UGH!!!!

This is a poem of the short story that I wrote that I also called "UGH!!!!"

Love betrays the mind

It lies a false foundation

An in conceived notation of someone's own needs.

Taken away my mind was.

A certain girl took the very heart that should never have left

I see her now so distant as she is.

　

A friend she wants to be

A nullified lover she doesn't understand I cannot be

Distrusted you now are.

　

 

Taken away, loved conceived and tossed away

Power taken away and thrown to the side

Gripping sentimental value you share in my mind.

　

You played my mind, embarrassed me

Public displays of my affection that were never shared

You told me it was love that you felt.

　

 

Yet where are you now????

Bedding another????

That was never love.

My vows broken,

yours never existing,

where are you now???

　

 

I hope you well

The man you think that you have

In two weeks time there will be another.

　

 

You will get what you want

Drop him like a hot potato with an old excuse.

I want to be friends!!!!!

　

 

WELL HEAR ME NOW!!!!!

As my heart screams at me

I shall not be your friend it tells me.

　

 

My mind tells me that to be your friend

It will show you a horrific reality of a life lost.

A life of love that you will never have.

　

 

A true man that I am

A true woman that you are not.

Take my word a lover you will never see me as.

　

 

Because this day I decide.

My fate is in my hands and my path is chosen.

You have taken another and lost me FOREVER!!!!!!

Reviews

[Aehr]

Honestly I don't read long poems much, lol. But this one caught me by the sleeve right from the start :) I love the description. I'd love it if you toyed with the idea of writing about the same from a girl's perspective. It might come out as good as this one. But whatever it is, it is a great poem, and I loved it.
Shelving it :)

[Richard Anthony Goulart]

Why thank you so much. I hope to hear more from you about my work. Thank you again for the great review.

[Cassie Fraga]

very nice read... can feel the commotion of heart and head... hits me deeply.
her loss honey!!

[Callum]

I like it. Very good poem!

[Priscilla Sayers]

That was a wonderful write! I felt the hurt , the anguish, the anger, and the self empowering climactic end!
Shot right through the heart of all who know this type of heartbreak. Well Done Sir!

[Shep]

Love the poem, I just wish I could write like this.

[Krystal Nicole]

Great poem!!!

[paradise]

Amazing poem

[Calypso]

This is the same reason why I'm not ready to ask my crush/friend out. And none of my friends understand that.

[Mikey alexander]

this is a verry good read mate loved it xxx

[Richard Anthony Goulart]

Thank you Kim I try to express more feeling in what I write rather than just try and describe something and yes it is sad. It is something that people dont truly understand untill it actually happens to them. I know that I sure didn't.

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This is so sad really, but your feelings are expressed so well. I really loved your last stanza, leaves room for some hope though. You can always find yourself.