This Madness

random thoughts

“This Madness”

Let me divulge myself with this madness

Fill my heart with darkness

I’ll scream with loneliness

Wrap myself with sadness.

 

Fill my heart with darkness

I’ll ignore beauty and love the ugly

The demons will grip me

Yet I will let madness overwhelm me.

 

I’ll scream with loneliness

Hear the echoes of my pitiful cries

The wind will carry my shattered pieces

Pass it with a slow, haunting sound.

 

Wrap myself with sadness

Don’t look at me with pity

I’ll still return to the normal me.

Just now let me release this.

Author's Note

Here a new poem (:

Reviews

[Shy Girl]

Random?? I liked the way you constructed this piece. For random .. I wish I could do that at random. (sorry I'm still blinking about that note at the top ;) Very intense and powerful..I like the differences of the words as well. Almost as if they are equal, as to stand out from their descriptions, but neither is equal to the other. This may sound odd but I can taste the bitterness while reading through this piece too...I liked this poem very much...one can connect to it on more than one level. :)

[Rhianne Ney]

(; Thanks for the review, appreciated it

[gombeggar]

something very compelling about this poem of yers...well done

[Rhianne Ney]

Thank you very much for reading (:

[Tai Ryens]

Your chosen structure allures me. You, dear friend, have the intellect equal to that of a killer in a mystery crime novel. Mysterious, vivid, and all the more enticing. I like this.

[Rhianne Ney]

Really? I've a criminal mind now, that sure is surprising but oh noes... I'm not going to kill anyone, kay? haha, thanks for your thoughts though

[Tai Ryens]

Ha, not literally -w-
Hmn.. Well; I can only think of two occupations that have such intelligence: a brilliant writer, and a murderer. If I were to call you brilliant, you'd think I was exaggerating -w- You do , though.

[Rhianne Ney]

Haha, I was a fan of you too and actually I was just practicing different themes (:

[Carnation]

A nice, mysterious poem. It's like playing a game of cat and mouse, you don't know who is going to peep around the corners. In this instance I mean that you don't really know what is coming next. I like how you have emphasised key words or lines in the first stanza then make that one line into a whole new stanza.

Overall a great poem. I would love to hear more from you.

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for the nice feedback, (:

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I liked most of it and the way you set the agenda in the first stanza and 'flesh' it out in each subsequent stanza. Thought the final line lacked meaning and impact.

[Rhianne Ney]

Oh, I see, I'd work on that if I had the time thanks for the review (:

[Junert]

Well written . But poems such as this is hunting. Write bright.

[Rhianne Ney]

Whoa, thanks for the review and for reading (:

[Dr. Wood ?]

I bet this just flowed out, it reads that way....Very good it is too, I think we all have these feelings at some time in our lives

[Rhianne Ney]

Yes, I feel this at times when I just want to release everything

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Random you say? Thoughts? I think it's quite mysterious. I mean, why else would you just randomly start writing something dark and then, as though on a whim, choose certain key words to emphasize with color? A psych or, better yet, a psi-op would look beyond the poem. To them this would be a remote view through your mind to an unknown force, a point or points of origin that use this highway of thought and imagination that you have so willingly provided. But, and this is the mystery, if you are the highway then what or who is the destination? Which reader will read and be transformed; perhaps unknowingly? See, what happens, when you write strange poetry? {goose bumps} :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Lolz, I never thought of that (:

[Trigorin]

Not bad. I feel like some of your language choice could be better, and those horrible fonts you've used for certain words could definitely be eliminated, but the concept is good, and you've done a fairly good job expressing it.

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks and sorry for my mistakes

[Rochelle]

it was so good if only wolfgirl could do that :) love you wolfgirl

[Tea]

Your so NICE Zoanne!!!

:) lol

[Rochelle]

that's not my name it is Juliette Beau Pre

[Rhianne Ney]

Lol z, what's going on here?

[Tea]

lol hahaha nothing just two friends joking around lol hahahahaha

[Rhianne Ney]

Oh, I see (:

[Tea]

lol

[Rhianne Ney]

Hahah

[Tea]

:)

[Rhianne Ney]

(:

[PurpleQuartz]

Your way of writing is very unique and excellent! This is filled with dark emotions and is written very well.

[Rhianne Ney]

random thoughts (: