Release to love (sadness is)

English [Shakespearean] Sonnet

Whilst life has gifted love so sweet as thee,

entwined down deep into my very core,

what choice but that it shall eternal be …

your breath's become my breath ~ forevermore.

 

Alas, sad 'tis not I (I must now face)

whose heart and soul for whom thine hopes await;

for, my deep love shall ne'er fulfill his place;

'tis true, the way life now has formed my fate.

 

When then, the four soft winds, like sorrow's tide,

come steal your love from me eternally,

I know he'll be there with his arms stretched wide,

in just the way I'd be ~ if I were he.

 

Tho' my soul's bent, like shadows 'cross the land,

doth prove my love … by letting loose thy hand.

Richard W. Jenkins

©2015

Author's Note

Honest, critical, and constructive reviews preferred, please.

Reviews

[Ardra]

Alas, sad 'tis not I (I must now face)
whose heart and soul for whom thine hopes await;
for, my deep love shall ne'er fulfill his place;
'tis true, the way life now has formed my fate.


...I felt the sadness of wanting to hold on yet to let go to
let the loved one find true happiness...

[Richard🖌]

It is written that when you love someone enough to let them go, and that if it's a true love meant to be, they'll return unto your arms.

You understood it perfectly, Dear Ria … warmest thank you hugs! ⁓ Richard : )

[Susan 🦋]

Why does your poetry hit me so hard?..omgoodness, just pick me up after reading this one!...Ohh to love with all your soul...only to love so much to see the truth, and let go...maybe forever. My heart hurts.

[Richard🖌]

Susan Dear,
I think it's because your depths of feeling and sensitivity are so vividly and imaginatively real that some of my more emotionally impacting poems have such an effect on you.
I know some of your hit me in the same way, but it's all imagined before it can be felt, eh?

Hugs, M'Lady! ⁓ Richard

[Susan 🦋]

not for me. I feel first, then write my heart.

[Richard🖌]

I mean, you have to imagine the feeling before you can write it, eh? ; )

[Richard🖌]

Actually, I was answering your question, "Why does your poetry hit me so hard?"

[Susan 🦋]

i read wrong thankyou for expianing.

[Richard🖌]

Anything, anytime … for You! ; )

[Einstein Noodle]

so tragic ..i feel it for the man :((( and such chivalry ... sigh! would we all brought such noble hearts to our own experiences in real life .. i am enriched in reading ..love to experience your sonnets sir .. i am inspired to try another of my own soon ..
E.

[Richard🖌]

Hi there, Gene! : )
It is so very nice to find you here this early morn, to receive your deep, understanding words in reflection, and most certainly such inspiring praise to one of my humble little Sonnets of heartbroken, "noble chivalry" (as you've so adroitly expressed).
One could passionately hope that, when they release their lover and leave the door open, they might find their way back into waiting arms.
Your new Sonnet will be my greatest pleasure to enjoy, My Friend … if help is required, I am always available and willing.
Blessings upon you, Dear Gene, with a hundred grateful thanks for such an brightly inspiring review! ⁓ Richard

[Einstein Noodle]

oh you will be my first to go to person .. and now that i have said i will do it ..and you are my witness and have made your generous offer ..i will get on it sir .. but it will take a little time .. within a month i will say .. there .. now there is a timeline involved ;) Bless you too sir ..and thank you!

[Richard🖌]

Your pleasure will (in time) be gleefully shared, My Friend! : )

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ..............

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

As always, Richard, this is beautifully written and a delight to read. It is a loss in that the beloved will never be "his", but the way in which he obviously loves her dictates that her happiness will be enough. So lovely to read a piece that expresses true love, even though the heartache is true.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you moist warmly for reading this sadly sentimental Sonnet, Claire, and for your lovely praise and enjoyment I most graciously bow!
You really make writing and sharing such a joy; for, the way your mind works is so wonderfully appealing to my senses — you seems to grasp me … well, my poems, and this is a rarity from those whom review my ernest little efforts.
You are special, and I love that you enjoy my writing … hugs to You! ⁓ Richard

[Richard🖌]

BTW: Your new profile picture steals my breath ⁓*

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

You are very kind...thank you.

