The Beautiful Miss

That moment

 

That one shining moment

 

I saw you

 

Not for the first time

 

but I saw you

 

Now

 

The air was alive

 

One of those mornings

 

where the sun

 

danced through

 

large sanctuary windows.

 

You!

 

You were glorious

 

The sun dress,

 

The dancer’s posture

 

The long stunning hair

 

You were stunning

 

perfection! 

 

It was the moment

 

That changed everything

 

Now

 

Race across the years

 

The daisies

 

The kiss in the rain

 

The vows

 

The babies

 

And

 

You and me. 

Reviews

[Little Whisper]

This is just sooooo romanticaly sweet!! :)

[Revery]

Thank you dear.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Beautifully written ! I love how the beginning is unfolded slowly, as if time stopped and then, life speeds up and whisks you two away into life.

[Revery]

I didn't think about that, but that is like that and it really works.

[J.V. Stanley]

This is entirely sweet and the simplicity in its form adds a bit of flair to it as well. Being long-winded myself I have a very difficult time writing short verses or short poetry, I am one that thrives on detailed description. Its nice though to read something true and sweet and straight to the point. Bravo

[Revery]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed.

[smilysoly]

I like the way you describe it!

[Revery]

Thank you for reading and reviewing. :)

[The Random Writings Of ..]

Oh - Such beauty!!!! Such simplicity, but that what makes this GREAT! The love that runs though the piece is pleasure, a future, a capture of past, present and future. This is so lovely! Thank you for sharing!

[Revery]

Thank you for your comments. I love your comments and observations. :)

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

Your welcome! :)

[Pax]

beautiful!

[Revery]

Thank you Willyam.

[Half Dream]

Sweet! :)

[Revery]

Thank you dear. I appreciate you reading.

[Half Dream]

You're very welcome! I really enjoyed reading this. :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

that moment I first TRULY saw you........not the FIRST time I saw you period.......I love this......and how your poem goes on into the history of the lovers. Wonderful!

[Revery]

Thank you Neva.

[Yheela]

Very beautiful, precious.

[Revery]

Thank you so much.

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The emotion in this wonderful work of art is very moving. A pleasure to read, revery :)

[Revery]

Thank you Lynn, I take that as a huge compliment.