The Grove

A poem a wrote a couple months ago. Thought I'd just share it :)

As I trotted down an unnoticeable path
dwelling for a hearty laugh
I strolled across this questionable grove
embarked with the spirit of a beautiful dove

clouds swirled over this hopeful dove
enhancing the beauty of this magical grove
but the dove huffed a defeated sigh
ready to take another fly

"do not fly little bird"
"your vision is blurred"
"stay with me"
"and truly be free..."

a sad smile broke through my face
as I entered the landscape of the wonderful phrase
the true magic of this grove
the phantasms of the world, oh they broke

the dare to smile when skies turn gray
dare to dive off into the gray
I posses the true power
to marvel at things at which others cower...

my eyes opened; the dove was still there
watching intently; disposed its fear
"you have come this far, do not defy"
and yet again, I closed my eyes

"a sad smile, have you heard?"
"the longing of change, little bird?"
a sad smile, the attempted reach
a hazy nostalgia, that I wish to breach

but I have been at a fruitless search
and when I saw... my stomach lurched
for all my dreams reside by this grove
"come catch a glimpse, my little dove"

the dove too closed its eyes
and so we ventured into my mind
vision after vision, dream after dream,
oh so sad... or so they seemed...

yet the dove seemed unsatisfied
reveling at the things it once despised
finally, we opened our eyes
in a glistering unison; where the truth lies

the dove huffed another sigh
a sigh of contempt, a sigh of peace
"now little dove, now you see?"
"let us treasure our reverie"

Reviews

[R Smith]

excellent writing, good rhyming and flow, you could write the stuff of dreams, well done :)

[Sami Khalil]

the dove too closed its eyes
and so we ventured into my mind
vision after vision, dream after dream,
oh so sad... or so they seemed...
I applaud your poem in glistening uni-some. So much to appreciate...:)................

[Jason Yang]

Thanks! I'm glad you can enjoy it as much as I can :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..........

[Terrence Chang]

Nice one Jason. It is really good. Keep posting. Thank you workman for sending me a read request to land me over here.

[Jason Yang]

Thank you! Tell wordman thanks!

[Chain of Hearts]

I loved it! It had a very classical feel to it-I enjoyed it immensely. Great descriptions! To be honest, this is a beautiful poem that really captivates you once you start reading.
Keep on writing!
-LK

[Jason Yang]

Thank you for such kind words! -Jason

[Valentine]

A very nice first on the sight. I am hoping to see many more rights coming from you. Valentine

[Jason Yang]

Thank you. I appreciate your efforts of sharing my poem :)

[nazia]

Amazing vision and very interesting execution.. great job :)

[Jason Yang]

Thank you! I hope you will also feel my visions in my upcoming poems

[KWP]

nice like a lullaby

I like the conversation :)

[Jason Yang]

Thank you for the nice review!

[wordman]

sounds like a true freedom to me,great write

[Jason Yang]

Thank You!! First review! :)

[wordman]

you`re welcome