This Madness

random thoughts

“This Madness”

Let me divulge myself with this madness

Fill my heart with darkness

I’ll scream with loneliness

Wrap myself with sadness.

 

Fill my heart with darkness

I’ll ignore beauty and love the ugly

The demons will grip me

Yet I will let madness overwhelm me.

 

I’ll scream with loneliness

Hear the echoes of my pitiful cries

The wind will carry my shattered pieces

Pass it with a slow, haunting sound.

 

Wrap myself with sadness

Don’t look at me with pity

I’ll still return to the normal me.

Just now let me release this.

Author's Note

Here a new poem (:

Reviews

[Shy Girl]

Random?? I liked the way you constructed this piece. For random .. I wish I could do that at random. (sorry I'm still blinking about that note at the top ;) Very intense and powerful..I like the differences of the words as well. Almost as if they are equal, as to stand out from their descriptions, but neither is equal to the other. This may sound odd but I can taste the bitterness while reading through this piece too...I liked this poem very much...one can connect to it on more than one level. :)

[Rhianne Ney]

(; Thanks for the review, appreciated it

[Kyle Sky]

Greatly expressed and just deep in meaning. Truly a wnderful piece. It affects the reader by inducing a sense of sympathy and emotional interest. yet the athmosphere seems dark, there is a subtle lightness in its words. Gret literary piece.

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for stopping by and reviewing, dude (: It's nice of you

[Kyle Sky]

no problem. ill try to review more of your works...

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome and thanks a lot

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

You never break your word do you?

Anyway I think you pretty much know my thoughts here Ra-cha-errr- Yan-yan. Of course this is still... you know... :D

[Rhianne Ney]

Yan-yan petname again, huh? (: Lolz, I find that cute now

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

you should~ but then wait~! I almost called you Ra-chan ahohohoho

[Rhianne Ney]

Huh? Ra-chan? Where did that came from?

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

short for rasielis-chan

[Rhianne Ney]

Haha, I'm Rhianne here (:

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

hence yan-yan XD

[Luna Kusan]

Deep and intense. It speaks to my heart, soul and head. Touches every fiber of me that has been hidden behind a mask of pain and hurt. I like it a lot. please continue writting. Even though the poem is sad and dark, it connects with the inner anger, loneliness, all of it.

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for reading and your review is much appreciated

[Luna Kusan]

anytime

[Rhianne Ney]

(:

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes we just have to SCREAM!

let it out....you did that here..

i like the "love the ugly" part...yes.

jacob

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for reviewing, Sir (:

[Pax]

“Madness, Darkness, Loneliness, Sadness”

~ I’m too familiar with this ugly somewhat beautiful sides of life…. There is beauty hiding in darkness… Maybe because there is solitude in darkness that comforts someone, somehow an escape from all the madness, craziness other someone can offer… so we live with it making us engulf with all the loneliness and sadness much closer to our hearts…. I guess it’s good for contemplation at times but too much is never good… so to release something like this in our writes is a perfect drainage from the madness within…

This is a creative work kabayan…
Well expressed!

[Rhianne Ney]

That's right, the madness within that really needs to be released (:

[kublakhan27]

I would love to offer an in-depth review to every piece I read, but sometimes I can do nothing more than relate...this is one of those instances...I am totally enthralled by this piece...well done :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for reading, dude. This piece somehow reflects me also (:

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure :)

[Rhianne Ney]

It's my pleasure to read your works also (:

[kublakhan27]

:)

[Rhianne Ney]

;D

[Mike Emil]

yeah, madness, darkness, lonliness
all those things i have
i cuvet them dearly
that's why i keep duct tape handy

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for reading but that sure was something surprising to now

[Mike Emil]

to know

[Rhianne Ney]

Yeah, sorry for the wrong type, orz 0v0

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, reminds me of the latest poems from Herta Müller, who uses too this kind of clever, typographical kind of layout, so this is very good, well done.

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for the kind review, Sir (:

[Writer #00]

WOW! Instant favorite! I love the fonts and colors you chose to depict certain words/phrases and the structure/mystery of the poem in general. AMAZING!

0_o/100

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks, I've been practicing mystery a lot

[Writer #00]

So you have.

[Rhianne Ney]

(: It's kinda hard though, you have to be unpredictable

[Writer #00]

Yeah, or else your readers will know things before you reveal it to them. It's really hard, so I tend to stay away from writing it, but you're great.

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks, I'm still studying it though, the problem is that I get so much mystery reference that I'm forgetting romance even though that's where I'm actually better at TT A TT

[Writer #00]

Is that way most of your poems have something to do with love?

[Rhianne Ney]

yeah (: Though I'm not in love in real life (:

[Writer #00]

Imagination helps.

[Rhianne Ney]

(: Yeah, always

[Lozzie]

After some careful thinking and some passing of my laptop around... everyone surrounding me have a multitude of thoughts about this poem...


THIS IS FREAKING AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Well done!! This is really engaging and your techniques are AMAZING!!!! This is, if i am so bold to say, the best peom I have ever read!!!!!

WELL DONE!!

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for the compliment though I'm not used on getting a lot (: Thanks for reading and reviewing though, that's already enough already (:

[Lozzie]

You are welcome :) And if you keep writing amazing peices like this compliments will become jsut another part of your life :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Oh, I see, I'm not just used to it yet (: