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Re-posting of an older Poem

I want to find the gate
into your secret garden

Steal my way
into your dreams
and dance
with you in reverie

I want to be
the artist
of your pleasure and
the strength
of hope unseen

I want to please you
with every move and
show an understanding
of your sensitivity

open your heart before me
and receive my strength

I’m yours

Author's Note

I made some changes.

Reviews

[Revery]

some possible continuations. Let's spend minutes, hours and weeks and years together. Let's make history and magic together. Let's live on the simple side of life with lazy days doing nothing together. Let's only venture out to feel new horizons, nibble on exquisite food in chic bistros, and people watch in exotic places. I'll study and know the simple things that make you feel happy, make you feel loved. Everytime I kiss you I will consider it challenge and art to make it the most passionate we've ever shared.

[Frieda P]

This has a whole lot of impact. I feel your strength in every word, I like this a lot. Well done, kudos my friend.

Did you mean 'steal'?

[Revery]

Yes, meant steal, lol. Thank you, for reading and giving a sweet complement.

[Frieda P]

I wasn't sure if you were playing on words there with the strength aspect. :)

[Revery]

Hmm, maybe I should leave it, lol.

[Frieda P]

haha, now I've confused you! ;-)

[Revery]

I'm easily confused. Like you probably didn't already get that?!?!

[Frieda P]

lol, you are not alone, join the club!

[Revery]

Where's link, I'm in!

[Emerald Seas]

Hmm... I never left a review on this before - How did I miss that?
Beautifully articulated with resounding passion and a deeply felt love in each line. Simply stated but with elegance. Well done!

[Revery]

Thank you. I wrote this ages ago while I was still ignorant and not jaded, lol, jk. I think that type of passion is somewhere inside.

[Pax]

i find this breath-takingly beautiful...
its show how much is your love to this person...
the strengh of the poem is your passion for something more...
all love...
awesome job my friend!

[Revery]

Thank you Pax. Seems like ages since I wrote this.

[rnuff]

Wow love this exspecially the 3rd stanza.
Beautiful write

[Revery]

Thank you so much for reading and your kind comments.

[rnuff]

no problem

[Scandalous]

This is very beautiful, very honest, doesn't need to be resticted to those over eighteen, this is one that could be shared with any age so that every person could enjoy.

~ Scandalous

[patricia]

i like how you emphasise wanting to please the other rather than yourself, i like your use of the word ...artist and dance in this it create good images. Caring about a persons sensitivity and coming from a place of imparting strength shows the maturity in this write. Amazing picture. Beautiful write.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Beaaauutiful!!! This made me smile because it's so sweet and romantic. I love how one is willing to give to another with such affection... oh the joy to truely give to that person...

Heartfelt and simply magnifient. This is wonderful!!

[Ephialtes Jones]

Good stuff. stanza 2, line 1, I think should be steal.

I really enjoyed this piece. Very expressive and passionate. Good stuff.
EJ