Where There's Smoke

An older poem re-posted

The state of my mind              


          as I think of you

Floating, swirling, spinning        


                                    In smoky soft gray hue

Reviews

[recantichize]

i love that you chose to make the form of the poem match the content. i love the mystery, the impermanence, yet the lingering nature of this whole piece. beautifully done. thank you.

[Monique]

sexy, without using sex, nice!

[Vivere ad mihi, mi Deus]

I could not think of anyway this could be any better... I am at a loss of words, this is a beautiful piece.

[Bethany Woody]

Short, sweet, and to the point. Sometimes those are the best kind of poems. The reader doesn't get bogged down in the language of a piece and miss the message.
Needs possible proof reading for puncuation, I'm terrrible with this so I could be wrong, :). Floating, swirling, spinning. The commas let the reader pause between each word, different impact for the piece, a little more serious/dramatic????

[Nautili]

I love the title because it suggests the fire within. It is concise but perfect-every word. Your word choices on the third line-"Floating swirling spinning" give it this wonderful otherworldly feel, like an alluring dream, or a springtime fantasy.

[hmm]

This is amazing and beuatiful.
Awesome write!

[Cassie Fraga]

wow!!! I have to say the simplicity jus took me there... AWESOME!!! I love your work!!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

absolutely beautiful, oh so soft......

[Emerald Seas]

Nice picture to go with the poem!
I instantly thought of a woman in a long flowing dress dancing around a large open ball room. Excellent imagery from your words.

[Blue Ivory]

The pictures you select are just beautiful! And I love it when your poems are very short. The way you've decorated it goes perfectly with the last 2 lines. And if I stare at the screen for a while, it feels like the words are actually floating and swaying in air.