Anton Falls...

A continuation of Heaven Lost an Angel Today...

Anton opened the door,

Going back to his own apartment

Feeling loss and sadness,

Wondering if he could save

Adora.

 

As he stepped through the door,

He felt the ground go out from under his legs,

And for a moment

He stood there

In mid-air

Like a certain cartoon coyote.

Then,

Suddenly,

He felt his breath leave him

As he fell into darkness.

 

From all around him

He heard the sounds of

Crying.

Her crying.

Adora.

 

“I’m going to save you!”

He tried to call out,

But nothing left him

Except more oxygen.

But that didn’t seem to matter

Because a voice came to him:

“Anton…”

She spoke.

She’d heard him.

 

When it felt as though

He would suffocate

Anton hit solid ground.

He lay there,

Eyes closed,

Just breathing.

When he got his breath back

He opened his eyes and

Gasped.

 

Reviews

[Nella]

This is really intense in it's quick delivery. I was captured from the beginning to the end... I particularly like the lines:

"When it felt as though
He would suffocate
Anton hit solid ground."

I understand and relate to this feeling...

Gorgeous piece!

[HarperRoseValente]

I actually really like this. Theres a lot of mystery behind it and people can enjoy speculating who Adora is

[Tina Kline]

This is very mysterious. I'm thinking when he opened his eyes he saw Adora and realized he had saved her, or at least was with her.

I think you structured this poem nicely, well done.

[♪GetUse2MyMelodie..]

this is sad...mysterious...it just makes me wonder...but i like it =)

[J.P. Bristow]

If you are doing a Endymion type poem-- I hope once all are posted that you will post together. It deserves to read together as one.