The Sheep who Thought he Was a Wolf

We held each other,

c l o s e l y

in your grandparent's bedroom.



I hid beneath her;

b e n e a t h

the aroma of molasses.



We flimsily took off our cloths;

t e a r i n g

them for I thought we were savage wolves.









 

Author's Note

Reviews

[None]

Well done!! I like the story for this piece that is not found in what you said (wrote) but in what you did not say/ write - which also compliments the title perfectly

[Vria P Crow]

Thank you always for your kind and insightful reviews. I will be sure to return the favor. :)

[Angel]

He sounds very sweet. A sheep who thought he was a wolf...I like that.
Well penned!!

[Vria P Crow]

He is innocent :) At first, I was angry with him, but I came to peace that we are just humans from different Tribes, so to speak. Unfortunately, I hurt him because I am a Lion :( I do not support bestiality :P

[Rita L. Sev]

Well penned piece of wild abandon. I like the sheep/wolf image.

[Vria P Crow]

Thank you for you compliments, Rita :) This is about my ex boyfriend who I was with for 7 years. He played this song after we broke up and after I was in the psych ward.

[Wesley Dingler]

This has a strangely artistis flow, especially to be free-verse poetry. But do you think it really merits a "mature" rating? It was only suggestively "dirty."

[Vria P Crow]

Dear Wes,
I would have to agree with you on that one. To be honest, I put mostly everything as Mature only because some people can get some odd interpretations that could lend it to be offensive. However, I shall change it :) Thanks Wes!

[Wesley Dingler]

Any time. I usually only throw the mature rating up if it has a certain amount of sex or verbal nasties. Or if I don't want my mom to read it, since she passes over the ones that are rated "mature." She's not old enough for that yet.



-wes




P.S.
Nice legs.....

[Vria P Crow]

haha Well thank you.

V

p.s. tanks ;)
p.s.s. Beautiful name, Wes

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

it was all good

[flicktion]

What a solid ending. To me I get, two timid souls finding strength in each other to fight as fiercely as wolves for what they want. Excellent.

[Lady Ra]

Fabulous! And you used another image / song from a movie that I love "The Piano." Kindred spirit. The world is yours to write upon. Never stop writing, expressing, dreaming, wondering, exploring, travelling, questioning, inspiring, leading, discovering, pioneering. Paint the world with your pen.

Lady Ra

[Vria P Crow]

Awe, thank you so much Lady Ra! Your compliments never cease to make me smile!
I am currently writing a sweet Erotic poem because most of mine in the past have been so hostile.

Ms. Benthil

p.s. I will be reading your sequel to your last poem :)

[ChemicalMadness]

We flimsily took off our clothes....ahhhh, the good old days.....

CM.

[Vria P Crow]

I concur! I apologize for deleting posts that should not have been deleted. To be honest, I don't remember doing that.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Excellent read and write.

[Vria P Crow]

Thank you, Brandon! :)
Happy writing :)