauty it is - short and sweet - 🌹

[Richard🖌]

Very endearing words, Kelly🌸
Touching tenderly the heart.

Hugs 'n warmest blessings! ⁓ Richard

[GreenShoes]

When you try to research the rules of haiku, the guidelines can be daunting, and the information out there is varied. Some say it's just a simple matter of a 5-7-5 syllable count on three lines, and other sources give FAR more complicated rules, and some say the 5-7-5 rule should be disregarded if writing a haiku in English. It can make you tentative to attempt it, but I enjoy writing short poems, and I like a challenge, so I've written a fair few of these. The one you've done here is lovely.

[Richard🖌]

Karen,
Since the Japanese rules for Haiku and Senryu are written in a language based on phonetical sounds, rather than syllables, as are most Western languages, our rules for these forms are different and not literally interchangeable with the Japanese language.
Here are the Western rules, in a little lesson I composed for my students:

On the subject of Haiku/Senryu (the English/Western interpretation, that is):
I was first introduced to poetry by my aunt when I was 9-years-old, and to many of the Japanese forms when I was around 16.
I was taught that the Haiku is ONLY about nature, while the Senryu is ONLY about human nature, or contains elements of things human and permits nature, while the Haiku is completely devoid of anything human or of human source.
Both forms are composed in three centered and unrhymed lines of 5/7/5 count, completely without punctuation or capitalization, and absolutely no formal title ... though, a one, two, or three word mention of it's essence is tolerable when timidly placed in smaller letters far above and to the left of the poem proper.
Each line of the Haiku and the Senryu must stand alone as its own statement, without enjambment; although, it may not stray too far from the ambiance in its other lines, or from the moment or topic of the poem itself.
The first line sets the scene or the mood, the second line describes the scene, and the final line concludes with a powerful or meaningful solution, message, or moment that stuns, surprises, or impresses deeply upon the reader.

scene/mood
meaning/description
solution/message

I readily admit that I have shamelessly experimented with these two forms by enjambing, writing multiple verses, capitalizing, punctuating, rhyming, and most any other way one might conceive that strays afield of the stringent rules, but I've always been a rogue of sorts – some even say, a Rascal...grin!

However, having said all that, here is a nice source for best enjoying, appreciating, and understanding the true spirit and nature of Haiku: http://www.ahapoetry.com/keirule.htm

I hope you've enjoyed my little seminar...smile!

Good poeting to you ... always ~ Richard

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, also, Karen Dear, for your gracious compliment … hugs! ⁓ Richard 🌺

[George Coombs]

Beautiful writing and well chosen imagewhich is ideal for this poetic form. A quietly joyous celebration of the present moment, excellent work

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, George,
You're a prince of a fella and a hell'a of a poetic reviewer …
happy blessings, my fine friend! ⁓Richard : )

[George Coombs]

Thankyou Richard

[Valentine]

I really like this. I was thinking cherry blossom but you fooled me. Valentine

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Kathie!
You've made my day smile … happy hugs! ⁓ Richard : )