[Richard🖌]

I thank you, too! : )

[Sheila Kline]

Somehow, though this is as you indicate a Shakespearean Sonnet, (in superb form) the content reminds me of Poe's "Annabel Lee" for the devotion and love is of a depth that pierces the soul; one now gone entwined down into one's core creates an image that is TOTAL, and the complete devotion expressed for the other by letting go of the hand of the other indicates a willingness to accept such angst as that which must be, forevermore as the love felt.
Your works are superb and reveal your great talent! I, a lowly poet, am indeed honored to read your poems!

[Richard🖌]

Oh, Sheila!
To have my humble rendering so praised by comparing it to Poe's work is, indeed, gratification beyond any I could have hoped for.
Such accolades from a poetess of your level (never a "lowly poet) sends sensations thrilling all through a hopeful bard's senses — I thank you ever-so warmly for reading and gifting me the charming wonder of your inspiring words … just what I needed! ⁓ Richard

[Ed Hart]

i am incapable of speaking to the structure of a poem...i am a content kind of guy...yet which of us is not indebted to the romantics who held our hand and taught us to give our hearts form in words...that is what i see reflected...thank you for reminding me of that, and sharing again the tenor and tenure of your heart

[Richard🖌]

Ed,
It is my discernment that one's innate nature dictates the genre of poetry that lures the senses to enjoy and compose that which pours froth from our beings upon the page.
Most are drawn to a certain form, style, or mode of poetic verse over another, or over others. To specialize, as you do, has often brought forth great skill and compositions within our art, developing many masters.
Unfortunately, for me, I've never been able to settle on any one style or form … fated to wander through the world of poetic vastness, from one genre, one form to another, as you will see, if you continue to browse through my library of offerings.
The one thing You and I can agree on is (as though there were nothing else), without proper and meaningful "content", excellent poetry is not possible, regardless whatever form it make take.
Yes, we are all indebted to the great classical writers, as I am to you for the words you've employed to convey such favor for this humble piece, and I am truly more than amply gratified by your praise and appreciation.

A bushel of many thanks to you, My Friend, for reading and reviewing one of my earnest efforts! ⁓ Richard

[R.M.C]

Popped along to have a look at your Sonnets and like I expected, they're great. I love sonnets and this is a perfect example why; your rhymes (and wording throughout) are so elegant and easy on the tongue but furthermore, your use of English is exquisite. The context is equal to your skill; you capture the heart saddening (and common place) situation effortlessly. A great read, like always.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Ross!
How truly honored I am by your visits upon my pages, for such encouraging praise and appreciation of my humble efforts to share and please, but most of all for being the sort of reader and reviewer who knows how to reach into a poet and let them know.
No greater gratuity could a hopeful bard ask than these … bless you, My Friend! ⁓ Richard

PS … I look forward to sharing your poetry, in pleasurable times to come. : )

[mattavelli]

Hi, Richard, long time, no read. This poem is beautiful, especially the third quatrain.

[Richard🖌]

Hey, Matt, My Very Fine Friend! : )
I am so pleased you decided in drop-in for a read and review, and most certainly to leave your always appreciated praise and enjoyable words of encouragement to my humble little efforts.
In reading back through this piece, I must agree with you on your choice of verses, and the final Heroic Couplet ain't all that bad, either.
Many thanks and blessings to you and your brightest dreams! ⁓ Richard

[David Scott]

An elegant revision of an old adage...
Truth has a beauty all its own; yet, you have found a way to embellish the flowering of love.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear David!
That you consider this humble effort "elegant" is praise beyond that which I expected; still, I crave and adore praise of my poems, so I'm not going to throw yours back … LOL!
I like what you've said of "truth" and "beauty", as it rings true for me, as-well, My Friend.
Yes, "the flowering of love" indeed; yet, that it were my own.
Many bright blessings, My Friend! ⁓ Richard

[annalysiar]

Its. So gripping and so smooth...such a beautiful poem with lovely passionate words, what a soulful rendition of a Shakespearean sonnett

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Anna,
It is a genuine pleasure to receive the loveliness of your praise and appreciation for my humble little efforts, though I earnestly admit this piece was spilt with personal ink, unlike most of my poems that come from simple imagination.

You both warmed and encouraged me to keep writing and hoping for more reviews like yours.
Bless you your sincere kindness and generosity … just what I needed! ⁓ Richard

[annalysiar]

I'm glad to have helped you Richard and I do hope you continue to write 😃😃