What Do You Drink?

Thirsty
Craving to be quenched
Waiting to be satisfied by something
But only if it tastes just right

College girls
Your twisted tea is too sweet for me
Sunglasses and sundresses
Parties by the pool
Choruses of shrill voices singing along to their favorite song
Teehehehe
What kind of a man would drink that s**t?
Not this one

Lushes
Slinking around from stool to stool
A new seat in every man's lap
"Come on, buy me a drink."
"What, you don't like how I look?"
Your loyalty lasts as long as a liquor shot
No thanks
I'll save my money
And I'll save my pride

Locals
You sit in a booth off to the side
Sipping your cans of pabst
Judging the world through the view of your hipster glasses
Clinging to your unoriginality for a sense of identity
You're too predictable
And I'm too mainstream for you to talk to

Then there's you
Laughing in the face of mediocrity
A tongue that spits fire
After a shot of fireball
Handing out "f**k yous" to anyone you please
Holding your alcohol
And holding your own
You have a taste of rebellion
And I'd love to take a sip

Reviews

[Reed Marcotte]

I had a feeling as I read this there would be a special someone. I felt like I was sitting in a bar, in a zone, alienated from all the noise and action copping opinions about the patrons and BAM... There's the reason I even come here. idk if that makes sense but I feel like I've been there before in reading this. Brought me back cuz I quit drinking a while ago. So nice job on dragging me into a quick little journey of my past which most people can relate to, I think, because it's a very common setting no matter what category or age group we fit into. Thanks for the ride and the friend request. Looking forward to the next one.....peace

[Timothy Ryan]

The bar scene is one I know very well. I think anyone who has ever been out can relate to some part of it. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review. I'll have to check out some of your stuff next time I do some reading on here.

[katie]

I’m a little late to the party, but you’re welcome!

[katie]

It’s funny how much a drink can tell us about someone’s personality. The shot of fireball seems fitting for the person you’re talking about in the last stanza. I love it, well done!

[Timothy Ryan]

I almost forgot I wrote this. Long time ago but good memories haha. Thank you for taking the time to read it.

[Scott De Buitléi..]

Really enjoyed this, very well written. Well done.

[Courtney Hough]

very clear picture of our world today

[Timothy Ryan]

Thank you for taking the time to read my s**t. I'm going to check out some of your work soon.

[Sammie]

This poem I enjoyed greatly. For more than one reason.
First I connect to the unsatisfied hopefulness of the bar scene. But I see more than just that in these words. I see a man wanting something or someone new in life. Tired of the same ole same ole bad decisions were made. We all have made a few. But to desire that rich new flavor of the one that catches you completely off guard. That is what you waited for. At least that is how i see it. I could be completely off base here. Forgive me if I am. But I enjoyed it greatly. Very well done.

[Timothy Ryan]

Thank you so much for the kind words. You pretty much nailed it. Just a guy who was looking at his options, seeing what he wanted and judging them based on what they drank haha. Thanks again and be good.

[Sammie]

Always. I would say the same for you but you can't take a wild mustang. ;) just let him run. Lol.

[Nessly]

I'm not much for parties or bar scenes, but you've described them well based on what I've seen via television.

I personally think the narrator judges these women before getting to know them, but I guess we all have our faults.

Good write.

[Timothy Ryan]

Thank you much for taking the time to read and review. That's exactly how I wanted him to come across. Thanks again.

[Nessly]

It's well written.

You're welcome.

[Lyn Anderson]

An interesting transition from one to the next.

[Timothy Ryan]

Thank you for taking the time to read and review.

[sleepyhair]

I like this so much! You're totally a diamond in the rough.
I really do like this. It's going to stick with me... I'll probably end up writing or painting something because of you.

[Timothy Ryan]

That's incredible. Thank you. Gotta show me the painting once it's finished haha.

[Papaya]

Sounds like a winner to me. :) Cheers!
I liked the profiling, it was fun to read this one.

[Timothy Ryan]

Thank you so much. You're motivating me to get even bigger and better than i already am.

[Papaya]

Well then, a toast to growth?

[Timothy Ryan]

Absolutely. First round is on me.

[barleygirl]

This is very clever & well-written with well-chosen profiles, each fleshed out in a recognizable & vivid way, showing instead of telling. I'm not a fan of such a judgmental approach to our fellow humans, but at least the narrator knows what he likes -- which is really no different from the earlier damning profiles of predicable stereotypes. The narrator is all high-and-mighty, like all the other choices are inferior, but his choice is equally narrow-minded and boring. I think I mentioned this to you on another review, about how it's a mark of good writing to develop unlikeable characters.

[Timothy Ryan]

Again, thank you for taking the time to read and review. I didn't exactly have a way I wanted the narrator to come across when I wrote it. It was just a guy who knows what he wants. But a guy who picks the type of girl he likes based on what she drinks probably doesn't have the best values himself. I feel like I just went through a therapy session with myself re-reading that last sentence haha. You're the best for reviewing as much of my stuff as you have. Check back on Thursday. I'll have a story that has some good characters for once.

[barleygirl]

I try to give an honest reflection, becuz often as writers, we really have no idea how a story or a character is coming across. People in general are pretty unlikeable to me, so it's no surprise there will always be many unlikeable characters drawn like this. Feel free to read request me on your new story.

[Timothy Ryan]

Awesome. Thank you so much.