Illusion of me

The need to express myself

I ache to splash my blood on the page,
to pour myself out, wonder, love and rage.
I am neatly put together, attempting perfect you see.
Few know the complex paradoxes of me.

Reviews

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'I ache to splash my blood on the page'...the whole poem...loved it!

[Revery]

Your attention to my poetry is flattering dear, than you so much.

[Antonio Valentino]

Since nobody is perfect, I'm glad im a nobody.. :)

they say writing is simple.. you just cut your finger and let the words flow..

yess.. the neat ones.. i never did totally trust them hahah.. probably because im not as organized as i should be.. ... im hoping that being compicated just adds character otherwise im in the same dinghy with you my friend..

keep splashing on the pages ok, but use ink instead of blood..

good writers are hard to find.. and we need you around here, and eveywhere..

:)

[Revery]

Ya, the pain and mess made me rethink this method, lol.
Thanks man, appreciate you reading and commenting.

[Antonio Valentino]

haha..anytime my friend :)

[brigid]

the first 2 words grabbed me by the throat and drew me in...what wonderful contradictions and emotions in just 4 lines....and i choke on '4' lines....

[Revery]

Thank you so much. I have been surprised at how popular this has been, I spit it out in a few moments, but it was straight out of my soul.

[brigid]

those quickies are sometimes the very best....can tell it was soul driven.

[Yellow Butterfly]

You've just escaped from my thoughts....... this is exactly how I feel and the only way I can express this paradoxes of myself is in my writes..... have yet to write about rage.


Loved this :O)

[Revery]

Ya, I know, so many of us here relate so well. It's amazing. The anger? Me, either, I guess because there is more lust than anger, and there is a hell of a lot of anger. lol.

[Yellow Butterfly]

I don't have an angry bone in my body.... so I think.... only rears it's ugly head behind the wheel of my car... lol (prefer to walk these days)

[Pax]

very well expressed emotions, we have many faces like you said complex paradoxes of me"us". great job.

[Revery]

Yes absolutely, I had this poem in mind when I reviewed yours. Thank you.

[Pax]

me too (it was on my mind thinking the similarity) and your welcome.

[Belle]

There is so much in this piece that I so love!!
First, it has the true power of the fascinating four lines.
Second, the excellent use of the word blood as an extended metaphor.
Third, wonderful rhyming scheme.
The theme is universal.
And I admire the poetic persona for choosing the intellectual value over emotional value, for preserving not the "gentleman's dignity"
but the self dignity in a deeper sense.
This piece is sublime dear Revery!

[Revery]

What a strong eloquent review you've given me, thank you soo very much.

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

This looks like an honest self portrait. It is not too narcissistic and it has a lot of self confidence hidden in it. Perfectionism or looking perfect are not the same thing. I think most true poems are sincere self portraits.

[Revery]

I appreciate your review. I take it as a strong compliment, thank you.

[SashaBella]

"I am neatly put together, attempting perfect you see" the way we cover pain and loss so the world cannot see how extreme we feel and what lengths we wish to go to relieve the pain. I can feel the edge to this poem.

[Revery]

Thank you so much, your insight is impressive.

[Miranda Richard]

Great job!

[Revery]

Thank you Rayne. cool pic

[Natasha]

Short and effective. In this case, less is more. Wonderful write.