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Re-posting of an older Poem

I want to find the gate
into your secret garden

Steal my way
into your dreams
and dance
with you in reverie

I want to be
the artist
of your pleasure and
the strength
of hope unseen

I want to please you
with every move and
show an understanding
of your sensitivity

open your heart before me
and receive my strength

I’m yours

Author's Note

I made some changes.

Reviews

[Cassie Fraga]

ooooooo.... a blissful want.... a longing to be... this was just an AMAZING WRITE!!! took my breath away... GREAT JOB!!

[Blue Ivory]

First of all, LOVE the picture! It's a really sweet poem. I honestly love it. Lacks depth in some places, but you've made it work =) I like the effect it puts. BRILLIANT last line

[Amanda Lee/ Isolated Dr..]

on a more positive note; I love the word play with "steel" (gate)

There are some other really strong lines in here ;
"show an understanding of your sensitivity."
"the artists of your pleasure."
My favs.

[Amanda Lee/ Isolated Dr..]

The picture with this poem is sooooo nice, i love it.
If you're up for a challenge; think you can dig a little deeper with this one .
Great write; just wanted MORE