A beautiful piece. I always like poems about oneself because before anyone else, we should know ourselves.
I only have few suggestions here. You have the rhyming aabb from the first up to the fourth stanza. But I found out that you broke it in the last one with abac format.
I think it would be better if:
"I put my thoughts on paper,
I am my world's designer,
With this, they will always reminisce
That someone like me exists."
I love this! I'll be adding this to my library for sure :D I sing in the shower as well, and i'm sure everyone has at one point of another. I often imagine myself in a music video as I am listening to a song on my iPod..lame I know XD anyway, great work once again :D
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
that's right, it feels lame sometimes but I do it ;D
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