An angel's love ~ (softly sensual)

English [Shakespearean] Sonnet

           

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           Across my fields of wonder … drifting by,

            like ribbons floating through a wispy dream,

            a nymphette whispered soft my name ~ a sigh;

            'twas there she stood inside a golden beam.

            Her verdant eyes shone like a polished gem,

            with sparkling glints that hypnotized my soul,

            and (somehow) I was drawn deep into them

            in such a way I knew I'd been made whole.

            

Faint sounds of crystal waters dancing by,

            on velvet mossy banks she lay me down.

            She taught me love there 'neath a blushing sky,

            then wrapped us warm inside her pure white gown.

            

She took my breath and breathed it back in me;

            that instant, knew ~ she'd set my spirit free.

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     Richard W. Jenkins

                ©2015                                                                                                       

Author's Note

Painting: "Aire" … acrylic on canvas, by Manuel G. Avendaño

Constructive critique is always appreciated.

Reviews

[kitty]

I agree with the writers slant on this piece. Softly sensual I'd say ~ Upon the banks of yonder Avon in Stratford a bard did lie. He thought of nothing else as pairs of swans go passing by: a lovely maiden he had wooed, appeared across the golden sky. . .and then that angel burst the bubble and drifted silently up above ~ i do now wonder why!

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, Sweet Kitty🌸
With such sweeping wonder and delight, your poetic words embrace and cuddle my appreciatively stirred warmth … your review rivals the scintillating beauty of this endearing Sonnet.

Smiles 'n hugs to thee for such a gift, Lovely Poetess! ⁓ Richard ; )

[kitty]

Ah to be on that river bank as fluffy clouds go drifting by and nonchalantly take in the ambiance of the place is an experience to be desired. Your presence on this page is greatly appreciated M'Lord!

[ANTO]

this is eloquent and quite beautiful Richard my friend - nothing more to say mate. It moved me.
:)

[Richard🖌]

Most gracious and appreciative thanks to you, Anto … you have truly brightened my smile today.
read moreMost gracious and appreciative thanks to you, Anto … you have truly brightened my smile today.
I am so very grateful you chose this little Sonnet to read, and that you found favor in it … blessings, my friend! ~ Richard

[Roland Petrov]

Ah, you have written more sonnets! Just lovely. My only critique is that instants don't know; people do. I have no beef with poetic license, but personally I would probably have said "instantly I knew".

[Richard🖌]

A million thanks, Roland, for reading and commenting on one of my humble little Sonnets, and for the gratifying praise.

Of course, you well know (as do we all) the meaning is that it was me who in "that instant knew" … everyone knows an instant cannot know such a thing. :)

To use the words as you propose would throw the iambic beat of the Sonnet rhythm off.
"INstantLY i KNEW" would begin the line trochaic and ran the HARD beat of KNEW and SHE together.

I am sure it could have been said differently and kept that line in proper beat; give me a bit of time to work on it and we'll see if I can't come up with something more suitable for you.

Thank you again, my new friend … blessings! ~ Richard

[Roland Petrov]

You're right! I was scratching the bottom of the barrel to find something to criticize; the poem's so perfect, it's all I could come up with. Am thoroughly enjoying your sonnets.

[Daydreamer]

Hello, thank for your kind review. I enjoyed yours just the same as this is such a powerfully romantic yet inspirational write. Sometimes we need our angels to revive us..

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Lady-Poet, for blessing me with your words of enjoyment, understanding, and praise – those gems or gratitude that keep the poetic sparkle in my eye.
I noticed you never leave comments to your reviews and couldn't help wondering how your reviewers would know if they are appreciated or how you feel about their efforts on your behalf, yet, here see you've thanked me for mine, and you are most welcome … just sharing a thought. :)

Thank you again, M'Lady … your review is like bright
nuggets of inspiration! ~ Richard

[Annie Gryphon]

this is such a sweet little fairy tale, Richard, full of softness and mysterious images, i love the "crystal waters" and the "velvet mossy banks" and the message that a connection can touch someone so deeply that it sets the spirit free. Hope you found your nymphette!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Annie, for reading this humble little effort and for letting me know how much you enjoyed it … your words inspire and encourage me … I feel blessed by your review! ~ Richard