Prison Of Damnation

If you really think that you can handle anything in order to survive? Think again.

 

On The Very First Day As A New Fish

 

With Flies And Maggots On The Dish

 

Been Walking Around Inside The Bricks

 

Sensing Nothing Else But The Wicked

 

Preparing For The Unexpected Tricks

 

Everywhere, The Eyes Are Twitching

 

As Guards Are Easily Trigger-Itching

 

There Are No Hope, But Only To Wish

 

To Be Dead From The Quick Pinches

 

Yet, There Is Only One Way Which

 

Is To Become A Tattle-Tale Snitch

 

From Throwing All Of Those Pitches

 

But, The Systems Have A Few Glitches

 

Recieved The Deep Cuts And Stitches

 

Then, Got Buried Alive In The Ditch

 

Ain't Life A Real Disappointing B***h?

 

Author's Note

I know, it's too much of the rhyming, so don't mind me.

Reviews

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This was great!!! The flow and ebb of this piece was Great so don't be emarassed or whatever for rhyming...Personally I love poems that have a little rhyming or a lot!!!! But back to the poem...My favorite line was "Ain''t life a disappointing B***h" lol...That was hilarious yet seriously true!
Thanx for sharing,
The one and Only Tragic Mistress

[Barbara Walker]

I think this is an interesting poem, like the structure and the numerous rhymes make me think of the monotony of the days in there. One correction-There IS no hope" not "are". I enjoyed reading it.

[Ahmad Alhour]

"Ain't Life A Real Disappointing B***h?"... maybe!

This one I would rather call a master piece of most of your writings!
The rhyme is pretty good and listed words fit the meaning and suits their places to represent this story with it's combination of thoughts!

Simply sweet one.

[Lia]

Really fantastic write, I like the flow and pace. Thanks for sharing x

[darkgurl]

This is just wonderful and cute, Like this write, well said and expressed "Ain't Life A Real Disappointing B***h?" Just love this line here so true. so very true! I wrote this poem in at my other site called "Ain't life a b***h" I ought to paste it over here. Well written write, from your fan.

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Lol That's cool! This poem reminds me a lot of Purgatory-- you know, the limited suffering of Hell. Perhaps this poem and the Catholics' idea of Purgatory is proof that Hell is on Earth. :P

Anyways, I like this poem. The rhyming was very entertaining in my opinion. It kept me reading. ^^ The first four verses give me chills, so that's definitely a good sign that you've created some nice imagery with this poem.

The end of the poem (i.e. the final verse) gives us a funny and familiar final thought. lol "Ain't Life a Real Dissapointing B***h?" Yeah, that's something that would give people nice finishing touch of this poem. :) Great job!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood