The road less Travelled (is there life on Mars?) triolets

a touch of dyspepsia, perhaps?

Such barren fields of verse eye sees
the only crop is withered angst
all fertilised by me me me,
such arid lines of verse to read,
 
Aye' an' here's the rub writ on sleeves
and at the risk of seeming crank
seek outside self just look and see
then you just might write, poetry.
 
I swear I'd see more life on Mars
mute robots squeak much sweeter tunes
no trilling larks but lasting marks
than those writ here without a spark,
 
no canals for sure so no barques
no maid Thuvia too, no Barsoom,
it seems to me the truth is stark
dead worlds have some meaningful tunes.
 
As Frost contemplated his twain ways
and '' took the one less travelled by ''
I hope for echoes from that day
because Frost studied his two ways,
 
and so it should be this I say
although I sigh the self same sighs,
look further than your angsty day
and take '' the one less travelled by. ''

Author's Note

a Trio of Triolets

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Liking some of the lines here very much

All fertilised by me, me, me

A message contained in your lines here Rew. It appears the angsty, me, me poetry is getting to you, although you too have sympathy for the crap heaped on people in their daily lives :) A suggestion that better poetry may be writ by deviating from the self and taking another road.

I hope I can get this spinning on the forum. It deserves to be read dear Rew. I thoroughly enjoyed the fine composition, light humour and the message.

Chris

[Rew]

Ah, Chris thank you very much for your sympathetic reading of this, this, mean spirited thing.
And my apologies for not answering earlier.
For some unknown reason I missed your comment on this one ( perhaps it's cos I took it off)
I've just grovelled to Jamila for the same reason (not answering a comment) and I guess it saves me right for being so mean spirited. Sorry sorry and sorry.
I'm pulling the covers back over my head now and hiding... ✋🌹

[Chris Shaw]

Wow, that is the most stupendous apology on WC I've ever received, and it really wasn't needed :)))

[Rew]

Ok. Cheers.

[Rew]

Looks like Jamila's gone.