Detroit: City Of The Fallens

Just one of the moments when you can be at the wrong place at the wrong time.

 

Walking Throughout The City In The Night

There's Nothing Much Of The Pretty Sight

 

It's Nothing Compare To The Actual Angles

On The True Stories About "City Of Angels"

 

Everywhere, Anywhere I Go To Walk Around

There's Nothing That Special To Talk About

 

There's Nothing Much To Look Around At

Especially For That Weeks Old Dead Cat

Laying Next To The Dumpster By The Alley

Nearby The Junk Piles From The Death Valley

Next To The Cheapskate Escort Services

Probably Are In The Need For Some Fixes

 

The Mindless, Homeless People Are Always

Getting In The Middle Of The Traffics' Ways

 

BAM!

 

Look Like It's Time To Mark One Out

Of The Total Population Counts

 

What's The Breaking Point

To Stick Around In The Joint?

 

Author's Note

Welcome to the dark side of the Detroit, Michigan where I'm not proud to be living around there.

Reviews

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Eerie. It must be pretty nerve-wrecking to hang around there. :P Your description of this place reminds me of many other locations that have a somewhat similar condition. Homeless, gangs, etc. I'm sure we've all heard it before, especially in the news. I'm sure there are dark sidees to every major city.

Let's get to the structure. ;) Like always, it stays true to your style. A neat bundle of couplets. Clever rhyming, I must say. The last two couplets, I'll admit, seem to have a bit of humor... whether there was suppose to be or not. lol... Satire...

Overall, great job. ^^ This seems like quite a personal poem, considering your footnote about living around there.

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Lia]

I love it!!! Great piece, made me picture it like a comic...really good write! Thanks for sharing x

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow you sure showed the ugly side of big city life... I can see why you wouldn't be proud of the city... excellent work of bringing visuals to the readers mind.

[darkgurl]

WOW! how horrible, but written well.

[K. Aurora]

I used to think that one could find beauty in anyplace. After reading this, I'll scratch Detroit from my list of places to some day visit.
You have definantly brought across a harsh and dark truth to one of our countries urban centers. I recently read the Michigan overall has the highest number of murders attatched to it; since the dawn of the industry in this country. With your piece, I wonder if it's the place or if it's some higher power making it that way.

A very shivering write.

[Michelle Lea]

You better be careful Mr. Joseph - Michael! It's sounds so scary, bleak and a place you wouldn't want to be alone in the dark!! I love the flow and the BAM wow, awesome write as always. (-:

[Cece]

motor city aint
wat itz use 2 b
much of assembly
has moved to ky

where is motown
even tooltime cant fix
studios not there anyway

any that could be prideful
has moved out once was
the mural of industrial of
beginning of 20th century

my how things change
in just a little 24 hours
description paints such a black
the picture is dark