Its Not Love Its Just Me Again!

I wish I was stronger and could tell you the truth, but I get so caught up in the moment that I don't think about anything. That is until the moment is over. I feel bad and I like you, but I don't love you the way you need to be loved.

  

Its Not Love Its Just Me Again!!!

 

Again

We sit in the same position…

Again

We wait, pretending to be patience…

Again

Light emits from the television,

But no one watches…

This play has been viewed before…

 

Throwing all of the secrets on the floor

While keeping the remainder hidden under the blanket

 

I love when I’m not thinking,

I love what I love because I fear reality

Reality please hide

Please hide until we have finished…

 

KNOCK KNOCK!!!

 

Hello, who is there?

Reality, and I’ve come to talk…

 

I announce shamefully

A BAD VILE!

Time, isn’t it time you’ve learned to rewind?

With silence every answer was spoken

 

Again I say I don’t want this anymore!!!

 

...ring…..ring……ring…

….{hello}….

I LOVE YOU

Again I say I’m sorry…

Again through silence I hear her cry…

 

 

Reviews

[Craig Bates]

Your title is great but maybe the exclamation marks are too much. Without them (or maybe with just one) I think it makes for such a good introduction to the poem. It really does draw you in.

The poem itself is scattered. Fragmented. It works because of what you are saying but it could also do with some close reading and revision to get it tighter.

My favourite part was what seemed like the turning point at the centre of your poem.
'Hello, who is there?
Reality, and I've come to talk�'
that is such a good image and it hangs with you through the rest of the poem.
Thanks for the read.

[darkgurl]

"KNOCK KNOCK!!!
Hello, who is there?
Reality, and I've come to talk�"

Such truthful lines here, this is a well written and creative write here, i like this...Kim

[Adela Muresan]

Kowel.
I really liked the way that you expressed such a beautiful emotion.
It's not often that ppl view love so realistically and express it so well � good job, *****poem.

A.M.

[Anima Inspired]

Interesting idea for a poem...this has a really "experimental" and emotional feel, which I like. I once had a boyfriend tell me "I love you, but I'm not in love with you"...this poem reminded me of that. This poem reminded me of how hard it can be to move on from something toward something else that may seem scary or different. Nicely written...good flow, and good use of line breaks!