Journey with me

trying to break out of my writers block!

Candle lights flicker
Nib scratches parchment
As ink hurries to follow

Thoughts running array
I snatch up thread after thread
And let ink create their image

I know not its destination
A mere catalyst am I
Coaxed along for the journey

Mountains line the horizon
As seas shimmer gold
And doubloons sail its waters

A lake reflects the moon
An owl hoots its glee
As a mouse scampers for safety

Slowly the end draws near
The lovers embrace finally under the moonlight
Eyes flicker open, dream melts away with a sigh

Author's Note

please be gentale it has been a while

Reviews

[a]

This write really consumed, i read it twice to sink in and feel the poem. In this poem You are trying to describe the process of giving birth to a work of art in writing, correct? The first three verses let me believe the magical event of creation, but the two next ones, in my opinion, take a rough curve and suddenly it felt like i'm watching a painter at work, therefore i didn't fit together any more. The last verse is too banal for your skillful writing, it seems unnecessary. In the long run, the last three verse could be better mend together.

[Dragon Witch]

I could see the picture form as you wrote, from one scene to the next.
A flow of ideas and creations, transfering dreams to creations and hugging them goodbye like a lover.
But angst for their future like a child you have reared.

[kryptonite911]

wow

[Frank Terino]

Talented wordsmithing, I found myself caught in the wisp of the paint. colorful imagery, flow and meaning.

"Eyes flicker open, dream melts away with a sigh"

[Bear]

Sorry it took me so long to get 'round to reading "Journey with me"!! I enjoyed, very much!! I reminded me of the times in my teens and 20's when I would always write by candle-light in the wee hours of the night. Used to use and ink well pen as well. The imagery you paint with your words brings back sites I've seen and creatures I've heard and seen as I traveled, and some times enjoy here in my home state. Embracing under the moonlight... it is good to share and enjoy when such embraces take place. Thanks for sharing this fine poem!! Sallie Bear

[TP LaRose]

Dream melts away with a sigh...ahhh, that's lovely.
Well done on breaking out of the block. Trust me it is difficult at times but when the motivation is there then the words will come.
I thought it was a great start........very light and whispery.

TP...Poetess

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

looks like you are back with a vengeance... great imagery you present.

[Samuel Dickens]

I think you punched a nice hole in that block. It sounds to me like an artist painting a picture, and then it ends in a way eerily reminiscent of one of my short stories. Two lovers watching the moon rise over a lake and an owl hooting nearby is a powerful image. I like it.