True - but what's the point? I think this is too brief to keep it as just a descriptive sort of poem, and if you want to make it longer you'd need to add in some kind of narrative or story, or at least expound on the topic a little more. Feels like a good start, but there's not much substance as of yet.
True - but what's the point? I think this is too brief to keep it as just a descriptive sort of poem, and if you want to make it longer you'd need to add in some kind of narrative or story, or at least expound on the topic a little more. Feels like a good start, but there's not much substance as of yet.