This poem makes me mourn for all those who have been bullied or hurt by all the pathetic people who think they are above everyone else. It's hard to be optimistic when the world is as filthy as it is.
They say keep your friends close and your enemies closer, but I don't agree with that. I'd say keep your values close and God closer.
Deep poem you have here.
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2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
thank you for the review... that's right I can't agree with keep your enemies closer also... (:
First off, hello! Thank you for adding me as a friend! ^_^ I knew that Giotto could bring the world together. :)
Okay, on to the REAL review. Even just from the beginning, there is a soul signature of sadness. Like it hurts every time you remember it, a wound with no chance to heal. :( I hope this isn't about you personally, because it's far too upsetting to think of it that way... But if it is, just remember that no one can ever take away who you are if you don't let them.
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Hi... I found you somewhere while I was reviewing one's work..
This is written a year ago and .. read moreHi... I found you somewhere while I was reviewing one's work..
This is written a year ago and I am partially healed from this... Since it came back... But I wont let others hurt me again I've to lean on something greater...
Thanks for the review (:
Great write.
The world belongs to those who can sincerely cry like you.
And you can cry:
"I cry every night,
Wishing that everyone should just accept who I am,
I want to be accepted."
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I literally cried and physically cry, if you get what I mean... I am the type of person who wants t.. read moreI literally cried and physically cry, if you get what I mean... I am the type of person who wants to be accepted.. Thanks Zainul (:
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Thanks,Rhianne.
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You're welcome... thanks for your first review... I'm really glad to meet you
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I am very happy to meet you here too.
I am so grateful to you that you reviewed many of my poe.. read moreI am very happy to meet you here too.
I am so grateful to you that you reviewed many of my poems.
I am waiting for reviews... so I just checked the news feed and reviewed anyone's work... since I'm .. read moreI am waiting for reviews... so I just checked the news feed and reviewed anyone's work... since I'm free
Rhianne, You have enormous personal depth. You think about life, just don't be a victim of what others expect of you. Tred your own path you could be a really great poetess. I read your work and want to read more. There are only half a dozen poets I have discoverd thus far that have me entraped in their creativity-you 'child' are one.
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
thank you... I wrote this a year ago since I'm a victim of those verbal bullies who can only speak o.. read morethank you... I wrote this a year ago since I'm a victim of those verbal bullies who can only speak on my back but who can't stand in front of me... (:
thanks for your review..
I cry every night,
Wishing that everyone should just accept who I am,
I want to be accepted.
Sad, but true
It sometimes happens to me when I come back from school
Great poem! 100/100 =)
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It always happens to teenagers like us... I hope it inspired you... *friendly smile*
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Of course it did =)
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(: really love your avatar... It's like art is
flowing out of your head
Your actual strength is with in you, just be confident of yourself and do what you think best; trusting in God.
Lol you are just learning things and it is great you can write down your feelings so well in a poem.
I am sure others are jealous of you; good luck as you face reality first hand as a kid.
A basic need, besides food, water & shelter, is the need to be needed/wanted.
If those around you aren't accepting you as you are, you have choices...the possibilities can be endless! Your bio states you're 14. This is a very difficult time of each person's life, the steerage is so unclear. This too, will pass..
Remember to be true to yourself..
I truly enjoy your writing. Keep focus on what you like to do such as writing! Check out your local library-who knows, they just may have a writing club or similar programs for your age group. Good luck :)
Peace~ pat
it is a nice poem with a nice message.....i like the way you have written it.expressing your feelings of desperation in such an elegant way..some people fail to understand others and just want them to become like "them".it is really disgusting......i just ignore such peoples who can never understand me......i consider them as a hopeless case for me.....
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12 Years Ago
I wrote a poem related to this... the title is Carbon Copy
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And you're write those who can't endure wants to join them
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ohohoh.well i really don't mind joining in..if you think that a kid like me can probably be fit int.. read moreohohoh.well i really don't mind joining in..if you think that a kid like me can probably be fit into it.oh and that writing of yours.i'll read it for sure,,,
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oh... thanks
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don't say thanks.....sorry......but can i ask you that for what are you saying it????????
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I just thanked you because you reviewed "carbon copy"
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ohoho..gotcha.no problem........hey.do you like anime??????
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yeah.. check on my bio I noted a few faves
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;( :( :( no Naruto.......
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I'm not an avid fan... I hope you wont hate me because of it... BUt i surely liked it when I was you.. read moreI'm not an avid fan... I hope you wont hate me because of it... BUt i surely liked it when I was younger...
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what???? why on earth would i ever hate you just because you are not an anime fan......i only hate t.. read morewhat???? why on earth would i ever hate you just because you are not an anime fan......i only hate two people in my life:atheist and liars....please .don't say this line ever to me........
This poem makes me mourn for all those who have been bullied or hurt by all the pathetic people who think they are above everyone else. It's hard to be optimistic when the world is as filthy as it is.
They say keep your friends close and your enemies closer, but I don't agree with that. I'd say keep your values close and God closer.
Deep poem you have here.
Posted 12 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
thank you for the review... that's right I can't agree with keep your enemies closer also... (:
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