Sapphire

Downtown on city streets,
chic bars with movie star
personalities and seats full of stories.

I linger there to observe
and
I scribble scraps of thoughts
on scratches of paper.

Sapphire blue dreams in streams
of beautiful faces and in
the intricate lace of loneliness. 

Where everyone escapes
the small curses that life inflicts.

Eternities inside lifetimes inside moments.

Lovers and liers and dreams
set on fire lingering here
in deep blue sapphire.

Reviews

[rnuff]

deep and wonderful, I enjoyed the read.

[Revery]

Thank you.

[Pax]

every moments is anther inspiration... where we are it doesn't matter for inspiration comes when we least expected... like this one.. a wonderful work in impressionist style painted words... simply beautful... i like how you describe the place it gives an suiting ambiance even though alone...
Great work my friend...

[Revery]

Thank you Pax I appreciate you reading and I appreciate your kind comments.

[ChaoticSoul]

This has such a lyrical feel. I want it to be a song! I would listen to it all the time. The lines along with the image that sapphire immediately evokes just fit so well together. It also reminded me of how we writers often find ourselves in places and all of a sudden are struck by inspiration and just have to write down our thoughts. Really loved this!

[Revery]

Thanks. What type of song do you hear it as? I have heard anything from jazz to opera sung at this establishment. I appreciate you reading and commenting.

[ChaoticSoul]

I can definitely see the jazzy feel. I listen to indie rock and alt rock all the time, and I was able to picture it as something like that, maybe even like a Jimmy Eat World song, so the poem's ability to fit into so many different genres shows even further its wonderful flexibility and relatability!

[Revery]

Thanks for writing again. :)

[CS]

Blue has always been a color of emptiness to me. I am not saying this in a negative way but a pure way. This reminds me of being downtown in LA, sitting outside of a cafe and scribbling in a journal while strangers walk by. There are so many people there just itching to be "somebody" and pretending to be something they are not. It can be a very lonely feeling. I liked this poem very much. It was like a photograph of a moment in time.

[Revery]

Yes, so much of that is what I was experiencing and trying to capture. Thank you for reading and commenting.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

"I linger there to observe
and
I scribble scraps of thoughts
on scratches of paper.

Sapphire blue dreams in streams
of beautiful faces and in
the intricate lace of loneliness."~ I sense a melancholy emotion within the loneliness, yet there is an underlying excitement within the adventure of the "Lovers and liars and dreams set on fire". The Sappire thoughts are intriguing... Well done! Lovely work. :)

[Revery]

Thank you Robbie. Always love your reviews. :)

[Nautili]

"Eternities inside lifetimes inside moments." I love that line....so true, what legacy will our moments, the summation of them, bring? Sapphire memories.....Thoughts to ponder.

[Revery]

Thank you Nautili. :) Always special to have you read and comment on my poems.

[Corset]

I am trying desperately to leave a review on this wonderful write, the computer is giving me fits all of a sudden, as if it thinks I should keep my opinions to myself :) sorry if you get a billion reloads from it. Anyway , I like the feeling of sitting among the glitter of life and observing the "what" that's underneath it. Fav part was "Where everyone escapes
the small curses that life inflicts.

Eternities inside lifetimes inside moments.

Lovers and liers and dreams
set on fire lingering here
in deep blue sapphire."

Liars might be misspelled though it doesn't take away from the strophic feel of it, musical, euphorically designed, resigned to the cruelties of life although they may be dressed in diamonds and shine shine shine, they are still so lost beneath. Your writing makes me pine for several someones that were not so glittery on the surface but are starlight underneath.

[Revery]

Wow Corset, your review is rich. I love the depth and thought you put into my poem. I think all your observations are on the mark and capture all I intended. Thank you.

[Corset]

I am so pleased to know, thank you, but it was effortless, it's where it took me ;)

[Damien Davison]

Stunning, great use of words to create imagery and provoke thoughts.
"Eternities inside lifetimes inside moments."
Great write, I thoroughly enjoyed it!

[Revery]

Thanks. Context of where we all fit and play a part. Thanks for reading and commenting.

[Revery]

Again, here I'm awestuck,

"I scribble scraps of thoughts
on scratches of paper."

This is a thing I do daily, without my
Paper notebook, and my
and my silver fountain pen
with black ink
I am nowhere......

It's so nice to see a writer who does the same.
A poignant, and brilliant piece G.

Greetings from over seas!

Elisa

[Revery]

Thank you Elisa. I was drinking a beer in Sapphire, a restaurant and bar in the city, when I wrote this.

Isn't that amazing, what names, places and meanings can do to us as writers? when I was this summer on my spanish island I did the same, somethimes, just those small precious things give the most of inspiration, truly brilliant. :)

[Revery]

I think it has taught me the strong connection between experience and inspiration. Which might seem obvious, but this new setting for writing brought about a different type of write for me. Make sense?

Yes, it makes really sense! you (and that sounds maybe odd) but learned to let every impulse in, to build a whole high sensitive realm, for me it's easy, because I'm a HSP, but for a lot of people even my hubby it is to learn... every little clue, every little point of view, can make, and give you inspiration... it's wonderful to walk a colorful market, when one only sees people, but an open soul, smells, sees, a thousand colours, a thousand objects, and a lot more, (when at home totally tired and crazy and need to let land all) but it gives the best writes after.... so it makes sense dear! :)

[Revery]

Oh, I totally understand exactly what your saying.

And that is so interesting, once you control it, you're master of it..... :D