Words that remain unspoken

Words that remain unspoken

A Poem by Rhianne Ney
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something I came up while I was waiting for my sis

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I sneaked out from the hospital to see you,
This is the fourth time and maybe the last time
I know how happy you are now,
I'm glad that you moved on.

You already cleared your head of me,
Now you're holding hands with another,
I'm happy to see your genuine smile once again,
I'm glad that you moved on.

I have to let you go, I hope you understand
I don't have much time left,
So would you please...
Continue smiling for me?

© 2012 Rhianne Ney


Author's Note

Rhianne Ney
it's not my feelings... I just wrote it...

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D: So tragic sounding... It makes me think of a girl just standing out in the rain, watching her ex run around with a new girlfriend, all smiley and giggly and stuff... And she's doing her best to be happy for them... *sniffle* This is so powerfully written...Well done. *respectful applause*

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhianne Ney

12 Years Ago

Hey there, emma, thanks a lot for reviewing. Are you still okay with Giotto? *laughs
Emma Lee-Riviera

12 Years Ago

Ahaha yeah. ;)



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Mia
This is beautiful. It’s remarkable that you can write something was so much emotion without having experienced it or the emotions. Your imagination is crazy, the good kind.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhianne Ney

12 Years Ago

thanks for the review! (:
Mia

12 Years Ago

It was such a pleasure :)
Rhianne Ney

12 Years Ago

You're kind ;D
It. Is interesting that you can magic poetry from your imagination rather from emotion or experience. Still there is emotion in this piece. Very creative! Easy read, flows well.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhianne Ney

12 Years Ago

I know it lacks emotion because I didn't experience it,,, but wait til I get a boyfriend.. just kidd.. read more
Your poem shows how true love can be proven by a self-sacrificing attitude. Well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhianne Ney

12 Years Ago

thanks a lot for the review! ;D
woohooo nice poem

Posted 12 Years Ago


Rhianne Ney

12 Years Ago

thank you (:
A interesting poem. I did like the desire of the poem. To create some kind of peace. A nice story in the poem with a very good ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhianne Ney

12 Years Ago

thanks Mr. Coyote...
Glad for you to stop by! ;D
interesting emote in the words even if it's not how u feel

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhianne Ney

12 Years Ago

thanks a lot for reviewing! I appreciate it ;D
Reminds me of paper planes again though I know it's different. Hahaha it's funny cause this is how I feel with you know who but lol I'm not dying hehehe

Anyway nice write :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Katherine Enma Pineapple

12 Years Ago

haha nakita ko kasi na may doujinshi sa DA ;)
Rhianne Ney

12 Years Ago

Haha ang cute non
Katherine Enma Pineapple

12 Years Ago

sobra hehehe ilagay nga sa phone hahaha

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Rhianne Ney
Rhianne Ney

Baguio City, the city of cold temperature, Philippines



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