A beautiful piece. I always like poems about oneself because before anyone else, we should know ourselves.
I only have few suggestions here. You have the rhyming aabb from the first up to the fourth stanza. But I found out that you broke it in the last one with abac format.
I think it would be better if:
"I put my thoughts on paper,
I am my world's designer,
With this, they will always reminisce
That someone like me exists."
I stare off into my own pieces of fantasy sometimes then write it down lest I forget all of the places I've been to, where I know they exist... This is a very charmng, lyrical verse that probably many people including me can relate to ;)
ahonhonhonhon.... This was for the assignment is it not?
Anywayz :) You're trademarks are still trademarks don't remove that k? So keep that up and at your last line that should be exists XD Anyway good so far
Wow that is sooooooooooo beautiful!!
I speak in front of mirror as well!!
Its really good.. I am putting it in my library!!
Good going Rhianne!!
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